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A crossover between My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, and Roosterteeths RWBY. Human versions of the My little Pony cast with a RWBYverse version of Equestria, complete with monsters, and gun-blades.
Twilight Sparkle is set to attend the prestigious Starswirl Huntsman Academy in Ponyville, headed by Headmistress Celestia. Forced to work with her new teammates, together they must learn to work together, slaying Grimm, and defeating various threats to Equestria itself.
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4703952
He's not going to be a hunter, but he will have an important roll in the story. The CMC will also be making an appearance, but not until later.
Im glad you took my advice and added this.
this story should have more likes!
4705252
Considering the first chapter is getting much more attention here than it ever did on FanFiction.net, I consider this to be a wise decision.
4707318 i completely agree,
4708251 i had a feeling it would get more attention since this a site specifically meant for stories involving ponies and pony-inspired stuff.
Yes! Thank you for editing the chapter and improving the spacing.
I hope this goes as wel as it sojnds.
AJ seems........ mean
To me the line breaks make it easier to read. Besides it seems to be about the same as the line breaks with the story on fanfiction.
4710198
Yeah, and I think it works there, because it's less spread out, because the 'pages' are wider, here it seems too spread out by comparison, and it seemed a little more pleasant to my eyes at least. Course I'll wait to see what everyone else says.
...why do i want to see AJ pick on the equilivent to a Faunus and get put in her palce by
Johnthe Titan in her team the guy being nicknamed Dreadnought or Bezerker depending on who you ask...the second name ONLY coming into play when you try and do harm to his friends4715657
I have no idea.
Hmm…how will you implement the Mane Six in one team? Or two teams with two extras. Or will a team consist of six members and not four?
4717872
Six members to a team. Seemed the easiest way to do it to me.
So, is beacon in this story?
4730332
No, this takes place in Equestria, just a version of Equestria that has humans instead of ponies, and where they fight off Grimm with Gunblades.
4730547 ah. I just assumed cos of last chapter
4730623 there are also faunus
4730734 beg pardon?
4730751
I'm not sure what I did to imply that. I mentioned Celestia getting inspiration for her initiation ceremony from another professor from another academy, which was meant to be a reference to Ozpin, but not a literal one.
As for Faunus, I'll touch on it more, but the less Pony-Like a character is, the more likely that they will be a Faunus. (FYI, it's RWBYverse thing, half-animal people)
4730775 thats the one
Is it bad I can only see them in their Equestria girls forms?
4730820
Yes it is, and you should be ashamed.
Actually, I suppose as long as you can visualize something, then that's good. I look up human fan art for inspiration on google and deviant art for inspiration, maybe you can do that if it's that bad.
4730921 what are you talking about? I love equestria girls
4731496
Just making a joke, it's no big deal.
4733487 well, its just how I always see them
4733487 I dont understand why you made RD short. I mean you have hour reasons but I just dont understand
4734235
Based off of other fan works I've seen. They live in a world of Monster slayers, so I feel like there's just a large amount of unusually large people. Rainbow Dash comparatively is much more compact. Less weight, so flying is easier, and she makes a good contrast to people like Applejack who are freakishly tall.
4734565 so whats she and AJs size?
4735146
I imagine Applejack to be about two metres, which is like six and some feet, Rainbow dash is just above four feet. Keep in mind I'm terrible with measuring, so I just imagine Applejack to be about little less than head above most people, and a head and a half taller than Rainbow Dash.
4736391 ah. Sk AJ is abojt my height
Not a bad first chapter. You certainly have my attention. Only thing that irked me though was Appejacks overly repeated use of howdy, got a little excessive there.
Not to sound harsh here but there are something's that you should really look at.
First is your use of commas. In one sentence you used six or more. Commas are used to break up long sentences but not paragraphs.
This is what I was talking about.
Other than that the story is looking pretty promising. You have managed to combine the two worlds better than I could have. Keep writing and accepting feedback so that your skills get better and better with each chapter. I hope this helps!
Ah, nownyou have caught up you can continue with the story. I can't wait to see what comes next!
4739515
Thank you for the praise and constructive criticism.
I like how this mirrors the episide in the show, in a way that it is fresh and fits in the context of the ,story characters, and the world. And i like how the Main 6 didnt instantly become friends like in the show and that they will have to work out their relationships. Overall very good chapter
4760324
Good, I was worried it would seem too much like I'm copy/pasting the plot.
I say, this is improvement. You got a fav from me!
4763590
Thank you kindly.
I liked how Mr Cake helped Pinkie when she was down. I also liked the talk between Rainbowdash and Gilda at the end. However I felt that the pranking spree went for a.bit too long.
4900326
Good to know. Thank you.
4900643 no problem.
This is a awesome story also you could easily tell that your improving in your writing.
This is amazing it would be awesome if Twilight actually lost control of her powers in a serious way. I swear this story could go anywhere but so far so good.
4917437
Thank you for the kind words.
Yes i rhink it's good you split the chapters. I liked your characterization of Team Derpy and Shining Armor. However i felt that the fight scenes dragged on a bit too long.
4978296
Thank you. I like to think my characterization is good. As for the fight scenes, I'll try to shorten them a little, at least they're not too short.
Yay just wish there was more dialogue with twilights group but yet again they were fighting so Ya it was pretty good in all
4982252
What abilities he has will come into play later, but for now, he's essentially the Muggle of the group. Basically everyone he knows is a badass, so he's content to let them do all the fighting.
4982252 Since this is based off of RWBY and Magic is basically Aura, anything living has magic.