I always appreciate a Lunestia story that offers more than just some (good) clop, though I do hope that that dream sequence is not an indication of how any real intimacy is going to be between the two. I'll try not to step on any toes, but I hate the submissive-Celestia / Dominating-Luna thing that so many Lunestia fics feel the need to have. If you like that sort of thing, that's perfectly fine and alright, each to his own taste and interest. I can't stand it, however. I'm hoping for a more normal (well, as far as princest can be normal) relationship with more loving intimacy that doesn't rely on one inflicting pain on the other.

Curious to see where this goes.

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I make no promises for anything. Their relationship will develop or collapse as feels right in the moment.

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Dreams being what they are, yes she found herself drawn into it without realizing what was happening.

The lack of dialogue disturbs me, but the way you use the words suffices enough. Keep going you glorious poetic bastard!

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In the original draft, and during the writing process, there was more dialogue. As is evident, most of it got cut. For the first chapter, the lack of dialogue came from a lack of necessity in the beginning and the general nature of dreams as they exist in this story[1] at the end.

Much the same can be said for the second chapter as well. For most of the chapter, Celestia lacked a partner with which to engage in conversation, when one was finally presented, other things got in the way.

Rest assured, there will be more dialogue in chapter 4... chapter 3 I'm not so sure.

[1] Dreams operate in a special nook between sub-conscious thought and emotion. This leads many dreams to lack in both solidity (the constant shift and change that the dreamer never notices until waking) and a general lack of definition (blurred faces and images). What this means is that anything that is not important will be left in its raw emotional or conceptual state and never get translated into words.

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I believe the forsaken land has arisen once again, for this story is magnificent. Well rounded character expansion, lust given emotional weight and incest dealt with maturity and posse. I hope this continues.

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R'lyeh has arisen? Oh shit!
Ia! Ia! Ia! Cthulhu ftaghn!

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This an excellent piece, but I have a few words of advice for you.

The best way to distinguish thought from dialogue is by writing thoughts in italics. It makes the whole thing flow a bit better.

You may want to add some italics to certain words after ellipses to represent emphasis. Example:

Celestia groaned and rolled over, it was far too soon after… that to think of her sister in any capacity.

It may look better as:

Celestia groaned and rolled over, it was far too soon after… that to think of her sister in any capacity.

Just a little tidbit of mine. Either way, this is still a great story. Kepp up the good work, no matter where your endeavors take you. Also, I thought this fit with the content.
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“Tia?”

Called it