After the events of Equestria Girls, Sunset Shimmer has had to adapt to her new normal life at Canterlot High. Slowly but surely, she has found her place within the school and her own circle of friends, becoming a very adept student in her own right.
But a new threat threatens to tarnish all of that for her. A power that seems to hold sway over the entire school itself, even Principal Celestia herself.
His name?
Superintendent Tirek. And he seems determined to make Sunset pay for her past mistakes.
Chapters (1)
This looks good. I'll read it in the morning though, 11 PM
10k words...
Dis guy right here, folks.
Nice one. I do rather like Sunset's master plan.
4822048 that's because he is secretly you
Neat.
Though it seems like regular Tirek being a centaur is more worth referencing than him being ape-like.
4822060 Forgive me if I'm mistaken, but wasn't that Luna's plan? Maybe I missed something, but it didn't seem like Sunset really did anything.
Oh pppssshtt, no I haven't even touched that one yet.
I had to quote Twilight's Kingdom there.
I can imagine EQG Tirek to be the equivalent of Rorke from CoD: Ghosts.
First thing that ran through my head:
This was a really good story! I enjoyed it a lot!!
I really wish more people would write stuff set in the EQG world.
Normally I wouldn't read a story about Tirek unless it's got a really, really interesting premise to it, but given the kind of stuff I've read on your blogs, I'm curious as to what you've come up with...
There's a joke to be made here about school devouring the souls of students, but I'll save that for when I get around to reading this.
Very nicely done.
This is a really weird thing to zero in on but I'm really glad you used Vinyl but kept her silent. In fact, the whole thing had a very 'canon' feel to it; like it could actually be an official EQG story.
... sorry; had to,
I won't lie. I lost it at the mariachi band
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Where did you get the story picture?
Why do I get the feeling Harshwhinny will be even worse?
Meh, Tirek's still not as bad a superintendent as Chalmers..."SKIN-NER!"
That... was EXACTLY how I expected it to go, only with an even better execution. Good one, dude.
Nothing wrong with that. At least you're using it correctly.
That was interesting
I feel like Tirek is some sort of metaphor for the current school system...
This was okay, but I'm going to mentally change the part where he's able to intimidate people with his absurdly amazing physic with his absurdly amazing paperwork skills, because that makes more sense for a superintendant.
I didn't like him in the season finale, I won't like him as a human nor will I ever
Douche!!
And this is why evil is dumb and will never prevail.
Im i the only one who ships Tirek and Sunset Shimmer?
I always thought that Tirek would be a shady businessman. A little disappoint. But still good story.
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You accidentally a word.
On top of the typos, the writing felt a bit sloppy and clunky. There were quite a few times where you used adverbs (or other phrases functioning to do the same thing) to modify dialogue tags that only served to tell us things that you had just shown us in the dialogue. Those instances were pretty jarring.
As amusing as I found this story and as much as I enjoyed your take on Tirek in human world, it was ultimately a bit disappointing. It felt like you rushed through the editing process a bit or something. It just didn't feel on par with other stories from you that I've read.
4828770 The original is right here.
Oh man. That felt SO good!
Pretty good work here! After watching Tirek abuse the crap out of everyone, it was so great to get to watch his 'empire' come crumbling down. And that re-introduction of Harshwinny at the end was gold. I can hear her voice echoing down the halls now! xD Some of the sentence flow was a bit awkward at points, but once I got into the story it wasn't too distracting. Great work! :D
(Also, I'm glad that I'm not the only one who's had the idea of scars on her back from the wings. It was a forced, unnatural transformation after all)
Relevant to the scars thing: Scar Tissue. (I'm not affiliated with that fic; I just like it. This one wasn't bad either.)
You know the funny thing is that a school like Canterlot High needs someone like Tirek in charge. Think about it CHS is school that has more clubs, activities, events and breaks then any other school ever, not to mention a total lack of discipline. I mean everyone loves the teachers that are kind and take a relaxed approach to work but most of the class knows that so they abuse that fact and just muck around and learn (well except that one teacher that's everyone is nice to). Then you get the super strict teachers (for me it was in maths) where you cant have your phone out, no talking, have paper on your desk, have something to write with, sit up straight, here's a double sided page of homework due tomorrow. Everyone (at the time) hates those teachers but when they were teaching you, you did as you were told in or out of lesson. My maths teacher was strict from day 1 telling us everything she expected from us and the do and don'ts of class and even though she was strict she still had a sense of humor when our education wasn't on the line such as in detention funnily enough. she gave out detentions at any point, once i was given detention for dropping my pen just so that she could have help in cleaning the classroom (I wasn't alone and it wasn't really serious). She had so much influence in the math department that once she sent a student to a lower set classroom and made it his new maths class no question asked. If I had maths at the end of the day some friends and I would stay after school doing the homework, sometimes we would write the question on the board and solve it on that (one time I did that and the things I were saying made me feel like a huge nerd). But even though she was super strict always given out homework and detention she managed to get the classes full attention each and every lesson and in the end that got me an A in maths which I am proud of. So in conclusion everyone loves the kind teachers that are pushovers but the strict ones are the ones that make you succeed.
NOPONY EXPECTS THE SPANISH INQUISITION
And as she became the 100th like on the story, UtsukushiNamida pumped a fist in the air and convinced her family she was unstable.
TI-REKT
Aldo holy shit, i know he was violent but honestly the dialogue with Granny Smith was the part that got me the angriest. Damn.
Backing up a bit
PINKIMENA PIE, YOUR FAMILY IS 95% SHADES OF GREY
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