For a moment, Melody hesitated. When Twilight opened her hooves for her, she rushed into her, now sobbing uncontrollably, with their wings embracing each other.
“Mom…!” cried Melody all over and over. “I was trying to save all of you…”
“You poor girl,” comforted Twilight. “Your future time must be hard, huh?”
“Indeed,” answered Melody. “Nearly all my friends have died. You just mysteriously disappeared!”
“Serious!?” exclaimed Rainbow Dash, shocked to know about her fate.
“Is that so?” asked Twilight, with determination. “Then thanks for all of your warnings. We’ll know what to do!”
It's a fine, normal day in the magical land of Equestria. Princess Twilight Sparkle is hanging out with her friends as usual. Suddenly, a princess pony arrives from the future and warns them of a threat that an evil force will soon bring doom to Equestria. Will Twilight Sparkle do something with her friends to stop this oncoming threat using their strong spirit of friendship?
Cover art by Festus
Fanfiction.net:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10942721/1/Prophecy-From-the-Future
This fic could be good, but poor pacing, execution, and ridiculously overpowered OCs bring it down. While the plot is generic, it is very possible to do it well, so I'm not counting it against this.
There are also occasional grammar errors throughout, but nothing too notable.
I'm not pretty good at rhyming either
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4946895 Thanks buddy!
4946895 And hope that you can read my stories and my recent updates until the very end!
4818690 I agree completely! I don't understand why he didn't respond, this is great constructive criticism.
7878877 I don't really respond to concrits unless needed