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Just a silly little pony

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When Pinkie's youngest, Blinkie Pie, is sent to live with her fun loving older sister the ponies find that Blinkie is a little more then just off.

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Comment posted by toxiconym deleted Jul 31st, 2014

Wow! Great first chapter! I'm looking forward to more!

did i break a rule in the comment guidelines or something or do you just not like criticism by someone nobody knows and has no stories posted

4777397 I'm really sorry I actually didn't mean to delete it. This is my first like two days on the site and when I hit the button that deleted it I thought it meant I wouldn't be viewing it anymore but it deleted the comment and I didn't know how to undo it. If you want to rewrite it I actually know not to hit that button this time and I can reply properly :pinkiehappy:

"I always wished a had a little brother or sister to mess with growing up,” Rainbow Dash notes.

Uh, what about Scootaloo? :rainbowhuh: Forget about her already?

As I was saying, the spelling and grammar in this story could be better, you need an editor, or you could proofread. Also, I think you should make the conversations and details longer, and use the five senses. Thats basically what I wrote in a nutshell. oh and

I think I’ll come with you,” Twilight says trotting after them. “I’d love to learn about the workings of a rock farm!

thats the petriculture cycle series right there.

4777806 Oh okay, cool. I had my fiancé proof read it for me but he admitted he might have missed somethings so we're looking into finding someone else to lend a helping hand. And I'll try to add a little more description next chapter!

If that's the case, I shall call your version of her "Rainbow Douche."

That was really good. I can't wait to read more! :twilightblush:

Thank you, but I will still refer to her as such in the reviews. :rainbowdetermined2: See ya next time!

This has the potential to be a great sad/dark-fic.

So Inkie is the one with the gray coat and black mane right? Plays a cello in canterlot. Hmmm. Site everyone call her Inkie it does she go by another name?

I MUST KNOW!!!

4784630 The most common name for the gray and black one is Inkie but I may be using a fandom theory character :pinkiehappy:

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I Know I was making a joke that Octavia was really a pie sister. Seeing as they are both gray and black and play the cello. I just thought It was mere coincidence

Oh haha. Yeah they do look weirdly alike that's probably where the theory came from in the first place.

If you need help editing/ proof reading, I'll be willing to help you.

I was glad to see this finally updated, even though it was a rather short chapter.

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