All that I touch seems to break in my hands, then it just bursts into flames.
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Apple Bloom has had a boring day. For disobeying AJ the filly has been sentenced to repainting the barn. However, the mundane task suddenly becomes vivacious when a gateway opens into a strange new world. But what lies on the other side?
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No way ... you actually wrote something that didn't end in death/tragedy?
What sorcery is this?!
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Okay, I have yet to read this but, given his other stories, I feel confident in saying that you are hallucinating. 'Tripping balls' in the vernacular.
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Clearly he's an imposter!
Hmm. The question this brings to mind is, why does Apple Bloom prefer to be alive? The dead versions of her family act exactly as the living ones do. Perhaps she is really interested in familiarity with her environment, and not the personalities of her "loved" ones.
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No idea.
I'd imagine that It'd be for reasons similar to why most people try to avoid dying for as long as they can.
I don't know about you, but in most circumstances I'd probably choose survival over getting ripped apart by zombies.
I do know a few people with torture fetishes who might be into that kind of kinky stuff though.
Jokes aside, it's possible that if they had successfully killed Applebloom then she wouldn't have come back as an undead zombie like everyone else.
For all we know, dying there would have resulted in her ending up dead-dead.
No re-animations.
Just a boring, inanimate, dead body lying in a nice red pool.
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4701260 Oh, did I say they were going to kill her? Hmmm ... I don't remember that.
But that may have been the implication.
4700404 It's my Good twin. Someday I'll make him pay for this.
4700610 DEAD-DEAD! AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAA!
But yeah, who knows. That was not the original ending either. The original was ... more traditional but I decided to try something a little different. I feel kind of dirty for doing so.
4706127 I've submitted a few times, never with positive results. However, this story isn't as dark as normal, is a teen rating and contains no real gore so I have just submitted it. We'll have to see what happens.
4709369 Maybe. I kind of liked the dead world. It just depends, I suppose, on if I could find a way to do it and make it make sense.
This was just...awesome! I can't describe it, it was possibly the best fanfic I've ever read. The story was just so original and interesting, I couldn't help but find it really cool! Surely there is a sequel of dead apple bloom making her own portal in hopes of seeing her friend once more. Surely? Or if dead apple bloom accidentally fell through the portal when she was helping live apple bloom escape? Also, Mustache for you, good sir, mustache for you!
I'll proudly say that this is now my most favorite fanfic of all time! Ratin' it 1000000000/10! /\ . /\ 
4727296 I'm glad you liked it. It's very different from what I normally write. The characters wouldn't usually survive or, if they did, there would be something horrible waiting for them. Let me tell you the original ending.
Apple Bloom escaped, was led back to the house by AJ and then woke up that night to dead Apple Bloom standing over her with some instrument that would end Apple Bloom's life. She would say something like "I know how to make it okay for you to stay with me! Just close your eyes and I'll make this quick." If you look at the story, you'll notice that the living Apple Bloom told the dead Apple Bloom exactly how she crossed the portal. That was on purpose. I also deliberately left out what dead AJ and the others were going to do to her. I implied that they would kill her, but I never actually said that.
But, I had a change of heart and thought that dead Apple Bloom, no matter how lonely, would understand that the living AB had a family and a life (existence) of her own and that traveling to her side and killing her was a very selfish act.
I'm glad I chose to make it the way it ended up. I like the deadworld and the characters inside. I may do something else with it but I don't know what at the moment. I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for reading.
I would like to find Scootaloo's ribs. Poor thing can do nothing without them.
This was a very enjoyable read. I'd like to see stories of other ponies going to this world of the dead.
Absolutely loved this one I mean oh my god this was great was so happy and fun yet fulla dread in my gut the whole time as soon as Granny Smith came into it I knew she would be the one to point out Apple Bloom liveliness XD
AMAZING READ! very curious about more involving that dead world and such, like have living ponies come before when they are killed are they instantly returned as undead? who knows
amazing story!
cover pic gave the impression of Blanks as did the mentioning of Everfree and its dangers XD Glad that wasnt the case what a unique adventure!
4749281 Yeah, I'm not an artist whatsoever and I don't know any so I make due with limited pictures or cutting pictures and splicing them together. This one is spliced and MS Painted to attempt to look decent. That's why it looks like one of the blanks, because part of it was one.
I don't know about the Deadworld exactly. It's less of where they go after they die and is more of an alternate plane or reality. I'm thinking the barn, oddly enough, is sort of like a pin that anchors the realities together that Apple Bloom found on accident. If more stories come form this, that's probably the route I will go. I'm glad you liked it.
4749956 Oh! well you did a great job on it then!
and wow 0_o thats a neat idea for the barn and all
I was skeptical at first, because it started a little slow, but holy shit! You know how to build tension! And these last moments were so intense (I rarely get that invested in stories). Great, great short story. The one thing that bothers me is the fact that there's none explanation (I know that in horror it's all about the mystery, but this seriously made no sense). Oh, and I've liked the ending. I was expecting a cliche, but you didn't do it, and that's good. Not every horror story has to end in *that* certain way (I hope that you know what I mean, when the end isn't the end).
Wow, so many ()!
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lol. Thanks. I'm glad you like these stories. I've been debating another one with this setting but I don't know if I want to do it yet. As for an explanation, I'm toying with the barn being the link that holds alternate planes together and thus being a kind of trans-dimensional anchor that can cause weird things to happen.
Dead Apple Bloom repeats herself a couple times
When they first meet. Then later after playing hide and seek,
After they visit the garden (inner monologue)
And later when they go inside to eat.
In both cases the idea had already been communicated by the story, I don't think they needed to be repeated.
Overall you do great with description and scene building, even though I didn't enjoy this story I think you have a great deal of talent. I'll go check out some of your other stories.
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Oh shit, that was good. I enjoy a nice little shake-up in your typical style. Helps flesh you out a bit.
5458454 Flesh is meant to be devoured, sir. Maybe more will feast of my metaphorical body.
5464958 I had this story waiting around in a tab since the summer and I finally buttoned down and took it like a man
I await another beautiful festival from you
Woe be unto him who opens one of the seven gateways to Hell, because through that gateway, evil will invade the world.
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While the story is my creation, the look of the dead world and the title are both from Fulci. Very glad you know of his films. I think the beyond is one of the best zombie films ever and yet most people don't know if it's existence.
Apple Bloom painting the doorway to the dead world was intentional.
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I'm a sucker for gratuitous violence and practical FX.
I gotta say, this story is one of few I've read on this site which managed to inject within me a harrowing and lingering sense of intangible dread. The peculiarity is that my mind wasn't wandering back to what happened in the story, but rather I just felt innermost disturbed.
I applaud you on that matter. Good work!
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Hey thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I have an idea for a sequel where the dead versions of Apple Bloom, Scoots, and Sweetie come to the living world. I can't write right now but hopefully soon.
Thanks again for reading.
Wait... was this a.... happy ending?!
I really enjoyed this one and am glad it didn't turn out the other slipped through the portal while they played Hide and Seek. I wonder why the world she made turned out so bad, though. Was it because her drawing skills were poor?
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Happy endings are kind of rare in my stories but they do happen every now and then.
So this story is loosely based off "The beyond" a Lucio Fulci zombie movie about the 7 doors to Hell. One of the doors was a painting by the insane artist. So...Apple Bloom started having fun and painted a door. What do you know, it opens a portal to another world where there are zombies. The difference was that the undead in the other world were necessarily evil... just dead. The living weren't supposed to be there and the only way to solve that would be kick them out or kill them so they would be dead too.
I started writing a sequel where the cutie mark crusaders from the dead world came through to the living world. It was going to be weird and cute but when the living found out about the undead, they would flip out. Never finished it though.
Glad you enjoyed this one. I really liked it too.