Trying to find out why Coco Pommel decided to work fo Suri Polomare again Rarity learns about a underground pony trafficing ring. Problem is that the mare running it wants Rarity to join as either its newest member or its newest slave.
Clever, having Rarity see the slave side first, so she won't be asking tricky questions when it is time for her to dominate. And oh boy, Blueblood. If there was anypony who Rarity would consider breaking the deal over, it'd be him. I guarantee nopony could make her feel half as degraded just by his presence, let alone whatever acts he will have her perform.
Something tells me Blueblood isn't going to be gentle with Rarity. And I feel wrong for really looking forward to the next part! Ah well. Let's hope Blueblood isn't too rough, Rares.
My money is still leaning towards the Rarity completing the challenge and getting away, but I have a feeling as to otherwise. Just like Octavia. There goes my $3M. Thanks Schorl.
But Blue Blood. Now that is something I did not see coming.
So I found myself with a bit of free time and figured instead of putting this off I might as well dive on in. I'd planed to just read all the way though, but I find myself having to take pause at the end of Ch4 because well... Blueblood is by far the character in MLP that I simply find most detestable and the very idea of Rarity (aka best pony) "willingly" submitting to him makes my skin crawl -- not that I'm complaining, as he's probably the perfect choice to really drive home the humiliation factor, but I'm still going need time to mentally prepare myself.
While I take that break, however, I might as well go over some first impressions.
I rather enjoyed how the first chapter felt like something that could almost be the start of any ordinary episode of the show. The innocent familiarity provides a wonderful contrast making it all the easier for the reader to share in Rarity's experience as with each character she meets in Manehattan leads Rarity deeper and deeper down the rabbit-hole into the world of The Society. The process of the descent is also probably made all the more effective by the slow build up, seeing as even 4 chapters the sex has been barely more than perfunctory side note.
I'm also glad to see more of you ponisona this time around. Scholar was such a bit player in Coco's story that I just couldn't get much of a feel for her (still haven't read Octavia, so can't comment on that). Here, however, she seems to be in prime form as a delectable social manipulator. Even knowing full well just what it is she really does, I stile find myself tempted to buy into the softer version of things she's trying to sell Rarity with. I also find myself becoming ever more curious by the little snippets of her backstory getting teased. I'd not really thought much of her being a crystal pony previously, but when Rarity mentioned how helping to save the empire, it made me stop to consider just how that all factors in.
Does that mean like the rest of her kind she's only recently returned to the world after 1000 years? Is it really possible for her to have setup something like The Society in such short time? Or was she never banished in the first place? Is she somehow an immortal who has been running this secrete group of her's for centuries? And in either scenario is King Sombra the one responsible for scaring her back? Not that I expect you to answer any questions that are already fleshed out elsewhere and/or would be spoilers for stories you have yet to write.
Back to Rarity herself; she's also in ideal form, clearly recognizable in both her elegant refinement and her heroic resolve, which of course makes watching her entire world view get shaken by both what she's seen already in this fic and what yet to come all the more delightful journey to bear witness to. Double kudos for you having yourself start Rarity's initiation through the lens of a submissive, thus further throwing her off her game and presumably leaving her that much more vulnerable to accepting of (and perhaps enjoying) what The Society does.
PS: How do high-heals work with anthro ponies that still have hooves? Not really a question, just something I have trouble visualizing.
None of us, submissive or dominant alike, want to hear that we are some sick or vile lot simply because we choose to express ourselves in a way that is outside social norms, especially from an outsider."
gawd for a mare she sure is a pretentious prick.
Spouting tolerance for what she does as if it's perfectly natural and fair to torture ponies into submission with out even giving them an ounce of safety other then life and limb being preserved.
as you said once, there are no safewords in the society. Schorl may care but she surrounds herself with souless cash whores that only care about their own pleasure and probably some of them would kill for pleasure if Schorl didnt enforce her few rules that gurantee a slave's life will be preserved.
They beleive a lack of cruelty and apathy constitutes a submissive and warants their forcing that pony to accept their views by breaking their mind and spirit.
I'm more then a little offended by how she twists the philosophies of BDSM to justify her hypocrisy (being a slave once herself) and cruelty.
but as you said, Schorl is not the worst at the society and seems to be delusional in beleiving that what they are doing is for the good of Equestria's people as a whole.
If the society had their way all ponies, mare, stallion, filly and colt, (don't tell me there is no foal-con going on in the Society even behind Schorl's back) would either be slaves or masters and ponies naked being walked like dogs in the streets or tied to lamp posts for punsihment would be common place.
Schools would have personality aptitude tests to determine early in one's life (age 10 to 12, Cheerilee's curriculum would be very different) if one was educated in the basics as a master or who was denied further education and pressed into a regiment that teaches them they are worthless without a master to serve.
all ponies stifled at an early age would grow up as blank flanks or develop BDSM style symbols for marks that forever dictate how ponies see them with or without a collar.
Schorl's perfect world (which isnt far off from the current immunity from judgement they enjoy) would be as Dark or worse then anything Sombra could have conceived.
Even life under Chrysalis as a tyrant would be preferable. Changelings would have to maintain some level of pony hapiness to garner love from their hosts. If they supressed them as the society does or would they would slowly starve off in to extinction.
Comment posted by ServingSpoon deleted Jul 18th, 2015
The door came open and Rarity's curiosity got the better of her. Lifting her head, she looked through the valley of her breasts, watching the door slowly becoming ajar. Her eyes narrowed, the sight she saw filling her with dread. That pure white fur, the light blue eyes, and the flowing, dark blonde mane. Of all the possible ponies that it could've been, why did it it have to be him?
OH.. MY.. GAWD.. man you are a heartless bastard.. her first time.. and has to be that fuck nugget!
Blue Blood....hell to the fucking yes
*pulls out some popcorn*
Isaac: Pardon me but I have a meeting with the princesses-*falls to the ground in pain*
Bren: Don't worry mistress he won't cause any trouble
Oh Rarity, sweet, sophisticated, naïve Rarity.
Blueblood. Well, this should prove entertaining.
Hmm, I was thinking of another stallion but Blue Blood! I dub thee genius.
Clever, having Rarity see the slave side first, so she won't be asking tricky questions when it is time for her to dominate. And oh boy, Blueblood. If there was anypony who Rarity would consider breaking the deal over, it'd be him. I guarantee nopony could make her feel half as degraded just by his presence, let alone whatever acts he will have her perform.
4984737 Me too, I was certain it would be Fancy Pants
Something tells me Blueblood isn't going to be gentle with Rarity. And I feel wrong for really looking forward to the next part! Ah well. Let's hope Blueblood isn't too rough, Rares.
Also, who else thinks there should be a Schorl X Rarity scene in here? Cause that would be just hot!
4989462 Well Fancy would probably still be training and enjoying Octy. I thought maybe some pony else but this is way better.
4992588 I suppose you are right in that, making it Blueblood instead of Fancy Pants like we were all expecting made it much more of a surprise!
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Well I do like to keep people on their toes. I am curious though as to who Gamerguy thought it would be though.
Well now? Isn't this just interesting?
My money is still leaning towards the Rarity completing the challenge and getting away, but I have a feeling as to otherwise. Just like Octavia. There goes my $3M. Thanks Schorl.
But Blue Blood. Now that is something I did not see coming.
I absolutely love your OC tourmaline
So I found myself with a bit of free time and figured instead of putting this off I might as well dive on in. I'd planed to just read all the way though, but I find myself having to take pause at the end of Ch4 because well... Blueblood is by far the character in MLP that I simply find most detestable and the very idea of Rarity (aka best pony) "willingly" submitting to him makes my skin crawl -- not that I'm complaining, as he's probably the perfect choice to really drive home the humiliation factor, but I'm still going need time to mentally prepare myself.
While I take that break, however, I might as well go over some first impressions.
I rather enjoyed how the first chapter felt like something that could almost be the start of any ordinary episode of the show. The innocent familiarity provides a wonderful contrast making it all the easier for the reader to share in Rarity's experience as with each character she meets in Manehattan leads Rarity deeper and deeper down the rabbit-hole into the world of The Society. The process of the descent is also probably made all the more effective by the slow build up, seeing as even 4 chapters the sex has been barely more than perfunctory side note.
I'm also glad to see more of you ponisona this time around. Scholar was such a bit player in Coco's story that I just couldn't get much of a feel for her (still haven't read Octavia, so can't comment on that). Here, however, she seems to be in prime form as a delectable social manipulator. Even knowing full well just what it is she really does, I stile find myself tempted to buy into the softer version of things she's trying to sell Rarity with. I also find myself becoming ever more curious by the little snippets of her backstory getting teased. I'd not really thought much of her being a crystal pony previously, but when Rarity mentioned how helping to save the empire, it made me stop to consider just how that all factors in.
Does that mean like the rest of her kind she's only recently returned to the world after 1000 years? Is it really possible for her to have setup something like The Society in such short time? Or was she never banished in the first place? Is she somehow an immortal who has been running this secrete group of her's for centuries? And in either scenario is King Sombra the one responsible for scaring her back? Not that I expect you to answer any questions that are already fleshed out elsewhere and/or would be spoilers for stories you have yet to write.
Back to Rarity herself; she's also in ideal form, clearly recognizable in both her elegant refinement and her heroic resolve, which of course makes watching her entire world view get shaken by both what she's seen already in this fic and what yet to come all the more delightful journey to bear witness to. Double kudos for you having yourself start Rarity's initiation through the lens of a submissive, thus further throwing her off her game and presumably leaving her that much more vulnerable to accepting of (and perhaps enjoying) what The Society does.
PS: How do high-heals work with anthro ponies that still have hooves? Not really a question, just something I have trouble visualizing.
gawd for a mare she sure is a pretentious prick.
Spouting tolerance for what she does as if it's perfectly natural and fair to torture ponies into submission with out even giving them an ounce of safety other then life and limb being preserved.
as you said once, there are no safewords in the society. Schorl may care but she surrounds herself with souless cash whores that only care about their own pleasure and probably some of them would kill for pleasure if Schorl didnt enforce her few rules that gurantee a slave's life will be preserved.
They beleive a lack of cruelty and apathy constitutes a submissive and warants their forcing that pony to accept their views by breaking their mind and spirit.
I'm more then a little offended by how she twists the philosophies of BDSM to justify her hypocrisy (being a slave once herself) and cruelty.
but as you said, Schorl is not the worst at the society and seems to be delusional in beleiving that what they are doing is for the good of Equestria's people as a whole.
If the society had their way all ponies, mare, stallion, filly and colt, (don't tell me there is no foal-con going on in the Society even behind Schorl's back) would either be slaves or masters and ponies naked being walked like dogs in the streets or tied to lamp posts for punsihment would be common place.
Schools would have personality aptitude tests to determine early in one's life (age 10 to 12, Cheerilee's curriculum would be very different) if one was educated in the basics as a master or who was denied further education and pressed into a regiment that teaches them they are worthless without a master to serve.
all ponies stifled at an early age would grow up as blank flanks or develop BDSM style symbols for marks that forever dictate how ponies see them with or without a collar.
Schorl's perfect world (which isnt far off from the current immunity from judgement they enjoy) would be as Dark or worse then anything Sombra could have conceived.
Even life under Chrysalis as a tyrant would be preferable. Changelings would have to maintain some level of pony hapiness to garner love from their hosts. If they supressed them as the society does or would they would slowly starve off in to extinction.
OH.. MY.. GAWD.. man you are a heartless bastard.. her first time.. and has to be that fuck nugget!
No Schorl, not everyone is as monstrous as you are.