Allen was a skilled Pokemon Trainer who who had traveled much of the world, wanting to see it's wonders and maybe one day find a place to call home. But then, Arceus was freed from his prison and Allen was swept away to a strange new world.
Now Allen has to find his team to be sure their safe and discover what in the world has happened to the Human Race.
An expansion of zeusdemigod131 story
A New World, A New Way
Edited by SilverWolfFTW
Cover art by: No one at the moment
Rated Teen for mild language.
Chapters (27)
Not bad. I do like the little bit with the Taillow's going berserk on the closeminded noble(methinks he and Hastings would make great friends)
4887245 Feather Storm isn't a noble just an idiot. but hey ya never know
Yet another side story I wont read. Anyways, did you message Zeus (Writer of the Original story) and get his permission for this?
( I don't mean to a dick about this. I don't read any of the other side stories, and I have to asked. )
4887292 Of course i did. To be honest you beat me to the location i originally wanted. lol So I had to think up a new one... But I think yours turned out better then mine would have.
4887309 Thank you for that. I myself have been getting slip reactions from it. Other its good and the story is amazing or that it's bad and I should be killed for writing it.
4887309 Heh if I ever did one of these spinoffs in a certain area, even if other teams were there my character's personality would mimic my own. The only place I normally come out of my shell is when I'm among friends or on the internet so in real life I stay away from attention, preferring to keep to the background. You'd be amazed at what you overhear sometimes.
4887333 Well Buck those guyz!!! Haters gonna hate
4887334 Do work your proud of
4887348 Already doing that on a separate project :3 Just posted chapter 2 of it today.
4887292
Hey Bubba, you DO realize that the way you word it sounds like you think this story stinks, right?
Good start. Its certainly interesting
But needs a bit of proofreading, as there are a few errors. No big deal though
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my normal guy is M.I.A.
4887370 Oh... well sorry.
4887429 it's not your fault
Nice start, was wondering when will someone would pic the horse pokemon for this world of ponies.
4887429
No problem. Just be careful next time
Ew, you really should have gotten an editor before uploading.
Or at least proofread the description...
Get an editor and I'll read.
Shiny rapidash have silver flames only ponyta have blue
Great 1st chapters. Have a fav and a like.
When this new universe came to be, I thought there would be more horse like pokemon characters as the lead. That's not the case. You're the first person to actually have the main character a rapidash. I'll give you props!!!! Please continue!!!!
4912909 Idk exactly what my fellow authers are thinking. But it could be they thought it was too easy a direction to go.
4912973 well looks like you're the first to reap the benefits of choosing rapidash
You're mad on me... isn't it? ....just.... sorry... Please. Say something. A question hurts more than a simple 'i hate you'
4936879 wat? Where's this coming from? I'm not angry, I've just been busy as hell.
4937722 oh... Okay. Thanks. Man. A whole relief. Sorry again...
This fic is pretty good! Please continue. If you get enough views maybe Zeus will make your characters cameo in his fic!!!
4942890 Thx
If I could get Allen to show up in the main fic; I'd prolly have a freaking heart attack
Well ... um ... ... That happened.
This...won't end well. How is someone like Loki even in Equus?
Huh... Doctor whooves in the new world universe. Please continue!!!
I wonder what would happen if the Doctor met a Bronzong...
Yay
4956910 Loki's not Evil he's just a dick
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I see. Btw, I'm working on editing your earlier chapters, but I've also got stuff I need to do for the other authors too, so I might take a while. Sorry
4958173 no worries
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Thanks
Please told me he is David Tenman Doctor... Please!
That been said: nice chapter, didn't thought the Doctor would appear, well, as the Doctor.
Uh, can ghost's enter the Tardis? I mean, it is Time Lord tech. Kind of hard to get inside, but eh, maybe I'm missing something.
Great story, by the way. I always love seeing another story set in this universe.
Pretty nice chapter, love the story itself. However, I feel as I should point out some minor typos & grammatical errors you made (they're not THAT bad, as I can still tell what you mean to say and I love what you're saying; I just think it could be made to look nicer).
Should be "its" without an apostrophe when dealing with a possessive "it," as "it's" with an apostrophe is short-hand for "it is."
Accidentally have an extra "I" in between "But" and "when." Also, that semicolon after "Quilava" should be a comma and the comma after "though" could use a semicolon in its place.
Accidentally typed Allen's name twice in a row.
Correct some punctuation and comma placement in this paragraph for you. Also, "city" was possessive rather than plural.
Missing quotation mark after "We're here"
Should be "they're" (as in "they are") instead of "their," the space between the first and second sentences has one spacebar too many, and I feel that bit about Nova should read as "a few steps behind." On a non-grammar related note, I LOVE the mention of Mythril ore being in there (must be very useful in all them magitek appliances).
I'm assuming that sentence should end with either "four of them" or "four of the things"
Already done some minor restructuring, comma placement, and correcting "throw" as "through."
Added two commas and an apostrophe to this one. It's a pretty funny line, though given the timing of the announcement, I'm pretty sure Arceus should be in Canterlot at this point.
Added in a few commas, semicolons, and a couple missing words.
Pretty sure that "me evolve" here should be "we evolve."
This one isn't a grammar-related issue; I just LOVE the snarkiness of that line. Although I think Arceus' announcement may need some cleanup in certain areas when it comes to punctuation (maybe too many commas that could use semicolons or periods in their place, but that might just be me), the words themselves seem to be all correct.
Rioting? Ooh count me in.
You really don't wanna piss off Arceus, Hades.
Right what'll he do? Erase me from existence?
Possibly.
4982447 Wow dude. I can only hope that you'll be this finicky on grammar when I try posting my New World side-story tomorrow.
PS: No, seriously. I wouldn't mind having my own little Grammar-Nazi.
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4986942 I find this response extra humorous considering I will be referencing that movie in my story.
4986961 glad you enjoyed it lmao
Lolololol that last comment sent me over the edge!!!!!!
I'm rolling 4reals
Alright, so far so good; there's barely anything in the way of errors.
I believe you need a period or comma at the end of that thing Time Turner said about the morphic field.
Whatever kind of Pokemon Dawn is, she certainly sounds like a high-matinence individual.
This one's more of a story-wise thing than a grammar thing. I'm pretty sure Dinky's fur is more a shade of lavender than blue-grey,
and I honestly think Sparkler's fur is closer to magenta than anything else (least of all pink).EDIT: Turns out I was wrong on this point. Sparkler's fur is kinda pink-ish (or at least slightly purplish-pink).
Other than those couple of things and your style of spacing around the quotation marks (which is really more a personal thing than a true grammatical error), this thing is pretty much grammatically perfect. Though you I feel I should warn you that you may be treading on dangerous waters when it comes to the main canon. I probably don't need to remind you that Derpy/ Ditzy Doo needs to be in Ponyville by the third morning to make whatever notes she's taking on her brief encounter with Misty after she and the others return from Canterlot via the train. Also, the shattering of the Time Stream brought about by this universal merging is a pretty important point that'll prevent any kind of long distance time travel for who knows how long, though I already suspect that point is why you chose to have a side-story featuring Doctor Whooves in the first place. As long as this version of the Doctor isn't from yet another human-inhabited universe (seriously, the Whoniverse-Ponyverse crossover crash deal was interesting in the first couple of stories it showed up in, but it's starting to get old), I think you'll continue to be good in the canon of "New World, New Way."
Anyways, story is certainly getting to the interesting bits now. Loki, you sneaky bastard you; sneaking into a
Time HorseTime SteedGallopfreyan's TARDIS without his knowledge is not something most could do, let alone brag to their face about. Ditzy, it looks like you gots some 'splaining to do (speaking of, I like how Sparkler seems to detest Time Turner for using the "Derpy" nickname to refer to her sister, I like it).Maybe shouldn't have smoked all those Gloom Balls, huh, Erika?
Dammit Loki The chaos you cause
So allen and co pop up around the time of nightmare moon came to be. Let the adventure BEGIN!!