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Europa


I am best moon. Suck it, Titan.

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Her death had been catastrophic. Deadened iron in her core, sapping her strength, then the incomprehensibly painful collapse into her own body. But that was in the past, and Cygnus X-1 had grown content with her life as a black hole.

But then, she fell to a strange planet in a stranger body. Not knowing how to eat, drink, or communicate, Cygnus X-1 would have met her end if it were not for meeting an organic who took mercy on her. But now that she had returned to life, Cygnus X-1 found her embers sparking, and within her new powers is the way for her to return...

... and if anyone tried to stop her from going home? She was going to kill them.

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Comments ( 90 )

You really love astronomical bodies, don't you?

Huh. When you said you'd have a new story up "very, very soon", I still didn't think that you meant this soon.

Also, before I start reading, I'd just like to mention that, partway through the description, I was reminded of this. Then I read the rest of the description and, of course, it's pretty clear that the story isn't about anything like that (...as far as I can tell), but it's a cool idea that seems to like popping up in my head recently. Anyway, on to actually read the story!

...And the beginning is kind of awesome. And I doubt that you're at risk of a cliched story idea here. :)

Though I'm interested in the antimatter galaxies you describe. I thought that we'd not detected any (and that this was rather a puzzle)?
...Then again, this appears to be a story about a sentient black hole that turns into a pony. Perhaps I ought to be more open to the idea that the universe being described at the beginning is only similar to ours.

"gravitational shredded"
gravitationally

"the long, bleakness of"
I am not sure that that comma ought to be there.

"and, apparently, her consciousness."
How does she determine that? Or does she assume it from the localisation of sensory perceptions there?

Oh, for a moment there I thought you'd decided that even "black hole turns into pony" was too normal and were going for "black hole turns into griffin" instead. :)

...Aaaaand right after I say that I read down a bit further... :D

Well, Vinur, if they do see you, they probably won't believe their own eyes.

And so ends the first chapter. :D

*raises eyebrow*

Well Europa, this is definitively something...

...just gotta find what that something is. Will give this a read soon.

Ok, I gotta say, I'm really digging this story. You managed to catch my attention right away and I loved the overall descriptions and such. The slight comedy between the stars was also interesting.

On that note: ORGANICS!!!!!

Anyways, I liked how you gave her a rather unique new body, as not many stories have yet to take advantage if that. The premise is interesting. The originality is there. The first chapter locked me in. Let's do this!
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At the end of this chapter like:
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IN A GOOD WAY!
Anyways, really looking forward to this!

*BONNNNG* In the Constellation of Cygnus, there lurks a mysterious, invisible force: *BONNNNG* the black hole of Cygnus X-1. *BONNNNG* Six Stars of the Northern Cross, in mourning for their sister's loss, in a final flash of glory, nevermore to grace the night... *BONNNNG*

You ponified a black hole. A black hole. :rainbowhuh:

5438301 No I didn't. Read a little closer.:raritywink:

This is... great.

Though I do have some very petty and minor problems with the [insert sensitive character] randomly adopting [insert helpless character] trope, I can't say that I don't enjoy it. (I do. A lot)

You also mentioned that you might want someone to edit the story; I'd be willing to.

5438446 Oh oh! Can I be a proof reader? Pwease?:fluttershysad:

Thanks, Big E. When you said you were trying something different to get over the SS hump, you really meant it!

well, this is interesting. I want to see where this goes, so you better continue it, because i'm addicted to great stories

Wow, i don't think I've seen anything like this in a long time, if at all. Sapient stars and black holes, a centaur that is not Tirek, griffon/avian puns and jargon, well, you catch my drift. I'm glad I finally got around to reading this.

I doubt it, but if you need any extra help with editing or prereading of any kind, I'd be happy to help.

This does make me wonder if Tirek is also a black hole incarnate. Given that Celestia and Luna are probably the local Sun and Moon incarnate it is possible.

5438096 Well yeah, everyone knows Sol is an A-hole, always bragging about those squishy organics

While papa Sol might be a bit of an asshole, he seems to be so proud of his little organics, leaving daddy's orbit, all by themselves!

Well, I have to say that out of all the story's I've read here this seems to be shaping up to be one of the most unique. You are being watched.

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I stand by my statement. Ponification does not mean necessarily making it into a pony. :moustache:

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I think he's referring to ponification as becoming any being from the show. It's an all encompassing term, here.

Hmm. I like this

There is no dark tag so I have hope the comment in the summary where she'll kill anyone in her way won't happen. Or at least be silly.

"Organs she didn't know the purpose of fluctuated in ways she wasn't sure but was fairly certain that weren't normal."
Hm. Perhaps "Organs she didn't know the purpose of fluctuated in ways that she wasn't sure but was fairly certain weren't normal."?

I am curious about these Lords and Ladies... I tried researching who named HDE 226868, but I didn't find it.

They have microwaves? Interesting. It sounds like the cold box was magical, though.

"Cygnus find the "
found

Aw, and the chapter ends...

pretty good so far it has a interesting idea original plotline and is very well executed :moustache: keep up the good work you've got me very interested :pinkiehappy:

The names of Lords and Ladies far beyond her own Lord danced in her mind.

Wait, the what? Stars have nobility?

A very unique read. Don't think I've come across anything quite like on this site. Very intriguing ideas. I look forward to the continuation of Cygnus X-1's adventures as an organic meatbag.

In terms of stars the oldest we know HD 140283 aka the Methuselah star is a sub-giant with an estimated age of 14.46 billion years. That might raise an eyebrow or two for those of you who remember that the age of the universe is estimated as 13.77 billion years with an uncertainty of 800 million years. It is also estimated to be a second generation star, forming from the remnants of the very first generation of stars. It is also 190.1 light years away away from Sol.

Well now. This is different.

...
Keep going. :trixieshiftright:

"what's the worst that could happen?" Really? it's screaming 'something big happening next chapter' right there. Anyway, great chapter, I love reading your stories, thanks to their high-quality and interesting content.

Good work, and good luck with next chapter (when you start writing it)

I appear to be magic - I tell you to keep going and bam, new chapter. :pinkiegasp:

Hmm....

Keep going. :trixieshiftright:

"determine the nature of took me from"
"of what took me from"?

"Lord Sagittarius A-star"
What does the "-star" mean?
[does a bit more research]
Oh! Sagittarius A*.

Hm. I'm still not convinced that Tirek didn't also start as a black hole. I mean, the bleeding test isn't actually a very good test, given that Vinur, by his own admission, is just making an assumption that Tirek would have bled blood instead of mist.

"grasp where I gather the"
"gathered"?

Well. This ought to be interesting. :)

Someone needs to give her a book of common idioms that includes the phrase 'tempting fate'.

what's the worst that could happen?

*face palm so hard, repeatedly*
The very words that jinx everything! And ruin your day! Because somebody just tempted fate!
*face palm*

Good story so far :twilightsmile:
A bit cliché on some points, (specially the last sentence) but good story.

It's fairly obvious; Anti-magic wards on the rooms, for security. The dry throat is because she eats magic, including ambient magic in the air, but she notices the lack of it, like what is caused by the wards, as dryness. Hence the twitchy griffin wings, because that's where they channel the majority of their magic.

I am certain that her dry throat is dehydration.

And so the word begins to spread. Wonder how long it will be before the diplomatic communication lines begin lighting up?

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Aye, that's what I was thinking.

Spacial bodies talking and turning into other things? :yay::heart:

I love you man.

Answering yes to an either-or question? It was the sort of nonsense 226868 did - Is that couple still around or have they collapsed? Yes, - and she couldn't stand it.

I was under the impression 226868 only came around AFTER Cygnus collapsed into a blackhole, and as which she wouldn't be able to ask questions.

This is an excellent and unique story! Well written!

I feel torn on Cygnus' reactions.

Her desire to learn to drain magic is depressing because it plays into exactly what everyone fears from her. In that light, not killing her immediately will become a mistake that endangers many lives, if not the entire world. A poor moral to learn in a setting such as Equestria's.

However, as she pointed out, she is weak; really really weak. She is completely reliant on others for anything when she has never, ever relied on others beforehand. Yet she is also treated as a potential criminal. There is probably some kind of middle ground between apocalypse and draining magic to gain independence. After all, it was Tirek's addiction/obsession to draining magic that was the problem, not the simple act of doing so. Yet if others had their way, she would be the same as an alicorn that was never taught to use magic in fear becoming a new Nightmare Moon.

From a neutral point of view, learning how to use all of one's abilities is something expected, and anything that denies that without good reason (and simple fear of repeating Tirek isn't a good enough reason) is to be looked down upon.

It's her alienation from life itself that is the potential disturbing part. The fact that she takes the message that she can't trust whatever any other being says because she realizes they can and will lie to her is likewise depressing, because it's very easy to just dismiss inconvenient points of view as 'lying', and that may actually be the bigger mistake here rather than being told that her species can drain magic.

Alas, poor Cyggy.

Oh, so the Princesses are finding out now, then? Ought to be interesting...

"Her mind drudged up"
"dredged"

"which used, of all things, base eight numbering"
:)

You have some pronoun inconsistency when the magic specialist arrives; I understand why you don't start immediately using "she", but I'd suggest you use only one of "it" and "they"; having both confused me and broke me out of the reading to sort it out.

Aaaand the magic specialist is likely now mentally kicking herself very hard. :D

Well, this plot seems to be thickening nicely.

It's time for her to kick some ass. I'd probably do the same choice if I was In her position, and to leave a message saying "not going to help me fine die then." Can't wait for her to get some sweet ass revenge.:pinkiecrazy:

Feh! She deserves NOTHING!!'

Like all those other bloated, obese supergiants, she foolishly gobbled up all her lighter elements in a few million years and blew up! Now she's a greedy, grabby black hole and wants to suck the life out of everything around her and keep eating and eating and eating, NEVER producing anything useful!

Why should anyone put up with that?!

If she'd been a much smarter and more thrifty red dwarf, she could have lasted to near the end of the universe! But nope, just a spoiled fatass demanding cosmic welfare!

:trollestia:

5694805 <- Implying stars have a choice in how much mass they form with. Implying she was actively seeking out matter to absorb instead of floating content with listening to HD 226868 keep her company.

5460484 Have you noticed the theory gathering credence lately it that there was no Big Bang, and that the universe may be truly infinite and eternal?

*throws up hands*

Seriously? Now we're basically back to God at this point! :trollestia:

5694815 Implying that you took my comments seriously...

Seriously?

:trollestia:

5694859 Implying I'm taking you seriously thinking I took you seriously when I didn't take you seriously.

... seriously.

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