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Kavonde


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A freakish abomination from beyond the fringes of the rational universe emerges from the trackless depths and finds himself in Ponyville.

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Hhahaa, loved it!

Im highly surprised this didn't degenerate into tentical clop....

Haha! Doooooooooooooomed!

Welcome back, you glorious bastard.

It could be totally unjustified, but the cover art reminded me of this.

Reading this, I was oddly reminded of this...

It doesn't even fit anywhere, except that it is the same way my brain was fucked by this story based off the original works of HP Lovecraft.

I...I can't decide if you're amazing or terrible. Ether way I think I need some brain bleach.

... no comment

Best new OC, possibly ever.

Man, I really want to see some art of Clip all dolled up by Rarity.

This was funny, quirky, and surprisingly heartwarming.

I enjoyed this quite a bit. :twilightsmile:

I've always enjoyed the 'monster with an unusual personality' type story and this... this was a good one

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Thanks!

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Well, y'know, eventually.

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Good to be back, man.

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Fair cop.

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... that was glorious

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Then my work here is done.

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... no reply

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If I place in EQD's contest, that is ABSOLUTELY what I'm asking to have drawn.

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Glad to hear it :twilightsmile:

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your avatar is staring into my soul

4755794 I read 'outsider's perspective' and thought maybe a gryphon, or a dragon, and I was hoping for a zebra, or a Saddle Arabian.
But this....

I have no words which can suitably describe how I feel about this, so have a Mac. :eeyup:

While I didn't have a problem with the content of the story, I didn't find it all that funny. (Although the 'I really like your mane' part was chortle worthy)

Premise is marvelous, humor is well presented. Several lines in particular drew a smirk, if not an outright laugh. Stories with unusual subjects or characters can have a problem with length, becoming played out or overstaying their welcome, but this stayed fresh up to the end. I feel it missed a few good opportunities for additional fun, if I had to point one out I'd say more Pinkie interaction, but all in all I loved it. Solid work and well done!

-Hack

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Brilliantly executed. For once in my life, seeing a reference to something didn't ruin a story (well played, by the way). :)

Boom. All done.

Completely the reverse style to Changeling: The Movie. It'll be interesting to see how both fair. Here were have a fairly low-key kind of humour sustained in a dilution of utter absurdity which allows you a bit more leeway to get away with in-jokes, external references, and some thoroughly matured Stilton – an altogether different breed of frivolity.

I can't believe you managed to get away with some of those jokes, yet, in the grand scheme of things I think Changeling beats it by virtue of being both funny and having an engaging plot (nobody say I word – I will kill overenthusiastic shippers). Like Changeling, it's also a bit thin on the prompt, but any comedy that has me laughing rather than cringing generally gets my endorsement.

6/10 Prompt: Weak

-M

The cover had me thinking I was about to be getting the perspective of a gibbering mouther. I was not at all disappointed with the reality—I haven't giggled so much at a fic in months.

My favorite type of comedy is when an absurd situation is played absolutely straight. This story does so perfectly.

Great job, man. I expect this will place well in the contest.

At first I was disappointed that you didn't use the plotline "monstrosity from another dimension attempts to terrify ponies, but they are too darn nice about it." But you won me over. That was nice. Great ending lines, too.

Lol.

The ending was executed a bit blandly IMO. But overall the story was incredibly amusing.

Congrats on 6th place! :pinkiehappy:

I loved this story. While reading it, I had to say some of the lines out loud because of how amusing they sounded. One of my favorites definitely was,

"The next morning, the eveningshade guardian arrived with a large collection of what I recognized as arcane grimoires. My awe of her grew yet further. Tomes of knowledge were virtually unknown in the nether realms from which I was spawned, and those who can wield their power can reshape reality to their infinite whims. I understood now why this hive had but six guardians; even just one could have erased me from existence with hardly a thought."

This story was very amusing. I shall keep it for future amusement. Hats off to you author. :yay:

How exactly would the explanation of colors work? It seems unlikely that Clip's eyes see the same three colors as a pony's. I suppose Twilight could show Clip a rainbow and stick to pure colors, but then she'd have trouble explaining purple.

Lovecraftian comedy. Huh. Probably not the first time anyone ever thought of it, but it's a new one on me. I can say I got some real laughs out of it, and the perspective never stopped being fascinating. This is a good one.

"Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Pinkemina E'quus wgah'nagl fhtagn"

She who dreamt the world.

This is amazing! Clip is the best bringer of the apocalypse ever! A nice reality killer is a good reality killer.

This was a fun read! I'm glad your cover image was just so... irresistible. :D

Also, I was just struck with a pointless realization: one of the words Lovecraft was famous for using a lot was "Cyclopean," describing the architecture and structures people would find themselves in... and yet, unlike a cyclops, LOTS of Lovecraft's otherworldly beings had waaaay more than just one eyeball. Good times~

Finally, I could not stand the silence any longer. "... I really like your mane."

I completely lost it at that part. This whole thing was brilliantly done. Good job.

:rainbowlaugh: What? :rainbowlaugh:

How did you think up this story?! It's...well I don't know what to say, but I enjoyed it!

This could have been really interesting. Instead, this story devolved into comedy. I don't have a problem with comedy-- I simply feel as if you wasted the huge amount of potential your premise had.

Sequel maybe? :duck:

Woo, look at all these new comments! Time for some replies.

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Mwahaha.

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I think a solid "eeyup" would sum it up pretty well.

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I appreciate you reading nevertheless, and thank you for taking the time to comment :raritywink:

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I was really on the fence about expanding the Pinkie portion. I think it worked out okay, but there was definitely humor to be had in having Clip try to make cupcakes or something.

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I'm glad you both enjoyed it! And yeah, I'm kind of proud of sneaking the Universal Greeting in there and having it actually fit.

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Clip's not quite a gibbering mouther, but the basic idea is much the same. I'll have a shiny, beautifully-drawn picture of him to show off in the near future, I hope!

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Thank you! Looks like it managed to, after all :twilightsmile:

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Thank you! I'm glad my weirdness won you over, sir. The Evil League of Evil will recall their sniper team now, right?

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I actually kind of agree; wish I could have thought of a slightly more explosive way to wrap it up. Still, I'm pretty happy with Clip's mom's speech, and I'm glad you enjoyed the rest :twilightsmile:

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Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed my wordplay. It was a lot of fun to write that stuff, trying to get things to flow and whatnot.

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I think Clip was trying to simplify things a bit to make it understandable to frail, mortal minds. And it's not at all because the writer has a frail, mortal mind himself.

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Thanks! I'm sure it's not original, either, but I haven't come across any other entries in the genre. Maybe I'll start a trend!

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Ia, ia.

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And that's why Death is everyone's favorite Discworld character, I think. It's sort of comforting to think that entropy doesn't really hold a grudge.

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You know, I never really thought of that before, either. Hmm.

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I'm a sucker for that line. For some reason, I just think it's the perfect "I don't know what to say right now" response. Happy to hear others find it funny, too!

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I don't rightly know myself, but I'm glad you enjoyed it :twilightsmile:

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Well, I'm sorry the [Comedy] tag didn't properly calibrate your expectations. There are plenty of "freakish abomination destroys the world" stories out there, though. Hell, I wrote one myself. I'm sure some of 'em might be up your alley.

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A sequel would... not end well for the ponies, I think.

"Ba weep gra na weep ninny bon?"

:rainbowlaugh:

Were you inspired by this ?

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Ah, very, very nice. I love how it takes the 'outsider's perspective' as literally as possible, and at the same time puts a spin on it that I really didn't see coming. A cosmic horror pony story that's funny and clever and actually genuinely heartwarming at times.
And it gets a bit creepy at the end, but if something has to reap all of reality, it might as well be Clip. He seems like a nice and caring guy, and what can the harvest hope for, if not the care of the reaper man?
Plus, I don't think there is going to be a lot of life left to reap once he gets around to it. One hundred decillion days until the pale is sundered and The Things That Should Not Be devour All That Is... I'm pretty sure the heat death of the universe is scheduled to happen sooner than that.

*Alondro peers at the image*

Huh, so that's where my lab experiment got off to.

Oh well.

Best make another one... :pinkiecrazy:

*Alondro examines the Cosmic Seed packet he bought from Discount Galaxy Gardens Online.*

Ah dammit! Half of them are Sonic Seeds!

*grumbles about cheap online crap*

Next time I'm buying wholesale straight from God.

"Excuse me, did you say 'consume reality?'"
"At the end of all things, yes."

Love it.

It was an oddly interesting mix of 'Strange' and having some humor, I have to say.

My little horror, my little horror.

Haha, Lovecraftian cosmic horror story given the Friendship is Magic treatment. What a fun idea! :twilightsmile:

My favorite was the entrance of Mommy Old One, and just how...well, motherly she was.
I really liked this story; it was unexpectedly cute and heartwarming, and I for one don't think it needed to be any longer. It did what it did well, and didn't wear out it's welcome.

Not much else to say, really. Great work! :pinkiesmile:

I loved this. It's well-written and awesomely funny. :yay:

The straight lines of 'eldrich-god-perspective doom' followed by more straight lines grounded in the reality of ponies ("The next day, I helped Fluttershy feed her ducks") were all perfect and hilarious. Excellent work!

Isn't this... Azathoth from H.P. Lovecraft? Or am I thinking of another being?
...
Or is this just me thinking that I know what this is and it really isn't relevant?

Reminds me of the gibbering horror from DnD

This is my new favorite thing! If i could make any fimfic i had ever read into an episode by Cthulhu this would be it! Words cannot describe the awesomeness of this fic! :rainbowkiss:

Noone else has done it?

Great story. Poor Clip, having to wipe out all existence. At least now, he'll probably make it quick and painless.

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