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“An artist's job is to captivate you for as long as we've asked for your attention. If we stumble into truth, we got lucky, and I don't get to decide what truth is.” -Tabitha Fortis, The West Wing

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Celestia raises the sun, and carries it across the sky. Luna does the same with the moon. It's a simple cycle, as old as the defeat of Discord.
It's not entirely accurate.
Though the Sister Princesses do rule the day and night, what of the hours between. Who rules the twilight hours of Dusk and Dawn?
Why, their namesakes, of course.
Where are Dusk and Dawn? Why aren't they know to the world? And why does Dusk refuse to speak of Celestia?

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Comments ( 5 )

HELMETS ON PANSIES!:flutterrage:

"then her mane finally fits."

Should be "name."

"that I', no little filly.

Should be "I'm," or where you making a heat of the moment "hick" insult?

Smirking up at her was a bay dragon,

NOT to be confused with a mountain dragon.:moustache:

Yup, fixed up the creaky porch."

Wait a sec! Major Mare actually did something?! Aside from ceremonial duties no less!:pinkiegasp: Sound the freaking alarm we have got a miracle.:scootangel: Nah, but I kid the old gal. :raritywink: Seriously this fanfic is shaping up rather nicely. Dusk and Dawn are great characters and they are very distinguished (which is actually a rarity with OCs in some fanfics). Dawn really has somehing of Luna in her (and yes I do mean her bombastic nature) and I really like how she stood up for herself. The chapter 0 had me a bit confused, since it was so fast I had to reread it a few times, but the rest of it moved along as smooth as a Russian ice dancer (seriously those guys can move). I like the semi romantic banter between Dusk and Twilight, but hearing about that library really makes me scratch the back of my head (considering what happened). I really want to know more about these two and what happened to them. They both seem like amazing OCs and they aren't OP'd like most princess OCs. Safe to say I'll be keeping a close eye on this one if you ever update it

. I doubt that Mayor Mare will be the only one to see how much we resemble ourselves."

Best line in the fic so far

7433856 I am rather proud of it, yes.

I like this story, but you need to proofread it,find someone who will.

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