Alicorn Day

by DarkLunaMoon99

A Small Break

"Twilight!!!" Dash yelled, pushing the doors open with her hooves, while speeding inside the Castle, only to slam into all four of her friends, knocking them over. "Twilight!" Pinkie's an Alicorn too!!!" Dash yelled, catching her breath, while turning to the clearly happy Pinkie Pie.
"Oh no!"... Twilight said, grabbing a stack of paper and a quill, ready to find out why they were all Alicorns... "I need you all to go somewhere else for about an hour or so, so I can do some research, sorry girls, but I have to do this!" Twilight said, quickly locking herself in the living room.

Meanwhile, the five girls where heading to the bedroom, obviously trying to find out why as well.... "Okay so, Dash, Pinkie, Twilight, and Applejack are Alicorns.

"Rarity, Twilight doesn't count...." Rainbow said, rolling her eyes annoyingly. "Oh, goodness, your right... Haha..." Rarity said, slightly embarrassed.

"So, either Fluttershy or Rarity is going to become an Alicorn next. " Applejack said, point her hoof to the both of them.

"All we need to do you now, is wait, and see..." Pinkie said, bouncing up and down, before landing on her bed, putting a blanket across her back.
"Maybe... We should all... Go to my Cottage... Ummm.. So we can all get away from the trouble that has been going on lately..... Said a very quiet Fluttershy, but no-pony heard her, except for Rarity.

"Yes, Fluttershy, that is a great idea!" Rarity said loudly, before the five friends began walking down the path away from the Castle, towards Fluttershy's Cottage.

"Let's go and relax..." Rainbow said, as the five friends continues their way towards Fluttershy's cozy Cottage..

Comments

[Johndye]

Good idea, but really poorly executed
It feels like watching a movie and speeding forward all the "boring" parts

[Destiny choice2345]

THAT'S IT?

[Hidden Scorpius XI]

4985127
Going by your word, and the amazingly short word-count, I have to agree with you. This story, on the other hand...

[DarkLunaMoon99]

Sorry, this story is pretty terrible, I tried.....

[DarkLunaMoon99]

But I'd be happy to get advice from anyone who has any ideas on how to make this story better...

[BewhoUr]

4996723
Nonsense! I think its good and you should continue.
Maybe longer chapters with more detail. That seems to be a good point to fix. Also, alicorns

[DarkLunaMoon99]

Thank you!! And yes, you might just be right, but the thing is... I'm not all that good at writing longer chapters.... But I will certainly give it a shot!

[sakuralovelight]

I started to read your story today and I really like it hope to read more soon