After Fluttershy and Applejack end up switching looks. Zecora will try to help make a potion to make Fluttershy and Applejack back to normal. Will the potion work and turn them back to normal?When they go to Nurse Redheart will she help? When they go Princess Celestia's and she tells them to use there elements will it work? or will they be stuck like that forever?
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Guys
I think I found the military's top secret weapon
They plan to melt our brains
La Barata! To whom are you referring? illiterate?
I'm a 9 yr old trying to to write up something.
I'll be honest, I actually found this pretty entertaining, in a "Half-Life: Full-life Consequences" kind of way.
So, yeah, screw it. Have an upvote on me.
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Remember: No matter how bad you are at writing, that's still better than not writing at all. Keep at it, never apologize for creating something you like, and don't let the bastards grind you down.
I don't care if it's different from the episode its my story! So what if I messed up a on grammar and other stuff I bet you 'v done it before. If you thought it was bad then why did the people approve it.
4636272 The reply button is in the top right corner of the comment and looks like >>.
I know that some people are disliking this because of the grammar, but honestly, I've seen and edited stories that were way worse. For a 9 year old this is pretty good. Chapters could be a little longer, but that's not a big issue. You get an upvote, and a favorite from me because this story had a good idea. The only problems were grammar, chapter length, and a couple of your ideas being disproved in the show, but they don't detract from the story for me. If you ever want any help with anything or just want to chat feel free to PM me. I'd also be willing to help edit any stories that you write in the future. Or this one, if you want me to.
I'm seriously beginning to question if this story is a hallucentation I suddenly started having.
It would make way more sense then it being real.
Ok, I'm just gonna say something.
Right of the bat, there's a kinda INCREDIBLY large problem regarding the entire premise. THEY DON'T NEED TO TREAT THIS LIKE A CRISIS LIKE THE DESCRIPTION DOES, THEY CAN DIE THEIR COATS, STYLE THEIR MANES BACK TO NORMAL, GET A TATTOO, AND CHANGE THEIR HAT. Think about it.
That's what I gathered from the description alone!
Pretty sure a few of my brain cells spontaneously combusted while I read this.
4635950 To answer your question as to why your story was approved, it probably has to do with the fact that it met the bare minimum of criteria for approval. It is not up to the site staff to decide whether or not a story is terrible or fantastic. That much is determined by the general response by the public at large.
I would also like to express my disappointment in your deletion of my advice. Beyond my declaration of this story being a hot mess—which, given the circumstances, was accurate; the story is in a state of disarray that could be counted as pitiful—I have done nothing but help you. Not only did I tell you of your failings, I showed you how to fix them. You were handed the key to improving your writings on a silver platter.
By deleting the helpful criticism left by myself and one other, you have shown that you are incapable of expressing the maturity necessary to succeed as an author on this website. I know that at nine, it may seem like blind praise is the only thing that is gratifying, but believe me: learning to accept the help of others and learning from them will help you in the long one.
4642709 Well there it is. Nine years old. Nobody ever accused children of being, well, effective or intelligent. Sure there are those geniuses you hear about every now and then, but they're the exception. Not the rule.
4642989 Maybe in a few years they'll be mature enough to handle it. They're banned now, though, so it's all academic.
4642999 True. Always ban kids, just to be safe. Not to mention preserve the vibe and buzz.