This was worse—she was worse.
Like a robot, it dawned on her. I'm a robot.
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After a few conversations with Scootaloo, a few failed attempts at being a good sister and a little introspection, Rainbow Dash is convinced that she is a robot. Can she change her unfeeling ways and be the big sister Scootaloo has always dreamed of? One shot.
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I literally thought it meant a beep boop robot. Like, made of metal, drinking oil, mechanical voice.
Well... that was deep. Come here expecting a short comedy piece about robots and I get this instead. And you know what? I love it! It's far better than I came here expecting!
Alright. Time to do what I do best and fix some mistakes...
Repeating yourself. Delete the marked word.
Need a space.
Need a space.
Repeating yourself again.
Repeating yourself.
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Thank you so much for the help!
I expected a shitty story about Dash being a robot, but then I was extremely dissapointed to find out it was actually something good instead.
I mean, good job, that was freaking great.
You have earned yourself the first fav I gave in weeks, and I read nearly all Scootaloo stories around here
It has some flaws in grammar and style and a few parts could/should have been extended, but I really enjoyed it nevertheless. Thank you for making my evening
One hint though, I'm pretty sure your description is scaring off readers. It's not the best one for a sweet story like this one.
Awwwwww. I always love these stories with RD and Scootaloo! It's so happy! (Well, most of the time *cough cough caught you cough cough*)
This is... Extremely well done.
Although I managed to find a couple of mechanical glitches in the text, the story was well thought out, the characters surprisingly deep, and even with a short appearances of Scootaloo, they make a really deep impact on the reader as well as Scoots.
Here, you deserve this:
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Hey, not bad for someone with only two published fanfics! I definitely enjoyed it. Totally got a big.thumb from me! And congrats at being approved by Twilight's Library!
I love fanfics that punch the despicable Scootabuse meme in the face (and then run it over with a steamroller). Though, the way you did it was incredibly effective, by reminding us that yeah Dashie is awesome but she can be a jerk and can lack common sense from time to time. The adorable Scootaloo moments and the heapings of continuity were yummy icing on the cake!
The only thing I disliked about the fic was the pacing. The Family Appreciation Day moment just felt drawn out and a little unnecessary. I felt like you could have cut the confrontation between DT and RD by half and removed the swearing, and it would have been just as effective to me. I felt like the gist of the story was more about Dash considering herself a sister to Scootaloo opposed to the discovering your destiny lesson involved with cutie marks.
And last but not least, one eensy weensy technical problem
Flip dat b into a p!
The idea of Rainbow Dash believing herself to be a robot seems completely ridiculous, yet you presented it in such a way tat I could't help but take it seriously. Very impressive.
From the beginning of the dream sequece to Dash asking Scoots to move in was definately rushed, but not too badly. I think the speaches after that point are more of a problem. Rainbow being so long winded and preachy just feels... off.
All things cosidered, this fic is pretty good, despite the flaws.
Thumb and added to my recommendation group.
Wow.
You know, I always felt that Dash needed her end of Sleepless in Ponyville to make their relationship seem like a two-way deal rather than just Scoots being a fangirl and Dash being as egocentric and truly indifferent as always. And here it is! Very well done, too.
Is this inspired by friendship is witchcraft?
4925330 Lol maybe...