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The Story of Char

Char was, from what he can remember, a normal Charizard who delivered mail with his best friend, a Dragonite named Drago. But when he wakes up with only the previous information as a Pegasus in a world inhabited by ponies. Things get out of hoof, from falling in love. to keeping his identity a secret.

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CharThePegasus

CharThePegasus #1 · Aug 3rd, 2014 · · · Prologue ·

Honestly, I hope I didn't do bad. But be honest what did you think of it?

CharThePegasus

CharThePegasus #2 · Aug 9th, 2014 · · · Chapter 1: Equestri-what? ·

In case you don't understand the light grey text. That's Arceus talking. If you never saw the grey text, it's in the Author's Note.

Dat monster hunting pony

Dat monster hunting pony #3 · Aug 10th, 2014 · · · Chapter 1: Equestri-what? ·

This story has gained a like and a fav keep up the good work!

TheGreatSmooze

TheGreatSmooze #4 · Aug 10th, 2014 · 1 · · Chapter 1: Equestri-what? ·

There are lots of grammatical and spelling errors. I would proofread again or find an editor. Beyond that I think the has an interesting premise and potential. One thing that would help is including more descriptive terms of the story elements. Don't just tell us there was a meteor-like object, try to show us so we can feel like part of the story. There's too much going on and at too fast a pace to try and only follow Char's stream of consciousness.

Hope that helps.

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