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Discord cracked his neck from side to side, still grinning and his horn blazing. This was going to be fun. The princesses looked nervously at eachother. Luna spread her wings as Discord had suspected. He knew the strengths and weaknesses of the Princesses. He was thinking of a strategy that would work against both of them.
Luna was a fast flier, she was agile and quick to react. Her weak points were blunt force and powerful magical blasts. He would have to go for Celestia first, as the fight against Luna would take much more of his energy. Discord shifted his focus to Celestia.
Celestia wasn’t that fast in the air or very agile but she made that up by having strong magic and high resistance towards blunt force and blasts. The way to deal with her is to be as quick on his hooves as he could. He grinned even wider as he felt his periculum reach its breaking point. It wasn’t as strong as it was in his draconequus form, but it was more than enough.
With a powerful thrust of his wings, Discord flew towards Celestia, who had squared her shoulders and taken a defensive stance with her horn pointed towards him. Luna had taken to the air, where she was strongest. Luna wasn’t very good with hoof-to-hoof combat.
When Discord was close to her, Celestia reacted by fusing her magic to form a shield around her. Discord was still grinning from ear to ear. Just before he would crash into the shield, he released a shockwave of magic against it, shattering the shield and making Celestia skid a few feet on her hooves. Discord flew up into the air and did a loop while whooping. Celestia aimed towards him and shot five beams of energy towards him. He dodged them with ease, laughing at her.
Luna dived towards Discord, horn ablaze. Discord dropped just below her and punched his right hoof into her gut, making her twist out of control towards the ground. Celestia caught her with her magic and gently placed her on the ground. She turned towards Discord again only to see him flying towards her in breakneck speed. Celestia could barely avoid being run over by him.
Discord landed, still moving fast. He digged his hooves down into the ground, braking his momentum. A cloud of dust was kicked up as he skidded away. Celestia turned to her sister, who had just gotten back up on her hooves. Luna was gritting her teeth and her eyes were brimming with tears from the pain in her gut and heart. Celestia scowled and turned towards the cloud. Discord hadn’t gotten out from it yet, and it hadn’t dissappeared with the wind.
The cloud of dust started moving against the sisters. They couldn’t even see their own hooves in front of their faces. Celestia decided to rely on her senses. She closed her eyes who were beginning to burn from the dust. She felt an alien energy moving fast in a circle around them. Discord had created a weak mini tornado to contain the cloud and to blind them. He was just playing with them. She could feel that Discord had suddenly moved away from maintaining the tornado and had shot out to the west. He dissappeared from her range of sensing energies. Celestia could suddenly feel him coming back, faster than before. He was coming for them.
Luna had also sensed Discord. She spread her wings and shot out from the tornado as her sister summoned a wind to diminish the dust. Luna was heading straight for Discord. None of them budged as they were coming closer and closer towards eachother. Just before they would crash into eachother, Discord rolled so he was flying upside-down, just beneath Luna. He took a cheap-shot and kicked her in the face with one of his backhooves as he passed her. Luna was surprised by the sudden hit and once again was twirling towards the ground. This time, Celestia was too slow to catch her fall.
Celestia witnessed her sister make contact with the ground. Discord was going to pay. She was going to make sure he would. Discord landed with a thump a few feet away from Celestia, still grinning. Celestia wanted to wipe that smile right off his face with a swift hoof.
’’So...’’ Discord started, rubbing his chest with his left hoof and nonchalantly inspecting it. ’‘Ready to give up yet, Tia?’’ Celestia was only focused on the spirit mocking her, until the soft sobbing mixed with groaning from her sister reached her ears. Celestia growled and lowered her head towards him, like she was about to skewer him with it. She grinded her left hoof against the ground, much to Discord’s amusement.
’‘You will pay...’’ Celestia growled as her horn started glowing a brilliant white light, making the temperature around them rise drastically. It sounded like something was powering up to be released.
Celestia used Solar Beam!
A brilliant white and orange beam sliced through the air heading straight towards Discord. Discord jumped to his side desperately and rolled. His tail became singed and the tip of it just dissappeared from the heat. As soon as he was on all of his hooves again, he shot open his wings and gave a thrust with everything he could manage. He was soaring towards Celestia in breakneck speed again. It felt like everything around him was slowing down. Celestia didn’t have the time to react to his speed. She just closed her eyes and braced for impact.
Discord pulled back his left hoof and swung it forward as hard as he could towards Celestia’s head. His hoof made contact with Celestia’s jaw and made a satisfactory crunching sound just when it hit, drawing blood.
Celestia fell like a rock. Luna lifted her head just to see her sister fall to her side, unconcious. Luna gasped for breath as Discord landed a bit away from her sister. Blood was spotched on his left hoof. Luna shook her head in disbelief. This couldn’t be happening. She braced herself to stand. Discord noticed her standing up. He just scanned her features, up and down. Discord got a devilish grin and lifted his left hoof that had her sister’s blood. He brought it to his face, smirked and gently licked some blood off his hoof and smacked his lips.
’‘Tell Celestia to eat less treats when she wakes up, it makes her blood taste a little too sweet.’’ Discord said nonchalantly in a conversational manner to Luna, who’s jaw was hanging open from the display. ’‘Now now, Lu. Don’t be rude. How have you been?’’ Discord walked around the fallen solar princess with a disgusted expression.
’‘Lonely.’’ Luna answered flatly.
’’Me too, my dear, me too...’’ Discord stopped a few feet away from Luna.
’’I... I’m...’’ Luna bit her lip, wincing slightly from the pain in her gut and face. ’‘I’m sorry...’’
Discord was taken aback from the sudden apology. He lifted his hoof that wasn’t littered with blood and rubbed his neck. ’’Uh... What for, exactly?’’
’‘For leaving you like that all those years ago.’’ Luna sat down and lifted her left foreleg to her aching gut. ’‘And for this...’’ She choked out the last sentence and closed her eyes. Her horn started glowing. Discord didn’t have time to react before a bright, white flash blinded him and disorientated him. He staggered around for a while, bucking and thrashing until he could feel an all too familiar weight on his back. He started thrashing some more. He quickly got tired and slowed down. He could feel something cold on the front of his neck, which clicked as it closed around his neck.
His powers drained immediately, he couldn’t use his magic, his wings felt too heavy to be able to fly with. His strength vanished as well and he collapsed to the ground, fatigue overtaking him as he passed out.
Celestia had woken up and had motioned for Luna to stall Discord long enough so she could materialize the necklace that would drain his powers and weaken him. The necklace had worked and done its part.
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Discord woke up several minutes later with a start. He was lying on his side. He looked up to see Celestia and Luna towering him and looking down at him. Discord’s spirit died that exact moment. He thumped his head back to the ground. Something was around his neck.
He looked down to see a charcoal necklace made out of some material that he didn’t recognize. There was three fire rubies who were glowing intently in a strange pattern in the middle of it.
’‘Get up.’’ Celestia ordered, still looking down at him.
Discord knew that he didn’t have any other choices, so he braced one of his forelegs beneath himself and pushed. Progress was slow and all of his legs were shaking violently. Just before he was about to fall, Princess Luna stood besides him and helped him stand. He grumbled his thanks and looked down at the ground, defeated.
’’I guess you’re going to turn me back to stone again...’’ Discord sighed.
’’No.’’ Celestia gracefully shook her head. The wound on her lip was still bleeding a little.
’‘What.’’ Discord didn’t believe them.
’’We decided to try with a different approach this time.’’ Luna motioned to the necklace around his neck.
’’As my sister said. We’re going to try and socialize you for an attempt to see if you can change or not.’’ Celestia used her magic to heal the wound on her face.
’‘Great. I’m a social experiment now.’’ Discord groaned as he sat down on his flank and rubbed his eyes with both of his hooves.
’‘Exactly.’’ Luna walked a lap around Discord to get a better look of his pony form and his cutiemark, who sparked her interest.
Discord just groaned and laid down again, covering his head with his hooves.
’‘You’re going to start by apologizing to the Elements of Harmony for what you did to them the last time you escaped.’’ Celestia giggled at the thought of Discord apologizing.
’‘Are you serious..?’’ Discord thought that the thought of apologizing to them would be humiliating.
’‘Yes.’’ Celestia nodded firmly once. Luna just giggled as Discord’s jaw dropped.
’’...Fuck’’
lol
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Couldn't he just, you know, take the necklace off?
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Celestia's magic locked it to him. Only Celestia can open it. He doesn't have any magic to pick it with.
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Well then you might want to have him fruitlessly attempt to take it off; make it clear that he can't. Just a suggestion though.
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Did you think that Discord is going to apologize on his own free will?
I REALLY FUCKING HATE CELESTIA really she is such a bitch, if i were discord i would just do something so drastic that they would have to lock me away rather then ba slave to her.
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I figured he would be forced to do it at (whats the equivalent of gunpoint?, horn point?) horn point, and would try ripping the necklace off the first chance he got.
Hahahaha, and Discord was doing so well. It is fun to see him kick ass when so many other people write Celestia as a Mary Sue in a way. Symphony, please don't keep us waiting to long for the next chapter.
A quick note to go with that, I want to say I like how you are dealing with each chapter. They have the right pacing to them and progress the plot nicely. More so, they may be short but I like having a new chapter once or twice a week. Keep it up!
Celestia used Solar Beam!
Celestia why are you using grass attacks against a flying type?
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I keep the updates on a schedule that I try my best to follow.
discord ...........fuck
Luna .........dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png
Nice chapter, the battle scene was good, fun to see they all kick some ass. I thought for a second there he was gone make it so the necklace thing was a surprise, but a pleasant one, i was expecting the story to start rapping up and end soon but now it seems it's just beginning, so awesome
and Discord now striped of all magic, (no flying no fancy unicorn magic nothing) and under threat of petrifaction forced in to rehabilitation..
Poor Discord, Celestia is relay gone try to humiliate him whit this isent she
The dark lords would be pleased...............
543919 No fuck you asshroe. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=inTRblYTevk&feature=related
I like the way you're doing this. It's just that you might want to get an editor or at least so proofreaders. The reason for this is that you have a lot of weird grammar errors. An example of this is when you use the word "who" when you're talking about inanimate objects. I'll find an example quick:
"He could feel something cold on the front of his neck, who clicked as it closed around his neck."
This sentence doesn't make a lot of sense. You're talking about a necklace being locked around his neck, not a person/pony.
"He could feel something cold on the front of his neck, which clicked as it closed around his neck." <- That makes more sense.
I don't usually do that, but the grammar nazi in me was acting up. Speaking of the word "was", another thing you can work on is not using the word "were" in place of "was". Again, that is another thing that makes a lot of the sentences not make a ton of sense it just sounds weird when you say some of them out loud. You didn't have that problem much in this chapter, but it was something that was prevalent in many of the previous chapters.
Overall, I do like the story so far and can't wait to read more later when I get the chance.
544070 Well, he MIGHT qualify as a Dragon type, or possibly Psychic.
...Damnit. I'm overthinking things again.
The characters are emotionally unstable. They shift wildly from one end of the spectrum to the other in extremely short periods of time. It is more than a little disorienting.
I'm really loving this story! A perfect mix of comedy, romance and (if you count this chapter) action.
Basically what i'm trying to say is...
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Celestia used Solar Beam!
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Well...... I had to do this:
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I like the way this chapter ended.
642025 Discord was a Dragon type but now he is in Pony Forme and is a Flying/Psychic type.
Apparently eyeballs are sentient beings now. Also, it seems very unlikely that Discord, who just barely escaped from an energy-sapping spell, not to mention being forced into an entirely new body, could nearly best both Celestia and Luna in combat.
Commas are your FRIENDS! Apart from that and a few quirks, you've got it down!
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Look who else knows Pokemon.
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IT'S SUPER EFFECTIVE ... too bad it missed.
So... Celestia is an unlikeable bitch, no one sees the problem with forcibly removing everything that is a part of Discord and making him apologise to the ponies who put him through the most painful experience of his life (and they're the only ones he affected or 'hurt' in any way, what he did could be seen as pre-meditated self defence) and no one is apologising to HIM for what they did. Because the only reason he did any of what he did was because of Celestia.
Yeah, I'm out. Started off fine enough, became a horrible clusterfuck of terrible characters.
CELESTIA DIDN'T EVEN CHARGE HER SOLAR BEAM.......HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX HAX
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She's under the effects of Sunny Day no charge time
Dear God, is there no justice?
Kill this -> bitch already!
1175212 It should be possible to have any amount of types, Discord would be a dragon/fire/flying/psychic/water/grass/(if it existed) chaos
2201188 hehe I swear people drop stories too easy. Everyone is a hypocrite . He is an evil chaotic being who wrought suffering on them. Do you really think they'd be thinking fairly or how he feels. As well as the fact that they have no Idea how being turned I stone feels. It's been a few years since I last read this and I can't accurately state it's quality as my judgement in fice back the was... Lacking. However I do remember I enjoyed it immensely. I ask for you to try and give I a second chance, about 10,000 words should be a light read and accurately acclaim to the stories quality. Personally I'd read until halfway to get a good taste since common really? You have to admit your complaint was pretty minor. The only reason I would personally drop a story so early is if it was really bad or annoying.
See, the 'correct' response for this, if he's that full of rage, hatred, and overall desire to see them suffer is to behave in whatever means is necessary for them to trust him, remove the necklace, and then just kill five of six of the Elements and petrify the last before shooting them off to some far corner of the world.
After all, he genocided his entire race and has ample evidence that nonlethal tactics don't 'work'. Why should he care if he has to 'break a few toys' exactly?