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Hello everypony I am new to writing and I would most appreciate if you, as viewers/readers, to send me feed backs on what you like, can be improve, etc. So help me out by being the critics you are.

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The moon was something both alien and familiar to her. She brought forth the night sky for millennia and had even been trapped within her beloved moon for nearly as long as she had been guiding it's path through space and time, yet every time she gazed up at it, she couldn't help but feel a certain detachment from it.

However, upon a rather strange incident involving a pony in a blue box, her kitchen, and a worm, she finds herself visiting her moon in a way she had never been able to before. By walking upon its surface.

It would have been possibly the best thing to ever happen to her if she hadn't learned that her moon had been hijacked and the only way to get it back was by trusting said pony in a blue box.

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Damn. Looking over this, I realized how many grammar mistakes I made. WHY?! :raritydespair:

ALSO YAY. ITS FINALLY HERE. :pinkiehappy:

The title needs work. "Tis" is a contraction of "it is". Typically there is an apostrophe before it. So your title reads as, "It is be lunacy" which is spectacularly bad English.

Remove the "be" and add an apostrophe at the start.

As for the story itself, well 4705524 said it best.


4705653 Thanks for bring this to my attention.

4705524 All the edits are complete.

4705778
Bringing this to your attention, not just bring.

It's the job of a gerund, that being the form of a verb ending in "ing", that executes the action of the verb.

4707205 Thank you again for correcting my terrible grammar. And I am not saying this to be an :yay:ss, I really need people to catch these for me so I can improve in my writing. So again, thanks.

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