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Lunatone


We can never foresee the true future, but what is certain is that our story and fate will end in a dystopia.

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When I met Twilight Sparkle, I knew that we would become good friends. Wait...more than just good friends. We would become sisters. And we did. We never parted ways. Ever. We got close to each other, and we thought nothing could change the bond we had.

But then she got ill, and didn't act like herself anymore. She wasn't the pony I knew before. She still mattered to me though. Then she got sent away from me. And although things may never be the same again, we still had our bond.


Editors: DemonBrightSpirit

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Comments ( 67 )

:pinkiesad2:

Painfully moving, my friend. Accept a like, favourite and follow.

4668919

I appreciate both your follow and favourite.

Thank you.

Mentally illness is a sad spot for me

Comment posted by SapphireSparks deleted Jul 10th, 2014

Great story, caught my soul.
I was a little awe about making an account, I don't wanna my way through this site to be just another failed project, but I needed to compliment you for this work, so: Thank you, never thought I would find a work so resonant with me.

(sorry about my English, my mother language is Portuguese...)

4669550

I'm glad it caught your soul. It grabbed mine as I wrote it. And I'm not going to lie, when i wrote this, I did cry. I couldn't help myself, you know?

So sad :applecry::fluttershysad::fluttercry::raritydespair: I just wish I knew what illness it was supposed to be!

I'm confused. I'm trying to look at the symptoms and figure out what disease it is. The only one that I can really think of is Aspergers, or autism. Please tell us. Beyond that, the story was well written, save for a few mistakes here and there. But we all make them, so why nitpick? Nevertheless, this made me think really hard about my family, and what I would do if one of them started acting like this. However, I didn't cry... Sorry. :applejackunsure:

4671423
I wanted to conceal the type of illness she had. I didn't want you, the readers, to know because I felt like it wouldn't leave much room for readers to actually think about it.

4670552

I'm glad you enjoyed it as much as I did writing it!

I did not like it but it was good take a like and a favourite and for me to now never read this again. It was sad too sad for my blood.

I don't know if you know this, but your story is in the popular box!

Good job, man!

Good story, I'm just going to lay down and cry now, your a great writer. keep up the work.

4672476

You flatter me :twilightblush:

I hope it didn't deplete your tissue supply.

Oh dude...that was...sad.(I know!Shocker right?) I have had read a fair share of dark and sad fics but...nothing quite like this.Good job!But..what sickness was twilight having?I'm very curious..

Twilight is best pony :)

Comment posted by asylum1388 deleted Jul 10th, 2014

4672581 nope. I just cried into a pillow in my room while rocking back and forth

4672604

I'm not gonna lie, I haven't written a dark and sad fic before, so this is my first one.

I've read lots of them though.

:fluttercry: this was really good. I don't normally enjoy sad/dark fics but this is how they should be done.

4673727

Thank you friend. It means a lot to me. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. :twilightsmile:

4672604 she was seeing things that weren't there so my best bet is scitsaphrania but it could be spilt personality disorder or both

4673738 It would seem that you're right as the symptoms do match up closely to what Twilight was having.Thank you are clearing this up.

>>Lexical Writer Again,I would like to thank you on writing such an enjoyable story.I do look forward to your future projects,Thank you :)

So.. Ummm..

Which one was crazy? To me, it read like Rainbow was having a psychotic break.

4674724

I'm doing an evil: answering a question with a question.


What do you think?

4674750

I was. It's possibly for people to interpret things differently and it seemed to me that there even odds of either of them being crazy. Given that it was set in the first person, we just have Rainbow's view of things to go by and she seemed a little... Obsessed.

4674763

Fairly put. But to answer your question, it was Twilight who was the one that had the illness. I originally wanted to have Rainbow Dash, at the end, become inflicted with the illness, but I very much preferred the ending I gave it.

4671820 Yeah, the only ones that I can think of that it might be is aspergers, autism, or alzheimers. But I'll drop it, because I understand where you're coming from, and I wish to respect that. Not gonna stop it from bothering me though.

4675160

Thank you friend. I just like people to think critically when it comes to reading stories that have deeper messages than presented. However, one out of the three illnesses that you thought of, one of them is the correct.

4675469 I don't know why, but I knew you would say that.

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Did you hear that? That was the sound of my heart breaking. This was an excellent job on your part, not only because it was beautiful, sad, and well written, but because I ship TwiDash so hard now…and I didn't before I clicked on this. You brilliant bastard:fluttercry: you're messing with my ships!

you sir are a good author but no matter what I read I wont cry I did not cry during friendship is tragic or most of the sad stories the others are to long for me to read but still awesome story

4675942

Did I inspire you to write more Twi and Dash shipping now? And thank you. I'm glad you like it. In fact, I'm glad people like this. Thank you everyone!

4676316

Thank you good sir. I try to make good stories. I hope to become an author one day, and writing these stories are a perfect way for me to enrich my writing skills.

Simply crediting the artist doesn't make everything okay, and deleting my comment doesn't make this go away.

Did you, or did you not get permission to use it?

4678348

Did you get permission to use the Hasbro copyrighted images for that info graphic on your user page? I can safely assume not. When an artist post a piece online for free, it can be assumed that it can be used or shared, so long as the artist has not expressly said not to, or the sharer is doing so for monetary gain without permission. Lay off, your sounding like an asshole for no reason.

4679422

Thank you for saying that. I really appreciate it. I don't typically like to get into arguments with other users on this site. Some people have some nerve for posting things like that.

Again, I appreciate you for, essentially, standing up for me.

4678348 Haha you can rhyme!
Alsoooooo, if the art was posted on any media site such as deviant art or ink bunny it is almost always available for non commercial use. Which means if you aren't aware, he can't use their image to make money. Unless stated otherwise, the picture is free to use if posted on said sites. As long as you credit them, which by the way he did.

4674775 Ah... so Twilight losses her mind... alright... I'll read it some time...

4681066

Yep, she does indeed. Make sure you have a box of tissues next to you. Just my recommendation.

4681077 Dually noted
(not meant as dually (two), but like duty... but I don't know how to spell it, I can say it, but not spell it... And I am probably not making any sense right now... If you say it out loud it sort of sounds like "dually noted")

4678094 just remember if you give up and quit NOW YOU HAVE FUCKED UP

4670552 It was mental deterioration. It is similar to filling a balloon. Her psyche was fed more and more information; more and more thoughts and knowledge...until finally, it started leaking. And all that she had learned was slowly drained from her. At the end of the story, she seemed to not know anything, so someone might think she's in a "child" state. This is not the case. Back to the balloon, the hole; the leak can not be fixed. She continues to deteriorate. Once the psyche is gone, her brain begins to decay in terms of activity. Once the brain died...so did Twilight. As a boardline mentally insane person, this story touched me. Thank you, dear author, for doing what very few can do. :twilightsmile:

4695367 ah thank you good sir! Now I see it!

This epilogue only made the story more beautiful than it was. I didn't even know that was possible.

The only thing that bothered me is how did twilight die was it depression Alzheimer's what?

Man. I have no words...
Congratulations.

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