Night Chase is an ordinary student at Canterlot High School. He has some good friends, does well in his classes, and even plays a sport. Yet something seems to be missing from his life. When a bit of an accident causes him to befriend the kindest person he's ever met, Night begins to feel something new within himself.
Set in the Equestria Girls universe shortly after the first movie.
Special thanks to Azure_Shadow, BRyeMC, and CogWing for their awesome EQG stories that directly inspired this. And for letting me use their OCs Swift Justice, Clyde, and Rivet, respectively. And another thanks to CogWing for the great cover art. You guys are fantastic.
Additional special thanks to BlueSun52 for just being generally awesome and for the encouragement I needed to keep this story going.
Look what Cog started...
Anyway! I can't wait to see how this plays out, and you're welcome for all of the help, even though I didn't help you that much!
This was a great first chapter to our fic my friend! I'm excited to see how this turns out.
(Also, just for future reference, hoodies are Swift's thing.
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This chapter was good
Keep it up!
Fav, and like.
Meh gusta.
Very good chapter! Detention always seems to be a place to bond with fellow students!
Also, as Reyn would say, Night seems to be a "jokah".
This was a very good chapter! Can't wait for more!
Good chapter. Night seems like a good guy, and he's comical. Thumbs up!
awesome, looking forward to more
stayclassy
awesome
stayclassy
You already know, RD.
Oh, my poor Sunny
6010778 Oh, she'll be fine. It'll just be a while.
Pretty good so far, can't wait to see more!
like, and favorite!
Awww. Minuette is in love. So it's gonna be one of those stories. The boy is sought after by two girls. When he picks one the other has her heart broken.
The cover chapter!
And don't worry, Minuette. Every boy in these stories was an idiot at some point in their story.
night is being an idioit for being so ignorant/oblivious to the fact that Minuette has feelings towards him and she wanted to talk about them. it make me wonder how/why I seem to be in the digital age and most of the male gender is in the f**king stone age when it come to dealing with women in some of the most basic of interactions
Is it bad I'm being more supportive of the MinuNight ship rather than NightShy?
Anyway, that was still a nice read. I would have expected Fluttershy to be a tad more shier, considering how they first met was from a tackle, but still, a good chapter all the same. Keep up the good work!
6306549 I totally understand what you mean, and I proably should have done a better job of wording it too, reading back on it. and that was also from personal experience as well
Hell as a curse word? What are you? An old lady in church? Just kidding. Nice chapter. Love the furthering of Night and Fluttershys relationship. Scene between Night and Angel was good too.
that chapter was great. just what the doctor ordered to pick me up after a shitty day at work. also if angel had pulled that on me this is how he would've ended up:
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and/or
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just sayin'...
I'd say that was a pretty eventful day at the animal shelter.
I wonder how eventful the next day will be.
this was a nice chapter
stayclassy
Oh boy, I agree with Moondancer here, I think this is going to be a total disaster....
But it would be fun to read. (Grabs popcorn)
You may proceed.
6420809 I second that opinion.
also:
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Okay ColgatexNightchase or FluttershyxNightchase? YOU JUST CHANGED MY POINT OF VIEW.
You know, Minuette, you seem to be a very nice girl, and you must really care a lot about Night despite the fact that he hasn't gotten it through his head at this point that you have the hots for him, but I just can't help but feel like clarifying a little something to you. Come closer...little closer...little closer...are you listening? Are you listening? OK, JUST FUCKING TELL HIM!
What is wrong with this bimbo?! She hasn't even bothered to just flat out tell Night just how much he means to her, and she thinks he's the idiot just because he couldn't take a hint?! So Night can't understand subtle little hints, so what?! That doesn't make him an idiot, that's just happens to be a little flaw of his; but her, she's just a complete twat!
Why? Because she literally has nearly every single opportunity just to let him know and she never bothers to take advantage of them. Hell, she was talking to him on the phone the last time and she could've just told him right there. But nope, she decides not to tell him and just simply blame him. So yeah, when you put it all together, I think we can all assume that she's the fucking idiot, not him!
She had her chance right there; all she had to do was tell him that she has the hots for him, and he can be all hers! And yet she decides that just simply blamming him and calling him an idiot is the better option?! All she's doing is wasting time! She's literally giving Night a whole lot more time to be around Fluttershy and eventually start falling for her! I mean, just what is Minuette's problem with being straight forward with the poor guy?! If she loves him so much, then why the Hell doesn't she just walk up to him and say, "I love you."? It's like she's purposely trying to make him fall for Fluttershy just so she can have an excuse to blame him some more.
6421444 Thank you for your honest critique. Profanity aside, I appreciate these comments because they expose flaws and have more positive potential that praise. That being said, I don't quite agree with the points you made, but I'll try to fairly address each point to the best of my ability.
I suspect that you may have misinterpreted Minuette's last interaction with Night. The reason she had wanted to meet up with him the previous night was actually to confess her feelings to him. It was even spelled out a few sentences later:
As for why she didn't tell him over the phone, the reason for that was supposed to be that she feels that something so important shouldn't be communicated in such an impersonal was as over the phone. Something like that needs to be confessed in person (you wouldn't propose to your girlfriend over a text message, right?).
As far as calling Night an idiot, I'm a bit surprised that bothered you so much, but I suppose it's understandable. It's not meant to be anything truly hurtful or damning. It's actually quite commonplace in both real life and romantic comedies. He's an "idiot" because he's so dense and oblivious, but she doesn't see him as a truly idiotic person. If she did, do you think she would have any respect for him?
Lastly, she has not had multiple opportunities to confess to him. The previous night was her first attempt, and I already explained why she wouldn't do it over the phone. Perhaps she could have met him on the way to school the following morning, but she was upset and wanted to avoid him (something that has happened before, as Night pointed out in the previous chapter). It's not logical, but people rarely think rationally when they're upset.
In the months leading up to the incident, she certainly had feelings for him, but she wasn't ready to confess them. This incident was her first big step, and he inadvertently shot her down.
So I hope this clears up any misunderstandings. Again, I truly do appreciate the comment. If there's miscommunication between the author and the reader, that indicates that I'm not doing my job well enough.
6421319 Who's Colgate?
6422108 They used to call Minny that. Dont know why, probably because her hair looks like toothpaste
6422433 I know. Hence Trollestia. The FimFiction tag still reads "Colgate" too.
6422440 speaking of Minnuete, i found some good equestria girls vectors of Minnuete
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Oooh, so the puppy's name is Brando? Well that isn't the first time someone had that name~
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KillerRobotQuote The chapter was good the characters were funny and situations understandable this story looks like it's going to be good keep it up at your own pace of course.
First Impressions First Impressions: I'm pleasantly surprised by the introduction of stakes and conflict. Dialogue is good and natural, although characterization is somewhat sparse, especially for the OCs. I'll come back to this and see how it goes. Great so far.
I can understand Minuette calling Night an idiot; an awful lot of girls do that affectionately to guys they like. But her friends calling him an idiot is just annoying, because they're doing it just because he hasn't noticed her broadcasting that she likes him. Honestly, you'd think that by the time they got to high school they'd at least know that guys don't take hints as well as girls. I'll use me and some of my friends as an example here: we're incredibly blunt with each other, and we don't hint at what we're trying to say unless we're trying to intentionally annoy one another. I like the character you've got going for Minuette, but I'm not too fond of her friends right now ... except possibly Moondancer, she seems pretty cool.
Loving the story, by the way. I know that may seem odd to say after that little tirade I went on above, but I am enjoying it quite a lot. You've got good character interaction, good comedy, a good growing relationship between Night and Fluttershy. Honestly, I think what I said above is probably the only complaint I have.
Can't wait for more!
Heh, It's nice going back to some of these older chapters and reading what my friends had. I still really enjoy Night's character, and I can't wait to see what comes of the next new chapter.
Yay new chapter and it was Great, Awesome job Killer.
Huh, so night plays Nintendo and references Star Wars. Nice.
Great chapter Killer and Rainbow is so evil using that againist Night.
Wow Night forced to ask a person out. Don't know whether to feel sorry for you or be sort of happy for ya.
Alchemy: Trust me you should feel sorry for him right now. But you can be happy for him latter.
Well shit is gonna go down in the next chapter...
... If Night does asks her out.
Now that's an understatement.
Night: Ah man, I thought this was gonna be at Burger Queen or Red Sparrow!
You know, as irritated as I was when Minuette wasting her time blaming Night instead of just telling him how she feels, I can still imagine how sad it'll be if she ever sees him and Fluttershy on a date. But I can almost imagine how freakin' hilarious it'll be when Minuette goes apeshit if she finds out that Rainbow Dash was the one who made Night go out with Fluttershy in the first place. I can already imagine Minuette trying to stab one of Dash's eyes with a dental drill.
On a sidenote, I'm starting to feel some of that same irritation that I've had towards Minuette to Night now. Does he even deserve to have a girlfriend? It was understable when he didn't get any of Minuette's hints; not everybody can take subtle hints, some people prefer a direct approach. But the fact that he was barely talking with Fluttershy throughout the whole meal kinda shows that he's not the kind of person who would appreciate someone's love. I mean this is the same girl who was willing to forgive him for accidently tackling her, sacrificed precious minutes of her time just to heal his injured knee, and even share a bonding moment with him and a puppy, and he only bothers to talk to her once?! Bottomline, if he were ever in a relationship with her or Minuette, he'd probably just take their love for granted.
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When's the next chapter man . I'm loving it so far.
7025143 I'm not sure, honestly. I'd like to publish another chapter by the end of the month, but with stuff going on right now, I can't always find time to write (coupled with writer's block, it's tough getting anything done). I'll try to get something out by the 31st.
Ok thanks for letting me know. Looking forward to it.
oh my gods a Percy Jackson reference.
Very nice new chapter! We haven't really seen many chapters in any of the PomE fics focus on a parent. This was a nice breath of fresh air.
Well, here's an interesting turn of events.