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Archangel of the Silent


My name is Thomas Cross, and let it be known that the world did not break me.

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Nopony ever really knew much about the alicorns that came before Celestia and Luna. Without any prior knowledge, they just assumed that the sisters were immortal due to their age. Thing is, they weren't.

After their four thousand years were up, Celestia and Luna were taken from their mortal bodies to join their fellow passed in the Manaveil. This left behind two more, of course- such is the way of things.

Princess Mi Amore Cadenza, niece of the sun goddess, who now raises and sets the sun in honor of her dear aunt, Celestia.

And Princess Twilight Sparkle, who raises and sets the moon and stars in memory of her loving wife, Luna.

Now, one hundred years after Luna's death, she joins her dear Twilight to make one last memory until daylight comes.


My first, and likely only, one-shot (because I despise the things). Just a (hopefully) cute/heartbreaking story I thought of while sitting in the car and driving from Iowa to New Mexico. It was hell, but I got a lot of stuff done.

If you didn't like it, you could be kind enough to tell me why- that will really help improve my writing in the future. Or, if you really are that one person who just really wants to be a jackass, screw off and don't read it.

Credit for the cover art goes to lionel23 of deviantart.com.

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Comments ( 60 )

It feels wrong, giving something like this a thumbs up. But it certainly deserves it.

Now if you'll excuse me I need to go find my happy place :fluttercry:

I'm sure Equestria could go without sun light...for a couple days >.> right :twilightsmile:

I was waiting for this to happen ever since I heard this song. Well, maybe not this but most certainly some Twiluna story where they could only meet up at night and Luna had to run away when the sun rose.

And I refuse to be saddened by this, Luna gave an unexplained "screw you" to death for this one-shot to happen, why not another rule breaking night? And if that fails 4000 - Twilight's age years from this they'll be together again anyways so this'll end happily regardless!

4762717 Break what rule? I dont think you got it...
4762676 Certainly. That wouldnt cause any freak outs/ riots.:unsuresweetie:

4763129 Wasn't the rule that alicorns got 4000 years and then had to move on to some other world? Or die, or whatever?

4763167 That is the rule- 4000 years and they get to die. Read it again and PM me if you still don get it.

If I were to have had a heart would I have cried for hours. But since I seem to be immune to "feels" after watching Clannad and Clannad After Story, I think this was a wonderful story. Pulling at the heartstrings. And with detail. I love it!

~Flow

4763410 Yeah that will do it. Glad you enjoyed.

4763437
Glad you wrote it. Haha.

~Flow

4763533 You got it right? or was I too abstract with the point?

A few grammar and spelling mistakes, but still a damn fine story. Glad I read it.

4763553 I know but my xbox wont let me edit- Ill have to do it tomorrow.

Don't get me wrong, I loved this story. However, there a couple of plot holes.

- If Cadence took over Celestia's throne, who is ruling the Crystal Empire? And what about Twilight's Friendship Kingdom?

- The way you describe Twilight's height implies she is the same size she is now, about the size of a normal pony. However, alicorns are much taller and grow at a faster rate. Cadence isn't that much older than Twilight, and already she is the same size as Luna. If this takes place in the distant future, then I think Twilight would be at least that tall.

4763712 Cadence was also taller than most ponies before ascension. As for your other points, isnt it true that Tia is both the princess of the sun and of Equestria? With Astra and Love Beat in Canterlot Cadence and Twi can left to their pre-established roles AND celestial duties. (This is why I despise one-shots)

4763552
I can't say I'm the brightest... So.. No, I didn't exactly get the point.
Oh gosh, it's 2:18 in the morning.. Probably about time to go to sleep.

~Flow

Very good story but damn did it make me cry my eyes out

It's not true death if they continue to exist afterwards...

4763911 damn it.
4763945 good. I hope you. Joked and died on your own tears. I kid, I kid. But that dies mean I did something right,
4764508 I don't think you got it...

4764648 Mind telling me what I didn't get?

4764654 read it again and PM me if you still don't get it.

4764648 umm...
Sorry..?

~Flow

4765561 I was just really hoping someone got it. My fault.

4765676
It's okay. Haha.

~Flow

4819965 until they do. Which probably should be always, I can't imagine their jobs are very fun.

Don't know if I can read this, reading the description alone kicks me right in the feels...

5110661
Lol.

But I'm actually serious, it hurt my heart, literally, when I first read the description.

5110683
The last thing I want is a heart attack....buuut then again if I die I COULD get a personal heaven of a sort that isn't perfect and be in equestria...

5110692 have you read the bloody story yet?

5110701
I will, jeez, just give me some damn time wo-man...

5110708 don't assume I'm a woman. Its unhealthy.

5110723
K.

And 84 years? That seems short.

And wouldn't the memory of her always hurt? She's always in the memory of twilight, she'd see the memories, then be sad you won't have any more with her...

And I don't see how that would be comforting, Luna wasn't coming back, that would make me sadder in this situation, or at least til said person died to join her in the afterlife or whatever ponies called it.

Also, my pride was full so I had to empty most of it.

5110772 good.
Funny.
It hurts to be forgotten.
It isn't supposed to help.
This part doesn't make sense.

5110950
what.

Yes, it would hurt to be forgotten, but it is a painful reminder for the person alive, at least twilight will join her someday...in 3700 years or so.

What a great one-shot. The depressing ones always get to me ;-;

Oh, and I hope you realize that I made an entirely new section in my bookmarks just for these. Because of this story. :rainbowlaugh:

Great stuff.
(And the Celestia Code/Lunar Cypher series is great stuff as well. Frequent re-reads, hm? :P)

5202610 TCC about 15 TLC about 7. And seriously, that bookshelf thing is awesome. Cause I'm awesome.

5202636

15?

print.upper() "gg D:"
### That's like freaking 15 times, man. ;D

I did prefer the Luna Cypher, tho. Personal imo.

5202650 yeah. 15. It's my #2 all time favorite story.

Oh....oh dear.....the tears. They won't stop. :raritydespair:

5532538 good... Give your tears as an offering to me, that I might use them to return to my full power. Only then shall you truly know sadness.

5533298 If what i feel now after reading this story is not true sadness, then I am scared for my heart in the future.

It's almost certainly not what you intended, and it does cause a bit of "mood whiplash"...

...but after glancing at the title again after reading the fic, I can't help but have the "Beetlejuice" movie theme stuck in my head. It begins with the same phrase, and is ghost-story appropriate. :pinkiehappy:

5784306 I don't even know what that is. So I'm going to assume that it was not need unintentional.

5784662
"Beetlejuice" is a 1980s comedy/horror with ghosts as the main characters. It's noteworthy for being one of Tim Burton's early films (with his usual creepy surreal style), and also for being one of the things Michael Keaton acted in before becoming Batman for the 1980s/1990s films.

It is also hilarious; definitely worth watching. :pinkiehappy:

What brought it to mind here, aside from the "ghosts" motif, is its title theme. Before launching into the main theme, it starts out with a creepy remix of "Daylight Come and Me Wanna Go Home".

5786051 not what I was going for, but hey, if it reminds you of something you enjoyed, chances are you enjoyed it. So hey, I'll tke it.

The feels...too strong...cant contain...much longer

*loses it* :raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

No joke, i really cried at this. very well done.

Now if you'll excuse me, there is a corner that is to be stained by my tears while im curled up in tne fetal position. :raritycry:

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