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FluffyDoom


I have the best puppy-dog face ever. It will make you cry.

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An old pony’s tale draws twins, Astra and Shimmer, to the Everfree Forest. When they find the tale to be true, one soon regrets the adventure, while the other enjoys the outcome a little too much. They find gems that not only give them the power they searched for, but turns them into different species as well!

Watch as two ancient species that had been wiped out are recreated by an adventure, and how the mares cope with the outcome.

Two tricks of the night, the difference you shall see, as one as one turns you into an animal, the other makes you deadly. ~Engraved on a stone in an unknown language.

(Vampires and Lycans and Princesses, oh my!)

Cover picture made by me. (Which explains why it isn't the greatest.

Chapters (19)
Comments ( 32 )

You have a few instances where you spelled magic as magick unless you intentionally did that it would help for it to be corrected.

4915194 It was intentional, and it can be seen as correct both ways. Despite computers saying that magick is a spelling error, it isn't.

4915638 I am not using a pc and I just thought it was wrong because I don't see it often.

Also finished all chapters of the story so far and you get a fave.:moustache:

4915682 Yay for favorites, much thanks :D

A bat and a puppy.:pinkiecrazy:

What is small and cute yet scary and disgusting?

4918842 Irl bats.:moustache:

To me they are cute to girls not so much.

4922062 I dunno, I am techniclly a girl and I find them cute :3

But I am also the girl who loves slugs.

4922474 No, I am talking about girly girls who are terrified of dirt, sick people, and a few other things.

I would have to consider you a tomboy.

Is it acceptable?

Astra died and her sister is trying to comit homocide.

Hand?
I didn't know ponies had hands.

Last paragraph.

She stepped out with blood bags in hand

Well that was unexpected.
Can't wait for the next chapter.

Ast5ra?

I didn't know there was a 5 in there.:trollestia:

4981352 I usually write these late at night because I lack the skill to sleep >_<

4981524 Well then get less sleep. :P

5021236
There is also you know... School. And my Debate class has just finished the 6 day long exam, so I won't be writing tons of speeches about how to improve the town and school.
There is also minecraft.
Hmm, minecraft or writing, minecraft or writing.... MINECRAFT! *plays on it some more* I just love the newest update!

5022882 Minecraft died for me after the 1.7.2 new update, (i was playing since the last alpha update.) It didn't have that charm for me anymore.

Wait... That's it? The end? Very anti climactic.

5039666 Does it say complete? I think not :L

Nah, read again, I have it PLANNED out. I got a few more chapters left in me lady.:pinkiehappy:

Just so you know this is being read.

And I like this story.:twilightsmile:

5107754 D'aw, thanks :pinkiesmile:
Yeah, at least this wasn't my worse piece of work. I am going to try a new type of editing in the next book. I dunno if there will be a third one though. Anyway, bonus chapters shall be posted soon!

"the death of a story is a sad happening indeed. me. just now


just read your story list didn't know this story was already finished since it is tagged as incomplete sorry

Your sentence styling doesn't really flow all that well, it makes the story harder to read and less enjoyable. It was worse in this chapter than the last. Still, I love vampire stories, and this one has a good start. While I don't love your diction, I do like the story so far.

Personally, I like long chapters like this or longer, but that's just me. And for the spelling of "magick", I think it's best as just "magic". That's because in the show, it's spelled "magic". Since this is the same kind of magic as usually mentioned in the show and not some new, unique kind, I think "magic" is best. That's just my reason for it and it's not a big deal. Much better diction in this chapter! Less LUS too! Yay!

Shimmer gazed at the ground, slightly imagining her vision to be sharper than a hawks, or eagles, though she knew that was not the case. She was incredibly lucky with 20/20 vision, while her sisters was slightly worse, but it wasn’t overly horrible, and she could still make out some of the finer details farther away.

20/20 vision isn't perfect. It's the average eyesight of someone with healthy eyes. As far as I know, 20/10 is the best vision a human can get. 5% of people have 20/10. I used to have that, but then my eyes went bad and now it's a bit worse in my left eye.:fluttershysad:

Noooooooo! I don't want Shimmer to go awayyyy!! Astra is my favorite, but I love Shimmer too!

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