Rainbow Dash, Power Pony alias "Zapp," lives to save the day and keep citizens free from tyranny. But when she unknowingly falls for one of her arch-enemies, can she salvage the situation? Or will her divided loyalties cost her everything?
Your right. the other ponies ARE unreasonable at the end. that's just flat out being jerks....I mean come on...why the hay, would they call in back up, for their friend WHO WANTS TO PROVE HERSELF as 'still got it' when the back up they call, NEARLY KILLS THEIR ARCH ENEMY....BEFORE SHE CAN EVEN DO ANYTHING...SHe being none other than Dash at this point...also I LOVE that hypnosis...Totally would be in character...
5986133 She wasn't going to kill her! ... if we can believe Daring Do.
5986058 Of the "The plot called for" variety. Yes, I know that's poor writing.
Yes: The Mane-iac/Tresemme puzzled together Firefly was Rainbow Dash before they went in the tub, and at the salon, she realized Rainbow Dash was Zapp. That's why she goes "Huh? Ah."
5986320 Fair enough.....Though I'm positive she'd kill my dear Maneiac...that being said. I'd LOVE to do an RP of this...except putting Myself in Dash's position...as being the One Maney ends up being in love with, and Possibly loves back just as much...along with the Hypno silliness.....cause that style of Hypnosis/mind control is nice...
5986133 Because the Power Ponies have a responsibility. Their friendship is important, but if Zapp can't handle herself, then it needs to be dealt with. If they let their friendship cloud their judgement, the city suffers.
5987600 Hmph! maybe. but that doesn't mean they call in a far more...brutal backup because they don't trust her instantly. Geez. They may have a responsibility but that doesn't mean they instantly pretty much toss her out.
I am formally requesting you both end this line of discussion. From the looks of it, it's going to devolve into a flamewar.
I have taken of Reddened Chaos's criticisms and plan to address it in upcoming chapters. I will make note of what 5987600 said and try to keep that in mind as well while I work on the details of said upcoming chapters.
I'm loving this story so far. I've seen Tresemme deceiving Dash coming from a mile away, but the revelation still turned out awesome. And now we're finally getting into the Hypnosis/MC-part too (great build-up to it btw). But why did the Mane-iac not realize earlier that Dash is Zapp? What made her realize it at the Salon? I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, please try to not let us wait for so long this time
She wasn't particularly thinking of it at the time. In the shower, she had already figured Dash was Firefly since Day 1, more or less. But she simply didn't think to compare their faces until at the salon, where she took a good look and realized she'd seen Zapp's mug before.
I am reminded of the episode of Kim Possible where Dr Drakken creates "Dr Drakken's Brain-Washing Shampoo and Cranial Rinse" (truth in labeling laws). Also, I know its a cliche comment but, I can not wait to see the next chapter.
This story is absolutely ridiculous. I can’t even tell if it’s good, but I love it so far. The narrator disapproving of the sex scene was a particularly fun touch.
It's for the story as in there's an explanation or as in the plot called for them being inexplicably unreasonable?
Also, I'm confused whether Maniac knows Rainbow Dash is a superhero.
Your right. the other ponies ARE unreasonable at the end. that's just flat out being jerks....I mean come on...why the hay, would they call in back up, for their friend WHO WANTS TO PROVE HERSELF as 'still got it' when the back up they call, NEARLY KILLS THEIR ARCH ENEMY....BEFORE SHE CAN EVEN DO ANYTHING...SHe being none other than Dash at this point...also I LOVE that hypnosis...Totally would be in character...
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She wasn't going to kill her! ... if we can believe Daring Do.
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Of the "The plot called for" variety. Yes, I know that's poor writing.
Yes: The Mane-iac/Tresemme puzzled together Firefly was Rainbow Dash before they went in the tub, and at the salon, she realized Rainbow Dash was Zapp. That's why she goes "Huh? Ah."
5986320 Fair enough.....Though I'm positive she'd kill my dear Maneiac...that being said. I'd LOVE to do an RP of this...except putting Myself in Dash's position...as being the One Maney ends up being in love with, and Possibly loves back just as much...along with the Hypno silliness.....cause that style of Hypnosis/mind control is nice...
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Because the Power Ponies have a responsibility. Their friendship is important, but if Zapp can't handle herself, then it needs to be dealt with. If they let their friendship cloud their judgement, the city suffers.
5987600 Hmph! maybe. but that doesn't mean they call in a far more...brutal backup because they don't trust her instantly. Geez. They may have a responsibility but that doesn't mean they instantly pretty much toss her out.
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I am formally requesting you both end this line of discussion. From the looks of it, it's going to devolve into a flamewar.
I have taken of Reddened Chaos's criticisms and plan to address it in upcoming chapters. I will make note of what 5987600 said and try to keep that in mind as well while I work on the details of said upcoming chapters.
I can think of a few ways this is going to go down. However I'll just sit back and enjoy the show.
I'm loving this story so far. I've seen Tresemme deceiving Dash coming from a mile away, but the revelation still turned out awesome. And now we're finally getting into the Hypnosis/MC-part too (great build-up to it btw).
But why did the Mane-iac not realize earlier that Dash is Zapp? What made her realize it at the Salon?
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, please try to not let us wait for so long this time
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She wasn't particularly thinking of it at the time. In the shower, she had already figured Dash was Firefly since Day 1, more or less. But she simply didn't think to compare their faces until at the salon, where she took a good look and realized she'd seen Zapp's mug before.
I am reminded of the episode of Kim Possible where Dr Drakken creates "Dr Drakken's Brain-Washing Shampoo and Cranial Rinse" (truth in labeling laws).
Also, I know its a cliche comment but, I can not wait to see the next chapter.
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Oh yeah.
I was gonna bring up the resemblance in the Author's Notes for next chapter, as that is where I got the idea from.
Darkwing Duck ref FTW.
I mean, it's not like she has super-hearing that enables her to hear everything all the time, or a Zapp-Signal.
This story is absolutely ridiculous. I can’t even tell if it’s good, but I love it so far. The narrator disapproving of the sex scene was a particularly fun touch.