Likes adventure and action, spike the dragon forever
Spike has been Twilight's assistant for years and has also helped her friends in Ponyville. He has done every thing for them, he even saved the Crystal Empire. He is a loyal dragon willing to do any thing for his friends, but what does he gets for it? Little to no respect. And that is what pushes him to run away.
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Spelling error in the title? Oh, that bodes well...
Okay, lets see where this goes.
Little Cliche but you are putting new spins in it which I like.
This seems interesting. I will give this story a more through review, when another chapter or 2 have been released. I will say though to everypony, this story warrants a read through.
I will fix the title ok
Happy. Good
A good start, and it makes me wonder if he's going to leave a letter describing the things done to him that could very well be described as abuse, neglect, and even spite... but that'll have to wait until the next chapter's released
Don't know why but I love stories like that. Maybe because mane six are bitches and don't deserve Spike. Good story keep it up
Like the idea, but it needs a beta reader to fix the grammar. Get's a favourite and a down vote from me.
jesus since when was it shit on spikes face day?
it's promising, and will be watching, good luck with your story
You too man/woman
This be rushed.
Yes I know but I had work to do I was trying to meet my dead line sorry.
but all of my other chapters will be better.
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I pinkie pie promise that the next chapters will be better. Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye
wow... that got ... not bad but worse fast, that whole super strength thing, just... it turned me off so hard... god I hope this isn't permanent.
But I'll stay for the promise of stuff getting better.
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Sorry like I said next chapters will be better
4965004 I know, that's why I'm staying, it takes a lot more to discourage me.
You don't have to be sorry about anything, you were trying to meet your deadline, I can't blame you for that.
I thought this was nice. A bit rushed, but I enjoyed the plot. I wonder though what is in that book. Good luck writing the next chapter. I can't wait for it.
If I were you, and I could find the time, I'd go back and rewrite it, slow it down... and I didn't mind the strength part, he's a pissed off dragon, of course he's gonna be tough
Huh, it looks like the CMC knows something the Mane Six doesn't. And that was a bit of a 180 from Twilight.
Nice chapter. Good luck with the next one. Thanks for the update.
You seriously need an editor
i hope this story continues soon ^_^
This is how u set up a f__king depressing story. I AM LOVING IT. And poor Spike man :(
Well u know when people are clueless is when they cant take a FUCKING HINT OMFG HOW CAN U NOT SEE THAT.
First chapter was . . . problematic, but I'll continue.
Enough of the song and fucking dance already! Get on with it!
Surprisingly, I kinda wondered if Celestia knows what's going on with the fire ruby...I mean, if the CMC definitely figured out what happened when Rarity gave Spike a broken Fire Ruby, I would believe that the Princess of the Sun would know a bit about enchanted and special items, especially for dragons. And I be she knows why Fire Rubies are in the same shape as a heart.
4965004 are you still going to post the next chapter it's been 2 FUCKING YEAR'S WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!? I just want to see the next chapter.
welp this story is dead, rest in peace
Twilight. Rainbow. Pinkie. Applejack. Rarity. Fluttershy.
GO...TO...HELL.
Ahem,
Mr/Miss.WarriorDragon47, I have recently read your fanfic and have found it to be ver interesting. The concept, although done before, is very interesting, I enjoy your take on it and would like you to continue it. However there are some outstanding problems that you should address. Number 1 should be obvious enough, it's simply a matter of simple grammar and should you fix it your story would be greatly enhanced. Number 2 is also glaringly obvious, the dialogue is akward and strange to read, try to make the dialogue more like how you would actually speak in real life. Lastly the pacing of the story is abhorrent and is too convenient to make a competent story, for example nobody remembering Spike's birthday, Spike then slipping on a all too convenient banana peel, then Rainbow Dash pouring flour on him while Rarity is being proposed to and accepting. Another problem that stems from this is that the Mane 6 are simply too Out Of Character (OOC), this seems to be used to garner sympathy for Spike but doing things like that are cheap and lazy. Instead take your time to develop a real motivation that people can relate to or easily sympathize with. Additionally take time to develop the world as well, throwing the readers into a setting is very lazy and shouldn't be done.
-Sincerely, Quill Plus Ink
Not trying to be rude or anything but are you going to update anytime soon?
I.....don't understand why people create a story at all when they only have one chapter and then forget about it out of nowhere.
New chapter?
I just saw this and found it to be good. A few grammatical errors but not so bad. I would say I hope to see more but by the looks of the date..... I'll just say that I hope you get to come back to it. You have a start of a good story and hope to see what comes out in the long run. Thanks for this part of the story so far.