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I read fanfiction when I run out of things to do so here I am


Mowing your lawn is dangerous to the small animals the reside in the protection of grass and dirt. Fatalities are a given.

Fluttershy doesn't take this very well.

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I forgot to say, mad props to my proof reader and editor Famous Last Words. Check him out please:rainbowkiss: he's a very talented writer and I reccomend you read his story: Heart Invasion 101

I think I shattered three ribs and dislocated my spleen, I was laughing so hard, reading this! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

4717523 I shared the link too, to try to get more readers to take a look

Jeez, this is something out of a MadTV skit. Well done!
Also, this is me just being nitpicky:

The scream then confused the bats in the front because of its high-pitched frequency, and they thought their echolocation was revealing a wall so they hovered for a second

Fruit bats (real ones, anyways) don't use echolocation.

4717749 thanks I just assumed they all use echolocation

"I now see why you enjoyed your job so much, you sick bastard! Your services are no longer needed!"]

... :rainbowlaugh: Poor, poor Fluttershy... I can't believe what she went through, but that message at the end was just so hilarious! Other than that, I didn't see too many errors.

while he was out he found a mare at DJ PON-3 and Bad Baby Dragon concert.

Capitalization error here.

"... So all I have to do is put my snout into mowers patent pending Snout Holder, so I can keep my snout in easily and comfortably while I mow, than push and go huh? Oh what's this?"

Just a spacing error here.

Three months later...

Needs to be in bold letters, and maybe italics... but that's just me. :twilightblush:

All in all, I'd have to say you did an excellent job on you're first story (Or rather one-shot story). Although there were a few minor errors, two having to do with being too spaced apart while one was capitalization you did a superb job. But don't worry, everypony doesn't exactly start off on a high note. :twilightsmile:

4717778 thanks for the review from you and everyone else who's commented, glad to see people want to progress and improve

Well that was... Different.

Bunnies who drank the blood had died and floated down the river making the cutest yet most horrifying dam in the history of Equestria.



4718102 No problem. :pinkiehappy: I'm glad to help out. :twilightsmile:

4718423 You know what they sing. isn't it great to be different

4719117 lol.... I guess.

Is this your cover art:rainbowhuh:?

This story is wonderful :D

Despite it being bloody:pinkiecrazy: I found the ending quite funny:rainbowlaugh:.

Thanks :heart

4717384 I blame my own busted ribs on you, you linker-of-hilarious-shit, you! :rainbowlaugh:

4798073 Just doin my duty lol

Why does the fic not have a Comedy Tag?
This fic is Solid Gold Comedy!

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