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lorettafox


Twilight is best Mane pony and Vinyl is best BG pony. Discord is best draconqquus and I update on my own time.

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*Contains Discolight*

Twilight is living an a mental hospital after supposedly she sees Discord, but no pony else can see him. She lives her days out in the hospital reading books and being tormented daily by Discord. Day after day she is bothered by him, and no matter how much she screams and yells at him, he never stops.

The only place of true solace is in her dreams, where her meds have stop him from entering. But when one night he appears and says he is actually alive but weak, Twilight is unsure to believe if its the insanity speaking or is actually him trying to reach her.

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Comments ( 35 )

This is a good start. I'm gonna keep an eye on this one. It seems like it's gonna be a good one.

I'm really liking where this is going. :twilightsmile:

I wish I could give this story a second thumbs up. I'd give it four if I could.

*Contains Discolight*

>mfw i dont know if that means twilight and discord shipping or a disco dancefloor illumination

4682957 Your picture... by Eagle do you mean an Eagle Scout?

4682977 I assure you, its the name of the pairing of Twilight x Discord. :rainbowlaugh:

4685994 I like the idea of dreams too much, as you can tell. :rainbowlaugh:

And I'm afraid so. I'll return to it one day. Someday, I hope. :pinkiesad2:

Wow. Just wow. You really know how to keep somepony on the edge of their seats. :derpyderp1: I'm really loving this story a lot. :heart:

I'm really intrigued by this now, and I have to laugh at the buckets. I really hope he tips something sticky on her soon. :rainbowlaugh:

4684140 Once an Eagle Scout, always an Eagle Scout

Great chapter! I enjoyed it. Very interesting.

I´m pretty interested by this premise! I just love psychological terror. I´m give it a look as soon as I can!

What I´ve read so far is quite interesting. The idea of two Discords is really intriguing. But why do I have the feeling that the evil Discord is not a mere lucubration of Twilight´s mind? How can we know that there are two Discords? :rainbowhuh: This idea manages to keep the readers interested. However, the only thing I don´t really like is your writing style. Perhaps it is only me, but I find it to be a little rushed. If you want a piece of advise, try to let the scenes flow and develop. The dialogue is not really convincing neither. Just in some parts, don´t worry. Try to be more careful. But in general it is excellent, specially at the ending. That was extremely intense I must say. So, keep on working :twilightsmile:

Wait a second. What if the dreams are reality and reality are the dreams?:pinkiegasp:

Discord vs Discord. That is new!

4697078 Thanks for your constructive criticism. Sorry if it seems rushed, I honestly don't notice it. I'll try my best to slow it down. :heart: :twilightsheepish:

wooow sooooo AWESOME !!!!!!!!!!!! :raritystarry::heart:

:pinkiegasp: oh please continue :heart::heart::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

Really liked this story it's a good perspective and I read somebody say it was rushed although I believe it was necessary. I think pushed the fact that twilight is indeed crazy at the moment. Also when your in a hospital time does seem to go like at least it did for me however I wasn't in a mental hospital. Any way keep up the good work :)

This is brilliant. Have you given up on it?

oh wow. I love this I added to my favorites it just amazing. I could visualize it all ITs AMAzinG!!

Hope there is more soon love this :heart::heart::heart::twilightsmile:

When is there going to be more? This is amazing!

i like that she is already going insane and now Discord is alive hmmm i wonder what he would do

please tell me that this story will continue!!! It's so good~

Hey everyone I'm gonna try to finish this guys story off not taking his idea just finishing it with my own I will try to use a similar wording and phrase but it will continue, just because the author of the book is really talented and I loved this book!
It's gonna be called the same name but will have rewrite after it

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