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It's been a rough five months working for Suri Polomare. At first Coco thought she was just a bit demanding, but once Fashion Week came around her boss reveals how nasty she really is. When she hears about Suri's awful scheme to steal the trophy from Rarity, Coco snaps.
She snaps hard.
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It's...just...
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Ok, this story was awesome. I found no errors, you even indented! I know you're reading this and are like
but new stories usually have a ton of errors ok plot and the write thinks he/she knows everything. I don't have anything bad to say,I would say if you needed help PM me but it look like you have it down. Thus deserves a like and I hope people like this story.
Till the next one
-R
Relevant:
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GO, COCO!
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>obligatory
In her hurry, she knocked over a gray pegasus who had just finished crossing the street. Turning around, she meekly whispered an apology to him. He didn’t seem to care.
“Watch where you’re going, you stupid bit-”
Unfortunately, however, she had been naïve enough five months ago to believe that everypony in Manehattan was generous and willing to help their fellow pony.
That's about as far as I read. Your grasp on the English language is commendable, but not quite perfect.
EDIT: Oh yeah, and thumbs up for doing so well.
Relevant.
4719934
Are you talking to me or the author?
This is just great
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Is this complete or not?
Also..
Liara T'soni vs Javik Mass Effect 3 reference?
This story is still on the top of the new stories list. It's already got over 35 likes and it deserves all the popularity it's got for a brilliant short story! Werid Al's new album must be very isparational!
4720126
Yes, it's complete. Sorry for not changing the status earlier. As for the reference... that wasn't what I was going for, but sure why not?
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You stated you found no errors; I posted a couple obligatory errors that I observed in reference to your comment. As I did not thumbs up your status, you can rightfully assume my edit wasn't directed towards you. The praise on the grasp of the English language was directed towards the author, though I've no reason to believe your English isn't poor, either, seeing as you appeared to be looking for grammatical errors. So, I guess that praise could be directed toward the both of you.
4720183 Oh... Coincidence then. I see.
4720187
Well my mind auto corrects,anyways I read a story for the story not the gramatical errors. If I see any errors then I'll put them in a comment. The reason I was giving so much praise is that stories I had read before that were new had those things and I saw this story didn't have them.
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Unless it's detrimental to my experience with the story, I tend not to point out mistakes (unless, of course, I'm editing the story). As I said, my comment was obligatory. 
I also don't read a story for the grammar.
Hoorah for Coco!
Looking past the language this is an awesome story!
Keep up the good work 
yay coco!!
Really fun little story, showing the background events of a pretty good episode!
Suri totally deserved it! I wish that the coffee had been scalding hot, though. That would have made it so much more sweeter!
[youtube=www.youtube.com/watch?v=qWPwfQcPS5s]
Hmmm....
*Looks at own story*
Well, you took this in an enjoyable route.
YOU GO PRETTY HORSE LADY!
This Coco chick did a good thing.
Inner voices! What did I tell you about speaking!
I want a picture of her face.
Well she's dead in the fashion world now.
4722506
Oh wow, I didn't know there was already a story like this. Whoops
I swear I wasn't trying to copy you or anything. In fact, I just read it for the first time and I gotta say it was great.
Daaaaamn... Suri got served.
GO COCO!
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'S all good. Not like I own the concept anyway.
I only saw one grammatical error but it hardly took away from my enjoyment. I really liked this story
and it makes me wonder: Does Buck Brawny know about this story? In his video for Rarity takes Manehattan, he said he had a huge craving for karmic justice after what Suri did. I'd like to recommend this to him if that's OK? 
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Go right ahead. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Karma is a bitch! DAMN, Coco has some spunk!
*To
Other than that, fantastic. I don't have too much to say beyond that. This was a fantastically-written, well-paced one-shot. You portrayed Coco and Suri splendidly. The only thing that could keep this from being canon to me is the cursing. If you'd managed to find a way to squeeze that out, I would have given it all of my approval to become a deleted scene.
I truly hope we see more of Suri and Coco in the future. They really brought out more of Rarity that I want to see in the future.
Again, fantastic job.
4722357 - I don't think Coco would have thrown it in Suri's face if it was scalding hot. As nasty as she is, even Suri doesn't deserve to have her face burned off.
It was okay. Not exactly the enormous snap that was advertised, but a snap nonetheless. Three stars.
(I love you Coco!)4724071 YO! I didn't know that this was a restaurant, 'cuz that bitch got SERVED!
EPIC
To be honest? It would've been a bit stronger without the swearing.
But still, I've always wanted to see Suri get her comeuppance.
Coco Pommel is best Coco.
yeah, i dunno
4725175 yeah, but this makes it more human
4724825 Yeah plus suri needed to.....
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cool off.
4725469
Can this please be canon?
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaase??
I am reminded of Vegeta's rant in DBZ: Abridged.
So uh, what happens to Suri now that the story has no further use for her?
YEAH! NOW SURI HAS TO FEEL THE
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