Feather Flight was hiding from her. She was mean. Why was that? She killed most of his kind. So why is he so afraid of this yellow pony and why would the leading species be ponys. The main question is does he have no memory and a crystal on his neck?
Fluttershy heard whimpers from the front of her house and was surprised to see a white pegusus with a strange cutie mark. the main thing was that he was crying and was afraid of ... Her?
People, you guys can comment you know, to tell me what went wrong?
Why dislikes?
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The punctuation and paragraphing is probably the reason for the down votes. You can go to Proofreaders Group to find a proofreader to help you.
I don't know kow to get a prereader!
So sorry on how it is