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Lunalicorn


I like writing fan-fics alot!!! MLP is my favorite show, and my favorite ponies are rainbowdash, applejack, and Pinkiepie.

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Sticky Sweet and Ice Slice are practically identical mares. Sticky is a kind, generous citizen of Ponyville- and Ice Slice is a champion fighter. But because of a mix-up, the nicer mare is brought to Death Brawl.
Now, she must endure and keep her sanity while watching others fight to the death- to prepare for a death fight herself.

Special thanks to The Frank for loaning me his OC, Colonel Humperdinky.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 30 )

This story has a great start, but so far, the grammatical side of it has been a bit poor. I suggest you try and find an editor for yourself unless you're not gonna check it yourself.

4656577
LOLS! I do so much editing for other people, I forgot to edit my own. I better start now...

4656577
Uh... what do you mean, 'Grammatical Errors'? I just overlooked the whole thing, kind sir, and there is nothing grammatically wrong.

4661628
Please, show me an instance where I did so? I'd love it fix it.

4666377
Hey, guess what! That amount of space means that an amount of time has passed! For someone who can't even change their icon, you sure think you're smart...

Also, Discord is a draconeqques. Fate is half-dragon, half-pony, a dragoneqques.

4666377
I just read the FAQ. Check it out yourself! FAQ>Dialogue.
If I had been wrong, it would have ended up like this:

"I can watch the chariot myself!" the female dragoneqques hissed. "Y-yes, Milady! Of course you can!" Frost stammered, and bolted to catch up to Bandit, who had already left.

OR

"I can watch the chariot myself!" the female dragoneqques hissed.
"Y-yes, Milady! Of course you can!" Frost stammered, and bolted to catch up to Bandit, who had already left.

4667010
Can you get someone else's opinion on this? Different people's brains are differently hardwired. It's easier for me to focus like this, and you'll just have to pull through.
Also, if someone insults me, I can insult them. Free will.

4667648
1. Oh, I was thinking of something else at the moment, not you. Sorry...

2. Although you gave me ten examples, there are millions of users on this website. That means there are even more stories, so I'm sure I'm not the only one who writes this way.
...But, if you really want me too, I'll change the format.

4669583
I would've done it sooner.
Sorry I'm so stubborn. :facehoof:

4666833

How did a dragon and a pony have breed?

Holy fucking shit OP. You need to learn how to grammar, and fast!

4766509
I will spare young viewers of that explanation.

"With magic magicalness!"

4768667
Who the heck is OP?
And if that is me, explain "grammar".

Comment posted by The_Machinist deleted Jul 30th, 2014

4776003 Dee-mann-ding! Aren't you?

OP means original poster, which is you

4776110
OK, now tell me where I made grammar mistakes.

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