Basically, a short story wherein we learn more about Angel and why he behaves like he does, and what he truly feels about Fluttershy.
Any further description risks spoiling to much, since the story is less than 1700 words long.
(post-upload) proof reading - AscendingAnthem ( http://www.fimfiction.net/user/AscendingAnthem )
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That was a sort-of sweet story. Was kind of puzzled by the thought bit. (Personally I think thinking writes like talking, but that may be just me) I give it a 7 out of 10. Good luck.
ANNNND because I can, feelings about being the first to comment:
I've seen SOME people write thoughts and speech the same way, and SOME who does it like I did here, using italic for thoughts...
In my opinion both works just as well, but I personally feel that it gets easier to keep track of what parts are spoken and what parts are thought when you use different texts, just like using bold or capital for louder voices..
Anyway, thanks for the feedback and big thanks for the 7/10, didn't expect THAT kind of scores..
More stories WILL come, I plan to be here for several more years at least, and my stories will hopefully improve over time.. I have over 30 ideas already, in all genres... horrors, comedies, adventures, tragedies, randoms, crossovers, alternate universes, humanized (EQG Style),
(Comedies, with some soft-core sexual themes involved, basically)
...even some almost-clop stories..
And congrats on first comment, you win a Spike!
Great stuff man. Great stuff indeed.
4814932 No, I mean, I think that when people write thoughts, it should sound like the person when they are talking. I was not referring to the use of italics.
BTW: If you wish to directly respond to a comment; hit the double arrows (>>) on the side of the comment box.
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wel, this story was written from Angels viewpoint, and since he never speaks in the show,
I just had to give him a "character" to the way he thinks..
I know that when someone thinks, it should be the same as when they speak, only in italic letters.
But Angel CAN'T speak, so there was no frame of reference for how he would sound.
Also, I know how the respons thing works, and I thought I DID do it like that, but I might be mistaken..
Anyway, I appreciate the critique, and moer precisely, HOW you gave it..
You remained nice and friendly, and made it sound more like advice than ranting, unlike many other people when THEY critique... or rather, they complain about the problems instead of, like you,
simply poiting it out in a friendly way, like it SHOULD be done..
4937925 Well, no reason being unpleasant unless the situation calls for it (and call me silly, but reading and critiquing on fanfiction for my little pony doesn't justify it. Unless spike is getting the shorter end of the stick than usual for nothing but a cheap laugh. That irks me a bit.
).
Also, I didn't mean to impugn your ability to reply to a comment. It's just the one of the newer authors on here recently did the same thing and I was unaware of it until he commented on my user page that he did a little while later. Ironically he was in the same contest as us.
4937970 Oh, I'm thankful you pointed out the >> thing, I just meant I already knew it ^^
But thanks anyway.
Also, You have a contest entry too? If so, would you mind linking to it?
Since you've read mine, I can read yours too
(I assume you meant the contest on EQD for which I wrote this story)
And as you say, no reason to be unpleasant.. but some people seem to lack the ability NOT to..
All they do is whine and complain.. But with my many years online, I long ago learned to
ignore that kind of people, or when I feel like it, counter-troll them for a while just for fun
4938039 I'll link it, but don't get too excited about it. I wrote it over the course of a few hours (3 or 4) and submitted it in a semi-sleep deprived state. Having that said, it doesn't completely suck and I see why it didn't win (It's about Spike's issue rather than how he views ponies. *shrugs* Oh, well.)
I present to you 'Of Ponies and Dragons.'
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Don't worry, mine was written in just a couple of hours too.. ^^
And whenever I read any fanfic, I try to have a little expectations as possible..
This way I rarely get disappointed. It's a good little "trick" to have when reading..
and when watching movies too.. set the standards low, and suddenly everything seems better
Since it's just a short one, I'll read it right NOW, and then I'll leave a short comment on it,