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PaulAsaran


Technical Writer from the U.S.A.'s Deep South. Writes horsewords, and reviews both independently and for Seattle's Angels. New reviews posted every Thursday! Writing Motto: "Go Big or Go Home!"

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This story is a sequel to The Challenge of Fleur


This story is a sequel to The Weed.


When Trixie's untimely arrival ruins a local charity auction, she finds herself and three other ponies swapping bodies. Now Trixie, Applejack, Golden Harvest and Fleur de Lis are stuck in the uncomfortable position of living one another's lives until they can find a solution. But what starts as a bad situation for all grows into something different for each of them. From crises of conscience to deeply romantic personal conflicts, all four will find their integrity challenged. The clock is ticking, and if they don't hurry they may find themselves stuck in one another's bodies forever.

For some, that might not be such a bad thing.


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Bulletproof Heart
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How to Save a Life


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Overall winner of the Transformations group's Body Swap Contest.

Special thanks go to Hopeless Appraisal and Danger Beans for editing.

Artwork commissioned from the talented CaptainPudgeMuffin.

The Fleur-Verse
Chronologically from Top to Bottom:
Shadow Pony
Reddux the Tyrant
No Heroes Part I - The Roster
No Heroes Part II - The Journey Home
Lightning's Bolt
The Weed
The Challenge of Fleur
Ordinary World
A Challenge for Fleur
Sweet to Eat: Tales of Nightmare Night

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 45 )

I was literally just checking Fimfiction before I went to bed, and this pops into my screen. . . you have good timing, I'll give you that.

the world needs more Applejack and Trixie friend interaction.
:ajsmug::heart::trixieshiftright:

I wasn't logged in at the time I found this story and didn't realize it was you who wrote it. Even if I hadn't, I would have continued to read this regardless.

Yes, body swapping stories are a dime-a-dozen, but that doesn't mean you can't put a fresh spin on it. I'm liking how this started and eager to continue.

Of the characters so far, I'd say Fleur is the most interesting. She's got a viscous edge to her that I don't see very often Intriguing!

Continuing on!

Lovely reactions! I enjoyed each one for different reasons.

It was funny seeing Carrot trying magic. That's always amusing to see characters try out new powers they never had before.

It took me a second to place FC, but then I remembered who I'm dealing with. I suppose the dubious bastard will be making his move soon.

Ew, it looks like Fleur is being put in her place. A little "tough love" from FC, perhaps?

Trixie earns her keep in being able to come up with ways to keep the act going. Crafty mare. :trixieshiftleft:

As for the last one... I'm going to admit, I find Applejack's crush disappointing. And Rarity's sudden interest in mares. It comes out of nowhere and feels contrived in order to set up drama. Of all the characters, Rarity is the one who shows the most interest in getting a relationship. With stallions.

That aside, I'm looking forward to how this day will play out. Moving on!

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Enjoying your praise, but I just had to note that you've clearly not read The Weed, for which this story also serves as a sequel. In that story Rarity's relationship with Golden begins (in fact that's all it's about), and you'll find that there's nothing sudden at all about it.

But I suppose that's my fault for not clarifying things from the get-go in the long description. I shall remedy that shortly.

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you'll get no argument from me. I was actually rather surprised at how easy it is to work with the two of them.

I liked all the different encounters each character had, particularly Applejack and Trixie's. It gives me warm and fuzzy feelings to see a little friendship crawl into their hearts.

Once again, Fine Crime tends to steal the show. Fleur's lucky this isn't the Trixie Vs Equestria universe...

Heh, cute interactions with Golden here. She's doing surprisingly well for being in a complete 180 to what she normally has to live through.

I go!

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I feel the Trixie/Applejack interaction is one of the better parts of this whole story, if only because they're a pair that don't interact much at all. I mean really, how many stories out there feature these two in the same scene together, much less talking?

I suppose Fine does have a tendency to steal the thunder from others. Wait 'till you see how he does so in Chapter 4. :trollestia:

Regarding Golden... there's a reason she can handle herself fairly well in these situations. It's a subtle nod that, when taken in context, can have some interesting implications.

A pretty satisfying conclusion to the whole debacle.

Had a feeling Fine Crime was going to let them go. He's a softie under all that gruff.

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That would be Fluttershy's bad influence on him. :yay:

Wow, Trixie really won the lottery in this one. It only took a ancient artifact of doom to pull it off.

A lovely story! My issues with pairings aside, I really enjoyed this. I got to see some sides of characters I normally don't see in fanfiction, which is a major reason I read stuff like this.

I look forward to any future works!

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Glad you enjoyed it! Hopefully next time I won't forget to mention super-pertinent story links in the description next time.

Twinkie? Twerky? :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

As always, another superbly-crafted piece of pony goodness from you; kudos sir! :pinkiehappy:

Was rather neat to see Trixie in her initial TvE circumstances make an appearance in the main NH family of stories! I really love your depiction of her. :heart: Although I am curious about the AU tag on this story? Pretty sure NH didn't venture into AU territory until book 4, and I dont recall any of the side stories being labeled as such. Just curious :trollestia:

Only noticed a handful (hoofful?) of typos, but I couldn't stop reading long enuff to make notes :twilightblush: I'm seriously considering going back to read it again right away (yes, it was THAT good) and if so I'll jot them down. But I still need to read Tyrant, so, yeah, I'm torn :derpytongue2:

Anyways, have yet another upvote and fave, and keep up the excellent work! :yay: :moustache:

Oh, and also:

"Regarding Golden... there's a reason she can handle herself fairly well in these situations. It's a subtle nod that, when taken in context, can have some interesting implications."

Further hints plz? Cuz I don't get it. :applecry:

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Why thank you for the praise! It's always good to see a familiar face in the comments. :twilightsmile:

Ah, you make an easy mistake. Although some of the No Heroes history is valid for these stories, this is actually part of a different AU, which I've come to call the Fleur Universe. The Fleur AU is very similar to the No Heroes AU, but at some point (I haven't decided upon) the two universes took different paths. Right now I'm thinking that would be between books II and III. The Fleur Universe is so-named because she will have a presence – usually an important one – in all the related stories. The only exception is The Weed, where her appearance was little more than an unnamed cameo, but that's because I didn't know at the time that The Weed would be part of the Fleur AU.

Regarding the AU tag, I felt it was obligatory due to me having shipped Rarity with Golden, which is definitely outside of canon.

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The point here is that Golden is much more than a mere farm pony. That's her reputation and it's how everyone sees her – Golden included – but she's smarter and more capable than anyone gives her credit for. Through her interactions with Rarity she has come to learn about etiquette and proper elite behavior, even if only on a subconscious level. This is one of the big things that differentiates her from Applejack, who is a farm pony through-and-through: if Golden moved to the big city, she would be able to adapt and, with a little encouragement and assistance, even thrive.

This is exactly what Rarity was talking about in her little confession: Golden might prefer the farmer's life, but she is capable of understanding and appreciating Rarity's lifestyle almost as well as Rarity does.

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Okay, I was not expecting Caballeron to show up. That stopped me in my tracks. Also, there's a hell of a lot more to Fleur than you ever let on in the last story

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When I realized I was going to go the 'ancient artifact' route as the cause of everything, Caballeron immediately came to mind. He struck me as the perfect sub-par villain to be chasing after the Ring, and it saved me from having to conjure up some OC for the purpose.

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More than even Caballeron's unexpected presence, what's really got me hooked is Fleur's situation. Why are her subordinates holding her if they know it's her? And will Carrot Top be able to survive a day as her? I also appreciate Trixie's canniness, the idea that she's a particularly strong age and Fleur can't control her magic, and the temptations lined up before Applejack. This is gonna be good.

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Likewise, Fine Crime didn't leave much an impression on me in Challenge, but here I find I'm liking him. Initially, I said I was going to be pissed if it turned out he'd set Fleur up, but the moment that was revealed, I instantly realized the misjudgment I'd made of both of them. Meanwhile, seeing everyone learning about themselves as well as each other -- Trixie bonding with the Apple Family? Adorable -- is keeping this a really engrossing read. :D

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I was all set to take back my praise for Fine Crime, then figured out his game about two seconds early. I suppose I could complain about him being so far ahead of everyone else, on the other counts at least. I mean, he just shows up out of nowhere and finishes everything, and Fleur seems so shocked by this, I had to wonder at his estimation of her as a top agent. It's all very confusing. Stop being confusing! D:

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You wouldn't know this thank to having not read my No Heroes series (the first two books are canon to the Fleur AU, of which this is a part), but Fine is a natural. While Fleur's continuously learning and having to work to come up with plans, Fine was already at a very high skill level by the time he earned his cutie mark. Plans form in his mind more-or-less naturally. Fleur is good at deception, but not scheming; Fine's got both in spades.

But again, without reading the source material, it's impossible to know that, so perhaps that's my bad for never clarifying in an AU or the description or... or something.

One of my current major projects actually shows how Fine and Fleur met, and I aim to show exactly why he took her on as his apprentice.

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Marvelous. Getting here was a bit of a trip, but The Weed was hardly a burden to read, and it's all been absolutely worth it. You wove together four very different stories into an engaging read, and used the body swap trope to good effect. Plus, there were lots of surprises! I'm impressed. :D

Also IF THERE ISN'T A TRIXIEJACK FIC SOMEWHERE DOWN THE ROAD, SO HELP ME ASARAN

(Though I have to admit this is also a great setup for hilarious tsundere Twixie. Not that I approve of such shenanigans, mind.)

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Yes, I noticed that was marked as a prequel to your newest story. If ever I have a chance, I'm going to have take time out and read your stuff, because I'm very intrigued by the world you've made.

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Glad you enjoyed it! Hopefully this redeems the... 'ick' that is The Challenge of Fleur.

Believe me, I am not unaware of the strong potential for a TrixieJack left in the wake of this story. I could of course turn it into a Twixie instead, and I fully acknowledge that I greatly approve of that particular pairing, but I'm much more likely to go with TrixieJack. It's far less common, which is what I look for. All I really need is a proper idea; I'm not going to write a sequel until something worth writing comes to me.

Although I should note that a TwixieJack triangle sounds like a ton of fun...

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Two worlds, actually. Although the No Heroes AU and Fleur AU share a lot, they diverge at some point. I know, it's confusing, but there were certain things going on right out the door with both The Weed and The Challenge of Fleur that directly and blatantly contradicted No Heroes, and I hate plot holes.

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DO IT

DO IT RIGHT NOW

WHY AREN'T YOU DOING IT

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Ohhh. That's even more confusing. :|

Wouldn't be bad if they weren't able to switch back for once. Fleur knows how to Trixie spells, Carrot can... migrate to Prance, Trixie can run a farm and Applejack something apples. :ajsleepy:

I liked this story, everyone learns a lesson or comes out better than they started out at. Trixie begins to fix her reputation and her standing in the world, Fluer learns she needs to have Empathy with others, Applejack learns more about her friend and her neighbors, and Golden Harvest learns that she is loved by Rarity even though she had her doubts. Yes, in all of that it was a very nice tale.

Why doesn't this have more views? This was really good.

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Hmm...
1) It features the (tragically) least popular of the Mane 6?

2) Rounded by two less-than-famous background ponies.

3) Trixie isn't enough on her own to catch readers attention with the others' presence holding it back.

4) It's about body swapping - already a common topic to the point of yawning - and isn't a comedy, which is expected in body swap stories.

5) It's too long for the 10-minute-attention-span crowd.

6) No clop.

Take your pick. Feel free to mix and match.

All sarcasm aside, I'm glad you enjoyed it! It's always nice when someone discovers this fic.

5339168 That's too bad. Looks like I've found a good amount of stuff to read. Well, on to the next one.

Really enjoyed this story.:pinkiehappy: I love how each character had some great conflicts going here. Fleur's attitude, Applejack's jealousy, Golden's insecurity, and Trixie's depression and need for respect.

Thank you for the story. :twilightsmile:

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Glad you enjoyed it. This is certainly one of my favorite shorts of my own creation. Well, by my definition of 'short.' Maybe 'average' would be a better term? Point is, I'm really happy with how this one turned out.

I'd totally read a side-fic about Trixie working on the farm and going to Twilight for an apprenticeship. I think it'd be interesting to see how Twilight taught Trixie, as it would no doubt have to be somewhat unconventional from standard learning. Unless you already have one, in which case I'm commenting here looking like an idiot.

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No, I don't have one. Yet. There's always the possibility, though, and I have to admit that the potential for some Trixijack or tsundere Twixie really appeals to me.

I've been reading so many of your stories (I'm currently reading Twilight's Inferno and will continue on with TvE once I've finished it) and I simply don't see myself slowing down, I love your writing that much. This story was just as good as the last. It really does deserve more attention than it has, perhaps you should submit it to ED over Of Angels, but it's a close second.

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I have indeed noticed your name popping up in most of my stories by now. Always good to know that my work is appreciated!

Unfortunately, Ordinary World can't be submitted to EqD until The Weed is accepted, and that means it's going to be Of Angels for the time being.

5521851 I also would like to see a continuation of Trixie on the farm from this. A Trijack shipping (or Lulajack?) woeld be interesting to see, though not a requirement. I did enjoy this piece though!

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What's this? People are still reading this story? Pardon me while I :pinkiegasp:!

But really, I dunno if I'll get to that sequel, but it is a very interesting and tantalizing thought. Maybe someday. Glad you enjoyed it!

Fine Crime For The Win!

Wonderful story. Fine Crime was pretty amusing in this, though what he did at the end with Fleur was pretty apparent. How long he planned it to turn out that way though I have to wonder.

I really liked Fleur trying to do a convoluted plan like her mentor without realizing how annoyed he would be at the lack of need for one. Does tell something about Fine Crime though, more on how people see him and his plans. His convictions about how messed up Fleur was treating Trixie's life was also a feel good moment to me. :pinkiehappy:

A very nice read and continuation on the prequel's. Happy I finally read this.

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*Reads the story. Enjoys it a lot, for how wholesome and wonderful it is in the end, and how things work out for all four of them in the end. Hopes to also see more of Trixie on the farm...and hopes the author doesn't get toooo surprised at folks still readin' their stories.* :pinkiehappy:

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Aaah, I miss this one. Thanks for reminding me it exists. :twilightsmile:

Then Granny Smith grinned. “Well good mornin’, Miss Licksie.”

She turned her smiling attention back on Trixie. “I meant, good morning Miss Twixie.”

“That’s all right, Twinkie,” Granny declared with head held high.

Granny Smith nodded her approval. “Welcome aboard, Twerky.”

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