They skies over Ponyville were filled with smoke as fires raged, the sources of the fires being several homes which had been put to the torch by errant magic. When Shining and his raiders had exited the train onto the Ponyville platform, the first thing he had done was cast mighty shield spell, weaving into it wards which would repel all who tried to teleport in, including the princesses.
This however had caused problems with his men, for they knew that it would alert the changelings that they were coming. He had simply told them that there was no need for the element of surprise, that there enemy most likely already knew they were coming, but would be too weak to pose any real threat.
However, half way into the town, they had not run into the ragged changeling band they had been expecting. No, instead they had been met by a large group of Crystal soldiers, for unbeknownst to them, the group Cadance sent had arrived early, and had been waiting for their arrival ever since.
Despite this though, Shining and his raiders had been pushing the defenders back, but as soon as they had reached the outer boundaries of the palace, all hell broke loose. The ground had opened up, and then a massive wall of crystals had shot out, which the crystal soldiers had literally melted into as Shining and his guard stared in shock, before pulling back as the defenders retaliated from the wall.
Now Shining was staring at the new barrier, wondering how the hell the changelings had managed to do this, for he didn’t believe for a second that the warriors he was facing were crystal soldiers, even though his own troupes believed otherwise.
“Sir, one of our pegasus scouts managed to fly over and get a look at the palace, and it seems you were correct about the elements, they seem to be in league with the changeling survivors.”
“What of Twilight,” asked Shining.
“She watches from the balcony of what we assume to be her room,” said the guard, “but she has so far not participated in the conflict, likely due to her not being under their sway.”
“Good, let’s keep it that way for now, I don’t want her hurt. Now, what can you tell me about this wall we are which is blocking our way?”
“As far as we can tell it is made of the same crystal in the empire, but it is radiating massive amounts of magical energy, making it so that we can’t teleport behind it.”
“Can it be damaged?”
“We're trying,” said the guard, “but all our efforts have proven futile so far, it seems highly resistant to both physical and magical damage.”
“And what about dark magic,” asked Shining as he kept his gaze to the wall.
“Sir?”
Shining turned his gaze to the guard, “I said what about dark magic, have you tried that yet?”
“No sir, but why would we, its forbidden?”
“Cause this is war soldier,” said Shining in cold clarity, “and in war we have to use every weapon in our arsenal to achieve victory, no matter the costs it might exact. Now, begin ordering the troops to use dark magic on the wall.”
The guard made to protest, only to have Shining cut him off, “You will do as I say Captain, now move it!”
The guard hastened to obey, but as he left he couldn’t help but look back and take notice the green lines which had shown themselves when shining had shouted, which looked like they had spread since the last time the captain had spotted them.
“It’s getting worse,” he thought, but finally he looked away, hoping that when this was all over, the prince would finally let himself be tended to.
On the other side of the wall, the crystal guards began to shiver in fear as they saw the unicorn raiders beginning to charge up some dark spells, one of them turning and yelling the news to the elements, who were busy conversing with the leader of the crystal ponies and the current speaker for the changelings.
“Dark Magic,” said Rarity with concern, “that can’t be, Twilight’s brother would never condone such a thing.”
“This is so not cool,” Rainbow said in agreement, before turning to the crystal guard. “Ok, how long can these walls stand against dark magic?”
“Not long,” said the guard, “for as aww inspiring as the dark crystals Sombra conjured were, they are quite brittle, due to the fact that they are filled with hate and sadness.”
“It will not matter,” said the changeling leader, “we just need something to keep them from attacking the wall. Now tell me,” she said, staring at both Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash, “which one of you is good at manipulating the weather.”
Immediately Rainbow’s hoof shot up, and so the changeling turned to her, giving her a serious look before speaking. “Ok Rainbow Dash, before we do this, I must warn you of the dangers…”
“Can the chit chat,” said Rainbow, “we got no time if we want to keep them from killing you guys.”
The changeling hesitated for a moment, and then finally nodded, “Very well, just don’t complain to me later when the consequences come and bite you on your ass.”
Rainbow made to retort, only to stop as the changelings horn glowed, causing her to suddenly feel as though a dam had been released within her mind, her eyes turning opaque as she began to rise into the sky.
The guards had just let loose with the first volley of dark bolts when the wind began to swirl, dark clouds begging to form overhead as rain began to poor down, soon to be followed by lightening. They would have assumed it had just been some random storm which had blown in from the Everfree, but they discarded that theory due to the shield their prince had erected to keep out interfering forces, plus there was the fact that the bolts of lightning were not random, but were striking in front of and sometimes outright hitting their fellow raiders, yet not a single bolt touched the enemy on the other side of the wall.
Shining immediately went to the town hall nearby, climbing up to the tower and using a pair of binoculars to get a bead on the castle, immediately spotting the glowing form of Rainbow Dash, who he could tell was under the influence of an enemy changeling, which caused him to growl.
His next move he executed without any thought, leaping off the top of town hall and opening up a shadow gate with dark magic, his momentum flinging him out the other side to slam into Rainbow Dash’s back, allowing him to stab a recently transformed hoof easily through the back of her chest and through her heart.
“NOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!”
Twilight stood frozen in shock as she watched Rainbow Dash and her brother fall to the ground, part of the recently constructed wall shattering as Shining touched ground, unaware of the danger which was rising within his sister.
“Shining hurt Rainbow…” thought Twilight, her main and tail beginning to light on fire as she roared in rage, blasting the raiders as they tried to enter the wall with ice before leaping to the ground and blasting her brother away from Rainbow.
She began to stalk around her brother as he got up, keeping herself in front of Rainbow as the others moved to grab her, hoping she was ok. As her brother got up however, she growled once more, summoning a sword from thin air and pointing it at the prone stallion. “Stay where you are Shining Armor!”
At once Shining looked up, a smile stretching across his face when he saw her. “Twily, you’re ok…”
“I said stay where you are Shining,” growled Twilight, Shining looking confused till he finally noticed the sword she had leveled at him, and his raiders frozen in ice.
“Twilight…what did you do?”
“I protected my ponies,” said Twilight without blinking an eye, “all of them!”
“…No…no you can’t mean that, Twilight Cadance got your letter, I know you were being held captive…I came to save you…”
“And what it my letter indicated that I needed saving Shining?”
“You said I was to be given leniency for what I had done, and I know you better then then, you would never spare me at the cost of following the rules, never.”
Twilight looked at him for a moment, and then sighed, her sword lowering as she spoke to him. “Shining, the reason I forced the courts to be lenient with you was because I didn’t want Cadance left alone during this time, and I also knew that if I let your imprisonment, many of the nobles would take their support away from helping the changelings, as I have been asking them to do.”
Shining stared in disbelief, and then something in his mind snapped, his confused look turning into a glare as he conjured his own sword. “You can’t be my Twily, for she would never help the changelings in a million years, NEVER!”
He then charged, his sword clashing against Twilight’s only to get pushed back as Twilight lifted up her head and smashed her chin against his face, causing him to reel as blood flew from his nose. “Come on Shining, you taught me to counter moves like that during summer break, you really expect me to get caught off guard by such…”
“SHUT UP!” he roared, rolling back onto his hooves as he sent his sword in an upward arc, nearly catching Twilight on the chin as she dodged out of the way. He changed the shape of his weapon, the blade growing till it became a claymore, and they he swung again, breaking Twilight’s sword in two, only to have his sword broken as she conjured up a massive axe.
Shining roared, the two halves of his broken sword forming into black serrated claws, his eyes glowing green with rage as his horn glowed with an evil black fire. He slashed at Twilight with a growl, tearing out chunks of her axe and causing her to abandon it, forming a shield which got shredded, before Twilight got hit by a savage back hand to the face.
She was sent flying, but when she got up, a voice sounded in her head, “Twilight?”
“Chrysalis,” thought Twilight, dodging another strike as she focused her thoughts on the changeling queen, “Where are you?"
“Above you,” said the changeling queen, “but from what I can see things do not look good, you will not be able to last long against him.”
“He’s not acting rationally, I think I can…”
“No you can’t,” said Chrysalis, “maybe you could before, but with the foal in your belly his magic will have greater effect on you.”
“What do you…Whoa,” cried Twilight, leaping out of the way of another attack before sending a blast of magic at him, which he blocked.
“We changelings are highly susceptible to emotions, and we become weaker in the presence of dark magic, due to it being filled with hate, which will affect you as well due to you child.”
“Then I’ll just activate my harmony magic and…”
“No,” said Chrysalis, “that would kill the foal due to too much magic exposure.”
“Then what do you suggest I do?”
“…Lend your magic to me.”
Twilight’s thoughts paused as she dodged another attack, which prompted Chrysalis to keep speaking. “Twilight, I can stop Shining, but to do that I need you to lend me your magic, if only for a little while.”
Twilight hesitated, and then formed a barrier around herself, sighing as Shining struck it before closing her eyes and opening herself the Chrysalis.
Then, in the skies outside Shining’s shield, a massive burst of light erupted from a single point, followed by Chrysalis busting through the shield to land, her body alight with harmonic magic.
To Be Continued……
you, young sir, have all my attention
Rainbow, NO!!! C'mon Shining, stop it already!
Error: If dark magic is forbidden, then why do the raiders even know it? Shining I can get, since it looks like he's hopped up on Sombra-juice, but the ordinary raiders? And wouldn't they realize what the green lines are? They live in a world of magic after all, that sort of stuff is a giant I'M CORRUPTED AND UNFIT TO LEAD sign.
Yay for Chrysalis!
holy shit! Rainbow sure sounds like she received a extensively fatal blow. I knew from your description that Shinning was going down a dark path, but that blind sided me. while i am upset that Rainbow is likely dead, i have to say it really works well within the story as we now know just how twisted shinning's mind has become, and we can only imagine what kind of fall out / punishment he is going to receive as a result.
please update soon!
5217786 For the first question, if they're law enforcement, it may be a job requirement to know enough about stopping dark magic that they also know enough to do dark magic.
Nitpicks:
The
I doubt you mean they were cute, so it should be "awe"
than them
hoof? (Or did Shining conjure a hand to hit her with for some reason?)
Shining Armor.... if Rainbow Dash is dead... then you DESERVE life sentences. Not only because you killed Best Pony but also because you killed an ELEMENT OF HARMONY YOU THICK HEADED DUMB ASS.
man shining you fuck up hope Chrysalis, kicks you ass
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I'll fix these as soon as I can, but as for why their were so many you needed to nit pick, I finished this while being very sleepy, so I couldn't notice as many of my usual mistakes.
5218192 Hey, on the bright side, if that's a bad day for you, you have a leg up on the majority of authors on the site. It does explain why the errors were so odd, though.
Shining's turning into Sombra! Quick, slap some sense into him!
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AGREED! and not the rich pony prison either.
hmmmmmm I sense one prince about to die he will not be missed
The premace of the story is good , though could use a little work in the wording and phrasing departments.
Shining Armor IS going to receive a life sentence for this. Come on, man; none of this bullshit where Celestia just scolds and looks disappointed. The solar mare needs to crack down HARD on Shining for this...
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Shining taught his raiders dark magic to kill the changelings.
5218882 Agreed. He is attempting genocide. Break out the stone-prison eternity-in-ice Celestia!
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Shining was using claws at the time; "back hand" may be accurate.
what is causing shinning to do this? Does Rainbow really die? can shining be saved? I've waited 4 days for less than a thousand words? whens the next chapter?
5219489 Hmm, good catch, but would it not be "back claw" in that case?
Come to think of it, "back hand" refers to a specific type of blow, while "back hoof" might mislead someone to believe that it was a different limb than intended when a quadruped is doing the fighting.
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The generic term for writers trying to avoid "hand" would probably be "back swing".
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but seeing as how he had magical claws hovering around him at the time, I did not feel the word needed to be avoided.
How long to next chapter? I really want more if you dont mind.
Now I'm curious and worried, Shining wouldn't go and attack his own when she is willing to do something for the sake of preventing the extinction of a race.
5217786 Not only that, but they see Twilight and how Shining seem to attack in rage as he even attacked one of the bearers of the elements of harmony, what the troops are doing? if Shining seems to be crazy they have the proof in front of them
NOOO! CLIFFHANGER!!!
5222986 Most of them got trapped in ice by twilight, the rest are holding back till this shit storm blows over.
So from the story I read that Shining punched through Rainbows heart and Twilight saw it.
So why are they rushing to see if she is hurt?
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cause she might still be alive, after all, this is a place where magic exists, so anything is possible.
i am hoping that you didn't kill rainbow but im doubting it because a heart in people and horses are vital frickin organs that is unless you meant that the magic was supposed to try to cleanse her mind or somethimg
i can see that shiny is going to become the main villan in this series but who's going to be the hero?
yes yet i cant help but forsee this dark ending heading down a seperate path because i doubt this is going to be the last we will see of shining and his soldiers of the crystal empire or tariators as i llike to say from time to time and then proply kill them
struck it before closing her eyes and OPENING herself the Chrysalis.
by the way i think you may have misinterpreted the word the because it would have made more sense to use the word to or towards chrysalis
5230192 Oh yeah, there is magic.
I forgot...
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I was half asleep when I finished this chapter, so mistakes were bound to happen.
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the second one, because she cant make any new drones, the other "voices" in her head have no place to go, and are in essence trapped inside her and driving her mad.
please please please update the next chapter I so want to find out what happens.
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Plus, with RD being a element bearer, the element itself might just take a hoof and keep her alive.
Or it was a near miss and the heart is still okay
FUCK YOU FUCKING SHINING ARMOR!!! FUCKING DIE!!!!!
*In background slowly pulls out a AK-47 sets it next to my self then pulls out *insert overpowering sniper rifle here* and takes aim* you should have stayed in bed....
pppppppppppppllllllllllllllllleeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaasssssssssseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
wHAt THe FLoP IS HaPpENInG!?!?
Oh snap! Chryssi went Super Saiyan! wait.........that can't work. she's a changeling, not Saiyan.............Super Changeling!
Some of these have been mentioned already but it doesn't seem like you've been listening properly, pay attention please, it'll help make it more readable.
'The' seriously it's 'The' first word.
you don't want 'aww' that's cute, you want 'awe' as in amazing.
'than them'
'allowed' would make more sense here.
Honestly, it's a good story, really good, but spelling and grammar mistakes break the flow. Admit the mistakes by fixing them, one does not simply improve on technique without criticism, good or bad.
That is all, keep on smiling
should be Twilight
WTF i've just read?
Wow, that's... Shining. You dimwit.