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Scarheart


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The queen has fallen. Her kingdom has splintered. The failure at Canterlot, however, did not begin her downfall.

It was the son she bore. Called by changelings a Halfling, his blood mixed with the blood of ponies has him marked as an abominition in the eyes of the most conservative of changelings. Fearing change and what a mixed breed foal might mean, the Royal caste collaborated with members of the Religious caste to declare the queen and her child outcast from changeling society, effectively stripping her of her title and the authority with it. With her kingdom in a state of civil war, the fleeing former queen does the unexpected and sets her sights upon the Crystal Empire for refuge.

With a small group of loyal followers, she made her way to the north, into the Everwinter Storm where the Crystal Empire awaited. There, a changeling priestess offers refuge and Sanctuary on holy ground. There, the queen might be able to secure a refuge for her son. Perhaps his father would be keen to take him in while she set about the business of righting the wrongs against her.

Vengeance, but only after her son is seen to a safe and secure environment.

But why let him be raised by prey?

MLP:FiM is owned by Hasbro.
MLP:FiM was created by Lauren Faust.
All OC's are mine unless specified.

This story is not canon past season 3.
Chrysalis' name from the show will not be used as her real name, but as the code name given to her by the ponies for investigative purposes.

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To the mooooooooon!!!

~ Celestia

All commetns comments and suggestions are welcome.

My work is never done :P

~ Michael A.

4646721 I love that gif.

Well, you know somebody out there is going to have rustled Jimmies when they realize that.

4646666 i blame myself for not going over it this time...

4646850 MDC is your baby to edit, my friend. :twilightsmile:

4646853 they are all mine, mine you hear me!?!?! mwahahaha :pinkiecrazy:
no, while MDC is my main edit baby, it mustn't be the only one

right now just need to do other things (stupid exams, they stand in my way for more fimfic action) :scootangel: but the power is too strong, i must read

MOAR POWER SCOTTY

4646930 You're always welcome to add any thoughts to stories I link you from gdocs, my friend.

Damn fine start... really am hoping Chryssie Missie lives which probably will even with her injuries(Particularly that belly wound.) ANYWAY... You've hooked me for the duration :pinkiehappy:

4647202 I'll try not to disappoint.

4646726 My Jimmies have been rustled!

~ Michael A.

The failure at Canterlot, however, did not begin her downfall.

Missed a comma.

~ Michael A.

Featured 7/6/2014!

You guys are amazing!

Nice job! Don't let them haters keep you down, and other generic words of encouragement, and stuff.

Well, you've certainly grabbed my attention. I've seen the premise, but not quite as well done as this. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.

I'm not sure why there are so many downvotes. Rabid shipping fans? Whatever it is, it's undeserved.

Oooh...must read.

4649357 It's my first feature, so I think I'm allowed to be proud of the accomplishment.
4649397 I'm trying a different approach to the idea. I'm glad you've enjoyed it to this point!
4649459 :twilightblush:

4649484

I never said otherwise o.O Congrats!

4649490 I don't think of your comment as negative! Quite the opposite, actually! :pinkiehappy:

:raritycry:Such beautiful loyalty to his own offspring. I like when SA shown as more then background rag.

That is no doubt a premise most unique. I am looking forward to more.

I look forward to seeing how this turns out

God dammit...

Another one of these "Angst-y", melodramatic, claptrap fics that try to say "EER KRISSALISS WUZNT BAD" and try to make the readers sympathize with a flawed character.

4650908 Ah well, can't please all the readers. If I tried to do that, I'd be checking myself into a mental ward. It's impossible to do. I hope you find other stories more to your liking.:twilightsmile:

My god dude this is fucking awesome!

Okay, writers... THIS is the Shining Armor more of you should be writing in fanfiction.

Look, does he mess up a lot? Sure. Is he infallible? Of course not, don't be silly. But he's a kind stallion of good morals and integrity, as well as having a strong dedication to his family, even if they are here part-changeling. Tell me, other fanfic writers, why is writing him like this so hard? I can't tell you how sick I am of this jack-booted, petty and spiteful Nazi thuggish brute he is routinely demonized as, particularly when it comes to changeling stories.

And lemme say, High Priestess Zeala... I'm definitely looking forward to seeing more of her.

Already faved, thumbed up and followed!

Loving this so far! :heart: Next chapter i'm reading here in a moment. This story looks and reads amazing!

This story is bad-Awesome! I said Awesome, no one can say otherwise... :rainbowdetermined2:

No really this story is awesome, and I can hardly wait for the next chapter, I really want to see more of the High Prestess because she seams like a very cool character and I'd love to see more of her development...

:pinkiehappy:

Cool idea. I like it. By the way... Zeala? Why that name reminds me of something?

4654927 I thought of that, too. Is Zeala the inspiration from Zelda?

4654942 Actually, it was a play on the word zealot.

4654952 Oh. Well, keep on writing, my friend. Very fascinating story you have yourself here.

Comment posted by nioniosbbbb deleted Jul 7th, 2014

It seems rather silly and unnecessary not to use Chrysalis' name, doesn't it? Maybe it was only shown in the credits, but it's still canon. It would make sense that Shining and Cadence don't know her name though, and therefor couldn't say it, if that's what you were going for though.

4656967 it's not necessary at this point of the story. Maybe later.

Wait a second... how did Chrysalis desintegrate that changeling while having near to no power? Even with Shining Armor's love she couldn't do that :twilightoops:

4657173 The love for her child and that ability of doing seemingly impossible things when protecting the only thing in the world drove her to going beyond her exhaustion.

This is kinda interesting; I think I'm going to follow it. Don't look for me, though... you'll never know I'm there. :trixieshiftright:

I want more so badly... I felt terribly for Chrysalis. I'm looking forward to more chapters.

4653149 I totally read you comment in Pinkie Pie's voice. :pinkiehappy:

4658692 It does make it more amusing! :pinkiehappy:

4657173 Although, going back and looking over that part over again...she should feel something from exerting herself like that, shouldn't she? Good catch.:twilightblush:

Read it. Fav'd it. Looking forward to more of the story's progression.

I like how you added and handled an aspect of religion in this setting. Adding changelings into it seemed all the more interesting, IMO.

By the way, were you planning on giving this cover art?

4665887 It will have cover art, I just don't know when. :unsuresweetie:

Holy crap. . . .I open up this fic and I'm bombarded by quality. Nothing but quality in all directions.:raritystarry:
It warms my soul to see all this quality, its beautiful *sniff* :pinkiesad2:

4676395 I still had to fix some continuity issues...an author's work is never done...

Thank you for your kind words!

another great story from one of fimfictions best authors :yay:

I would love to see a group of changlings go after the foal later in the story and get mauled by cadence because there is nothing more frightening than a mother protecting her children.

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