Blackjack, an incompetent security mare from the dystopian Stable 99, suddenly has her monotonous life turned upside down when the stable is invaded by vicious raiders. Blackjack flees the stable with EC-1101, with the wasteland in hot pursuit.
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oh lawdy lawdy that is too much, heheh.
#GhoulProblems
Man what a chapter this was... shit lotta shit, good and bad Dx
Awesome job man, awesome job!
ONLY ONE MORE!
Then... other things.
Extra "more".
Sanguine should go through a meat grinder... slowly.
But not before he gets to watch his revived family go through it first.
he tore out the Delta ?
Blackjack, you idjit. But an admirable idjit.
Damned Sanguine, what now?
I love this song. It's helped define how I view PH and especially where I expected Blackjack's personal story to end for years. It definitely deserves a link.
And wow, you're redoing the levels/footnotes? Interesting move. I like that it gives more perk opportunities, since those are some nice flavor. Don't think I buy her as a low level character at this point, though. But that'll pass.
Okay I just now started the chapter but I want to comment this now. The reference to pinkie and the brain was gold!
My feels! That ending! My feels hurt so hard..!
I remember this scene hitting harder the first time I read it, but it still packs quite a punch.
I.... I just.... I can't do this! i need a break!
THE FELZ
Damnit, your plot armor melted, Priest. I really liked you, you sonnuva bitch.
Well, Sanguine's ranting pretty much confirm there is far more to the electrical abomination and the Goldenblood apparition than meets the eye.
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All that feels at the end!!
R.I.P Priest and Dusty Trails!
And in one chapter, Sanguine has gone from "kinda shady bad guy" to "it's personal now, I need him fucking dead".
I knew getting involved with P-21 was gonna be a death sentence for Priest. I called it so hard. At least I have a valid reason to hate you now. :V
Okay, while otherwise a sad chapter, that right there made my day.
Ok so I've been binging this story. SO many references and one liners, but this one made me spit out my breakfast.
Shut up and take my money! Blast from the childhood right there!
Congrats Somber. Ya got me wanting to cry like I did during a certain ponies funeral in FoE. Only reason I didn't, I walked away and took some time before continue. You honestly are a fantastic author and I thank you with all my heart and soul for making this story. Now if you'll please excuse me, I'm gonna go cry now.
...they should rename that place Final Destination.
I still can't believe Sanguine got away...with what he wanted.
Too bad his entire plan is literally going to blow up in his face after Pip lights the fuse under Trixie.
But now I'm more that robot underground...
Because everything she touches turns into Explodium.
Another tearful funeral.
'Hoofington rises' It awoke...it wants the keys, so that it may be free!
But...if all it took to awaken it was a megaspell gun shot...why didn't it wake when the world was blown up?
Was it like..."Ahahah I awake after all this time, and now I wil-huh...who built this magical super fortress on me? Hello? Anyone out there?! *banging noises* Can someone let me out? ... Well balls...everyone's dead. I'm going to be stuck in here forever! *eventually crying self to sleep.* Zzzzz."
Blackjacks cutie mark should be a bleeding heart with a bullet hole in it. I mean, it's like a literal, and non-literal representation of who she is.
Never change Lacunae.
somehow that made me think of this comic strip:
https://tritebristle.deviantart.com/art/Heartstrings-ch2-p13-Use-da-magics-Lyra-327179897
“My turn,”
best line ever
“I found a boat.
second best line ever
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Charity is arguably more important than ec 1101.
Since blackjack is pretty sure she is a likely candidate for being the element of generosity.
So that is actually a good deal, additionally its implied the program might not work right for unauthorized users.
All of this shit and she's only level THREE?! Are we working on a 1-5 scale here or what? Cause if there are still 43 levels to go for then she's going to transcend reality.
9960937
She started a new game+ after she died and was brought back
Damn it with the hard stuff. We get another ppl killed. At least we have a full mane 6 set right?
i just had an epiphany, i was in the shower and thinking bout stuff and then i realized. in the game blackjack you try to get the numerical value of 21. and blackjacks first companion was a particular stallion with 21 in his name, and i think that's pretty funny
Noooo!!! Not priest!!😭😭
I don’t like this title.
This was unexpected. Looks like they have a long walk ahead. Besides, I think we need some comedy right now. Something tells me, bad stuff is about to happen.
It sweet seeing him finally open up towards Scotch. Notably all this began on the Seahorse when he first called her his daughter. Might have been the fact that she almost had been raped and/or killed that made him finally care about her.
They are jerks, but Blackjack is to one who no longer gets tried. Makes sense that she’s the draft horse, now.
Hey I think we found Troubleshoe's descendant.
Is that an accent or a broken jaw?
Can’t wait for them to show up again in five, ten or fifteen chapters and play a really important role in the story.
Since I had a lot of complains about the last chapter it’s about time I’m going to say something positive: The side and minor characters in this story aren’t just staffage, they have history. It’s amazing how much personality Somber gave most of them.
As soon as the group is back in the Hoofington area comedy time is over and we’re back to cruelty and suffering.
Fuck, that’s a real punch into the guts.
I always referred Stockyard as Blackjack’s only complete victory. The one time she helped everyone and everything turned out better for everypony involved.
And now everyone in the town was brutality killed by Sanguine.
Project Horizons really knows how to make you feel miserable.
Excatly. The guy is just a scavenger. Hardly something I would consider evil by Wasteland standards.
Someone leaving a message.
Sanguine is done being patient. He deliberately attacked them because of Blackjack and made sure they would die a slow and painful death. Making even Notshy uncomfortable. The guy is a lot more evil than I expected.
Suddenly this guy who didn’t really do that much, established himself as worse than Deus.
You are one weird pony Blackjack. You can kill dozens without breaking a sweat but mercy killing a pony that’s asking you for it, is too much? There's a difference between executing somepony and granting a dying pony as less painful death. Maybe one day you'll learn the difference.
Wow, we’re actually going to find out what the red button does.
And that’s why P-21 is my favorite character. Sure the beating was him going to be far, but it’s about time somepony finally told her that.
“Sanguine massacred most of the miners I liberated and put the survivors through the rock crusher. I feel really horrible. This is all my fault and… Oh shiny red button! This is going to be fun!”
I know the story doesn’t want to be dark and gloomy all the time. But sometimes it makes no sense to have such goofy stuff right after a gruesome scene. Blackjack slipping on a banana peel is funny. Blackjack slipping on a banana peel just after having gassed her whole Stable isn’t.
See, even the Dealer aggress.
I have a feeling that I’m going to say that a lot but… Oh Fuck!
Okay what other settlements are left? I don’t think the could take one the Reapers or the Enclave. So, these places should be safe. Miramar, Fallen Arc and the HMS Celestia have been evacuated. This leaves Flotsam and the Colligate. Maybe Tenpony, too, if he wants to go that far up north.
Probably a new, proud member of Flank’s Security force, who’s strategy to survive was to take as many chems possibly.
Sanguine, Goldenblood, the Minstery Mares... they all had it wrong. You don't need fancy science stuff to make super soldiers.
Just inject a bunch of drugs into a pony and you have an unstoppable killing machine.
I have now idea how that would work or how Blackjack knows this.
Also calling it now: The DJs in the club are either death or worse. Because they were described at the only ponies sad to see Blackjack and Co. leave. That means they are the perfect victims to make the readers feel even sader.
Thanks god Caprice and the doc survived as well as a lot of other Flank ponies. After Brimstone Falls I really to see a place Sanguine hadn’t completely fucked over.
Hey, a pony that told Blackjack exactly what she wanted to hear. Her reaction to this should be interesting.
I can see her point, but that doesn’t change the fact it’s wrong to blame Blackjack for this. Sanguine was the one who went on a killing spree.
By the end of the story Blackjack will have accidentally managed to unite all the warring faction in the Hoof, because everpony realized that they all hate Blackjack so much more than each other.
Damn Scotch is really good at hiding her issue. Even better than P-21. At least with him you can tell that something is bothering him when he’s more bitchy than usual. But Scotch? Not a single hint that something was wrong.
Didn’t expect that this would be brought up again. Should’ve known better by now.
So, if you ever wonder if your story is as a dark as PH just ask yourself one question: How many of my main characters have been raped. If the answer is “Less than three” Congratulations, your story is probably not as dark as PH.
That’s a… interesting way to describe what happened.
That escalated quickly.
Fair warning: In this part I’m talking about some very uncomfortable stuff. If you don’t want to deal with this, I recommend you skip to the next part.
Did anyone who pre-read this actually realized the implications of this? The story is telling us that people who have been raped are dangerous. That they are prone to violent outbursts and if you just happen to be the same gender as their rapist you must be extra careful around them, because if you trigger them, they may kill you in a fit of rage. Best to lock them all up, before they hurt themselves or someone else.
Blackjack, Rampage and P-21 are no longer ponies who went through something horrible and need help. Being raped has turned them into violent, dangerous people and they constantly have to restrain themselves before they do anything they may regret.
This is bad. Really bad. I get that’s wasn’t the intention of this part but that’s how it comes across.
Look I still like P-21 and think the story did an incredibly good job at portraying his trauma. However, people (and ponies, I guess) aren’t the same. * Not everyone reacts to a traumatic experience the same way. Yet in this story, we have three main characters who all responded the same way: With violent outbursts. And this , to put it mildly, is problematic.
(*Okay, I’m no psychologist so maybe I’m wrong. But if people were that predictable I would assume therapy would be a lot easier.)
The sad part about this is, that the last chapter had a great opportunity to show us Blackjack’s trauma in a different way. Homage being Homage (aka the only mare to match Blackjack in horniness) could have flirted with Blackjack and strongly suggesting the foursome. Maybe encouraged by Glory. And instead of Blackjack being all eager, this would have made her feel very uncomfortable. Much to her own frustration/confusion. Maybe it could’ve even led to her having a panic attack.
Sure, we wouldn’t have gotten the hawt lesbian fanservice foursome with the main character of Fallout: Equestria but if I want to read something like that, there’s probably a clopfic out there that got me covered.
This on the other hand, is some really great wisdom from Rampage. As I said earlier, Deus went through a lot of bad and a horrible stuff. But in the end, it was him who decided to be a monster and not somepony else. Pain is no excuse.
Great someone is forming cult. Either turning them into an army of loyal fanatics or sacrificing them for some sinister purpose.
The mystery of the respawning items continues.
These guys aren’t the sharpest tools in the shed. The know about Security but have no idea how she looks?
In this case, I actually agree with her. No need to spill blood if it can’t be avoided and these ponies don’t look like they’re about to do go murdering and raping some innocents. They are more misguided than evil. Yet.
That’s admirable. She’s willing to go to Blackjack and beg her to give up the EC-1101 to save Sanguine. Says a lot about how much she cares for him.
Well even bad people have family and loved ones. Doesn’t justify their actions or makes what they did less bad.
No.
Guys who throw ponies in rock crushers or murdering others simple because someone they hate walked past them don’t deserve a second chance. Unless they are truly remorseful and want to spend the rest of their lives making amends. Or if they are being mind controlled/forced into doing it.
Something tells me Sanguine is neither of these two.
Just get her drunk enough. Ask the bounty hunters in the museum.
Good to see Blackjack isn’t completely naïve.
The begin of a beautiful friendship.
This would actually a good bargain chip. Sanguine has the Crusaders, but Blackjack has Notshy. If there’s one pony whose life he values more than his, it’s probably her. So how about offering a hostage exchange?
That such a Charity thing to say.
Right, blame others for your actions. Cleary it's Blackjack's fault that you had to put the ponies into the rock crusher, not you being a morally corrupt asshole with a disregard for the lives of others.
RIP Priest. You died like a hero.
Again, Dealer turns out to be incredible smart and helpful for a skeletal ghost horse with a card fetish.
Despite all the sadness and death, it’s great to see that they are there for each other.
Charity had a Rarity figurine. This feels very fitting. I think she really could’ve been a potential bearer of the Element of Generosity.
Blackjack’s On-screen Body Count: Still156
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Most of the stuff after Stable 99 was basically one huge side quest about Blackjack stopping the Reaper-Brotherhood war. Followed by a crossover episode where Blackjack metLittlepip. Now we’re back with the main quest and the story drops another bomb on the readers. Brimestone Falls really hit hard. Probably because unlike Stable 99 I didn’t know it would happen.
And Sanguine went from a minor nuisance to a genuine threat that must be stopped. He even outmatches Deus in cruelty. I wonder if this is going to be a new trend. Each main villain being worse than the previous one. So watch out for the next guy to wear cloths made out of baby scalps.
Lots of good ponies died pointless and cruel deaths, including some likeable side characters like Priest and Sanguine got exactly what he wanted. This is a new low point for the group. Hopefully we actually them going straight after Sanguine in the next chapters, instead of being side-tracked by something else and the Readers have to wait 20 more chapters before the story goes back to stopping that Ghoul.
Finally, this was the end of Priest’s journey. Great character and I really liked that he went out by saving the life of one of his Crusaders. It was a true heroic sacrifice. And while I’m not sure if he was still able to understand Blackjack’s word, like her, I hope he did. Farewell!
Edit: Almost forgot the most important part. Not as much self-loathing Blackjack as in the previous one. That’s a huge improvement. Sadly, I’m expecting this not to last very long.
Blackjack be out here giving the worst possible people second chances. I didn't even feel sad when Priest died because I was busy fuming over her letting Flutterbitch live. ffs!
I really did laugh out loud here. Man Lacunae is great
Holy fuck Blackjack actually gave the file to him. I mean I'm glad she followed what the reaper pony advised her to do because he seems to be always right. But I really expected Blackjack to just someone kill Sanguine and save Charity
How am I not even halfway through??????
Psychoshy getting freaked out by this is a REAL BAD sign.
Ok, we had our fun for two chapters. Playtime is over.
RIP Dusty Trails
…
Wonders never cease! She can learn!
She is still learning!
Amazing. She scouted the enemy position, devised a plan, and absolutely kicked some flank.
RIP Priest. He died a hero. Sanguine has EC-1101 now, but at least everypony is on the same page that the number one priority has to be tracking this bastard down and recovering it.
I’m immensely relieved that at least the Crusaders all made it out alive. But Somber, I have my eye on you! Don’t think I’m not ready for this to be a fakeout before something terrible happens to them later!
Would buy the soundtrack to this book, damn!
Of course the last figurine she’s going to find is the one keyed to intelligence. Of course!
For fuck sake just kill this cunt already!
The comments on the previous chapter said that it was the last calm chapter in this sea of despair that is to come, I just want to know if the ending is going to be as fucked up as I think it will be, or if there really is hope for Hoofington
Truer words have never been said before.
When Rampage says she "was a blank slate" in the Victims chapter, is she saying she was innocent, and had all her recent memories? Or was the damage to her brain making her mentally slow with no memory? The latter I always thought of, but the former makes it way more tragic.
I know Preist took some memories away, but surely not all of her childhood?
Okay, i can understand why blackjack hadn't killed him when they were on the bridge. She has her stupid policy when she traded more than 500 ponies for her pipbuck. (And couldn't give one more to end all of this, though. Really, what the fuck, I want to smash her across her face so bad. Agh.. The ways Somber tries to justify all of this bullshit...)
But why the fuck did she just stay in chapel instead of running for sanguine after saving Chatiry? He's the fuckin old ghoul and she's a CYBERPONY who can run all across the Hoof five times with no problem!
You serious, you couldn't come up with some more sensible way to justify Sanguine's victory?
I like this book. But sometimes it's too hard to read and stop myself from screaming.