Hello. My name is Adam Jones, yeah you probably never heard of me. I'm UKSF, pathfinders to be exact and now military liaison between here and home, well I say home, here is now my home. For now anyway. Originally I was stepping down from the pathfinders after my last training exercise in Cyprus. Which then lead to me being offered a job working a very simple security liaison role paying very generously, plus brilliant benefits. They neglected to mention I would be working for the Bermuda project.
Yes that one, the one where the portal is to Equestria. Now introductions aside I can begin to tell my tale of my experiences in Equestria.
Rated Teen for some sexual humour and scenes in which characters have sexual relations. NO CLOP.
Gore tag for some scenes of mild blood and violence.
I don't know about the story so far, but I'm gonna fav it to see where the story goes. My opinion, I find it weird that their sending one guy, not a small squad.
Erm...
Can you do a comedy story? Maybe one where Gummy or one of the pets turns into a pony? Something lighthearted like that?
That'd be cool.
5000808 I am trying
I'm trying to write 'new guy' but every time I read it it's just not funny. 
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Oh, that's not good. I could help!
I just finished reading this story, and i could say that you left off on one of the best cliffhangers ever!
I want to read more MOAR!!! 
A lot is going to go wrong. Sorry, i had to say that. Anyway, nice chapter/writting.
5085763 Thank you
I'm glad you are enjoying it 
and yes it will all go wrong starting with Adam's 'job interview' with Luna 
5087289 I kinda figured, in a good way.
Only equestrians can pay that much....
XD love it
I like that this story, need more chapters though.
Bwahahahaha!
5307019 I am glad that you are enjoying it. Although I am trying to get more chapters out, just very busy most the time. But I am improving with my writing so over time chapters should come out faster. I do apologise though for my writing speed. Hope you still enjoy it in future
Well that made me laugh...
Was that a Snickers reference because that's what it seems to me.
'manor' - that's not what that means.
'in a manor' - 'in a manner of speaking'
'manor or fact' - matter of fact (but this doesn't really work). Probably makes more sense to end the sentence after 'said'.
I was sat I the - sat in the
'ever been on' - been in
'whatever I want' - wanted surrounded by
and at very - had.....
I would strongly suggest finding a grammer checker, this will at least highlight many or most of these errors.
http://www.grammarcheck.net/editor/ is one.
5935655 Thanks for the heads up. It helps a lot when things go wrong, normally I do review my chapters but 2 sets of eyes are better than one. Thanks for the point outs and I will review my chapters on a later date. Normally I use google docs to check my work but clearly it is not as effective. I may use the check bot you have offered cheers.
I'm not sure why being in a dream is such an offense...It is a dream, not memories...And as soon as you're aware that it is a dream...You are basicly god in your own mind...
Sooooooooooo I'm basically new to fimfiction and I'm liking how it is going so far
5941898 Well welcome to FimFiction
I'm glad you enjoy my fiction so far. Thank you.
Do Continue My Good Man