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The Royal Guard has intensified their training regimen after countless attacks on Canterlot. They’re tougher, better, faster, stronger – and, after months of hard training, they only accept the best of the best. The Night Guard, the elite soldiers trained to protect Princess Luna during the evening, are similar to the Royal Guard, only ten times tougher.

Undeterred by the challenges that await him, Pipsqueak (now a full grown stallion) signs up to join the most elite soldiers in all of Equestria... The Night Guard.

He isn’t doing it for the fame or glory. Pip is motivated by one goal and one goal only: to fulfill a promise he made as a foal. He will become the guardian of the night.

This story is technically a sequel to The Dream Stalker, but it is not necessary to read that story first in order to understand this one.

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Chapters (24)
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Comments ( 828 )

Noice mate, keep at this un'

Interesting. I'll watch this to see how it develops.

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Thanks - that means a lot. I know you take writing very seriously. :rainbowkiss:

Hey, this was a very good read. Can't wait for more!

OH MY GOODNESS THANK YOU!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! It's a really good start to what I am sure will be an incredible story. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Okay. Color me impressed. I think this story is going to be a good one. Just update often, I've had a few story that take forever to update and when an update comes in you wonder what was the plot to begin with.

Ohohohoho this is gonna be interesting

Is Luna going to meet him while in training? If she does I hope he doesn't embarrass himself in front of everyone

I like this give me more

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Don't worry - I update very often. You won't have to wait long for the next chapter. :rainbowkiss:

I look forward to seeing where this goes.

Interesting start to what I hope will be a very entertaining fic, color me intrigued!

You have piqued my interest with this story, and I'm intrigued to see how you will go with this. Interesting.

Yayy!! All my favorite stories are updating today. It's the perfect way to spend a day after being woken up by the bomb alarm.

I want to murder Phantom. Right now he seems a bit Racist to me. I can only hope it will be proven wrong in future chapters. Great job with having more ponies sign up for the night guard. I can't wait for the next chapter.

4666587 I completely agree with you about Phantom being racist though given that this is the Night Guard it may not be entirely unfounded, it doesn't excuse it of course, though unlike humans each pony breed has different racial strengths.

4667168 That's why they have different courses, but that only puts Scootaloo at a disadvantage due to her lack of earth Magic. That is going to hurt her in the long run. As I said. I hope I am proven wrong about Phantom, but from my initial impression, he sees like a racist.

I took it less as racism and more as extreme pride in the Night Guard and very high standards with a healthy dose of "all new recruits are worthless until proven otherwise". The two batponies have proven themselves to not be worthless, and the only other one who managed to get a decent time did so by basically ignoring the course entirely because she's a cripple. And now she wants to be treated as an equal in the most elite unit there is.

Basically, he's not looking down on them because they aren't bat ponies, but because they're a bunch of raw recruits, one of whom is incapable of one of the core aspects of what her job will be, two are bumbling idiots and the others haven't done anything to earn his respect other than not be utter failures.

Hm... Well, it might be unfair but on the battlefield, no one is playing fair.

That Screech pony is really creepy... but I like how you interpreted all their cutie marks.

Certainly following this, it's shaping up better and better with each chapter :twilightsmile:

“Oh, come on,” one of the bat ponies suddenly shrieked in exacerbation.

“Are you going to do the same thing as Snips?” Thunder Clash asked in exacerbation.

I think you mean "exasperation." "Exacerbation" would be "making things worse."

Thunder Clash gave a single hardy laugh.

Do you mean "hearty"?

That screech. I think Pip is going to lose, but it would be awesome if he won. I hope that Screech gets a beat down either way. Great chapter.

I like this a lot. It's been a while since I've read a good training story of this quality.

I fully expect Pip to lose this match, but to manage to hold his own reasonably well. Enough that Thunder Clash at least is impressed, even if he doesn't admit it. For the rest, I'm actually kinda curious about what Snips and Snails' actual talent is. Cause what I'm picturing is basically that all of the bat ponies' stuff back in the barracks just got wrecked.

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Thank you! I read my chapters before posting them but sometimes weird stuff like this slips through. :pinkiecrazy:

Thunder Clash shrugged. “I normally give the new recruits fifteen minutes before rushing in to save them. Besides,” he commented in a joking tone, “If worse comes to worst, the tall one can sustain himself on the fat of the other one.”
Phantom Shade was not amused.

But I was. :rainbowlaugh:

This would be so interesting to actually be apart of. :pinkiecrazy:

That said, I feel like Pip is going to get his ass handed to him.

And then somehow Snails will beat the snot out of his opponent.

Screech you bastard. I love it, please continue! :pinkiehappy:

Stayed up overnight just to read this..well worth it in my opinion, plus free fighting tips for those who don't know! Shadow's and Trickery to all~ :derpytongue2:

Oh... I don't know if he did a good thing there!
Also, Pip is an amazing fighter, he just doesn't know it yet. Thunder Clash can tell, though.

Mmm... Mist has my curiosity :moustache:

Comment posted by Car Cloth deleted Jul 11th, 2014

Nice chapter. I wasn't expecting Pip to win either match. I think though you did a great job with this chapter. I hope Pip makes a Bat pony friend soon. That would be helpful, but it is unlikely.

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If Mist is the one I think she is (I can't be bothered to go back and check, but is she the one with the 'heightened blood smelling' cutie mark?) then it may be a fact that she can smell it TOO well, to the point where actual BLOOD right in front of her is too overpowering as a smell.

You don't fuck with man dedicated to protect his loved ones! :flutterrage:

I'm really glad I found this story, and this was a nice chapter. Hope to see more soon. :yay:

4677678 If he will, it'll probably be Mist first.

4679521 I thought the same, but he reacted weird to the blood. Maybe she is hemophobic. That would be an interesting twist. What would you like to see in future chapters?

4679566 Not a problem. He'll patch that nose, and he's god to go.
As what I would want to see?
Some co-op with BP's. Some minor assignment and friendly night together in some pub.
Screech rekt by Pip.
Pip's reunification with Luna.
Maybe some romance in between. Rumble really looked like he had an eye for Scoots.

4679602 I agree with the Rumble ans Scootaloo part, but I think Scootaloo, may be joining the crystal or friendship guards soon. Also for Screech, I want him out of the guards. He played dirty on purpose. So who do you think the people by the well were, and why did Luna stop visiting Pip? I theory, is Night guards were talking about Thunder betraying the norm that only Bat ponies are allowed to join the Night guard. I think as well Luna stop visiting Pip, because she was developing feelings towards him.

4679618 Theory good as any, but I think that there's something bigger going on. Pips dream that he couldn't change left me thinking, that there might be some problem with Celestia. Maybe we'll see Corona Blaze taking villain seat.

4679657 Maybe, or Maybe Nightmare Moon is returning or maybe even somepony else is affecting his dreams. Who know? Only the author.

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I did go back and check, and she is not the one with that ability. Rust Wing can smell blood really well. Mist can hide.

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