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TheBobulator


I've heard that I write a pretty good story named Fallout: Equestria - Memories.


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My name is Frosty Winds. I was just your typical, rank-and-file Enclave scout. I had an ordinary life, living in contentment among my loving family and good friends. Things were good.

At least, I'm pretty sure that was the case; I honestly can't say for certain anymore. One moment, I was being recruited to take part in a routine Wasteland scouting mission, and the next moment I wake up as a prisoner of the Steel Rangers.

On the bright side, I’m not missing much. Just all of my memories. And my left foreleg. Nothing important, really. Pile on a disease I’m not vaccinated against and being a few clouds short of a weather system probably doesn’t make any of this much better.

As if that wasn't enough, apparently I made a deal before I lost my memories. If I don't complete my task I agreed to within a month, I'll die. Of course, it would be helpful if I could remember what the agreement was.

So here I am, floundering aimlessly about the Equestrian Wasteland. I have absolutely no idea what happened, what I should do, or how to uncover the secrets that lie within my stolen memories.

Help. I need an adult.


(Read the official Prologue here!)


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I'd like to thank Kkat for creating this amazing world of Fallout: Equestria!

Thanks to Toaster Repairpony for the awesome cover art!

Equally great thanks to my editors Unknownlight (all) and LeprechaunPoni (Chapter 29 and onward)
Previously edited by K4 (Chapters 1-21) and mikemeiers (Chapters 22-27)

Follow Frosty's out-of-universe adventures here!
But wait! Frosty's been spotted in other universes as well!
Somewhere in the Jerichoverse
Somewhere in King Sombra's Robotic Retaliation
Fallout: Equestria - Outlaw (In canon, too! Current rewrite isn't there yet.)
Fallout: Equestria - Frozen Skies (In canon, too!)

Chapters (34)
Comments ( 1110 )

so you finally finished editing the whole series and your re-releasing them. Good show!

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Not the whole series. Just 1-3. 4 should be coming soon after them.

I remember more story being here...

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This is the new, updated version of the story. No more of this "Oh, I wanna see how far I've come as a writer OLOLOL." No. I'm here to give you, the reader, the best possible experience that I can give you. That, and I seriously needed to fix things.

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Well damn, go on with your bad self.
Will read (Again)

Great to have this back and updating.

Well, here we go again. I'm very interested to see what might change.
Also, if you ever need it, I'm free to help edit and proof-read.

I almost feel like Frosty should try and yell at Souffle to see if she can make him deflate.
I haven't read this in a while, will the new corrected version be an overhaul on grammar, or plotline elements as well? I see a few things have changed such as the debate of her just opening the locker and show she was keeping it instead of Baked saying she can have whatevers inside if she does manage to open it.

Frosty's back and the story's updating once again! I noticed that the paragraphs are in smaller, more manageable chunks. Just how long did this take? I haven't been on your blog in a while.

I noticed a couple of errors, nothing too serious, though. I'm saved from the recurring nightly boredom of weekends, thanks to you guys!

Also, you made it onto the featured list for a bit. Congratulations.

How long do you think it's going to take to rewrite/edit this? All I can say is 'Good Luck'!

Unknownlight's post-edit edits:

1. You forgot to change the title to "Fallout: Equestria - Memories".

2. It looks like the GDocs conversion broke a lot of the indents at the beginning of paragraphs. I guess you'll have to re-add them manually.

3. The line breaks at the very beginning and end didn't convert. Fimfic's line breaks are made by adding "[*hr]" (without the *). At the very beginning of the chapter, add one like this:

...loco in the coco?[*/i][*/center][*hr]

I was sitting in a small dark corner office with my Commanding Officer, or C.O. ...

And at the very end, like this:

I was alone in this room, again.

[*hr][*size=14]Footnote: Level up! ...

I'll add these directly to the Google Docs of the rest of the chapters later, when I'm not on a tablet.

4.

- End of Chapter 1! -

We're not blind. :twilightsmile:

5. Random errors which I'm not sure why we didn't catch during editing:

I poked the ‘Y” button again and the text was replaced

anypony i’d talked to, and all for no discernible reason!

I looked at him, tears in my eyes.“I… I just don’t want to die here…

"That’s what happens to deserters and traitors.” Rumcake curtly shot at me.

Comma after dialogue, not period.

If your collar starts to beep, turn around.” Rumcake added. “Now, follow me.”

Cut this, or change it to "Rumcake said" or something. He wasn't "adding" anything. Also, change the first period to a comma.

...

I foresee a future in which I ask you for your Fimfiction account password so that I can edit stuff directly. :twilightoops: This is going to get old fast.

What happened to Rumcake D: He seems a bit more uptight then I remember.

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Alright- it's fixed. Thanks for helping!

3371102 There's still a few paragraphs that need indenting—they're mostly near the beginning of the chapter, but there's a couple around the middle-end.

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I foresee a future in which I ask you for your Fimfiction account password...

What FiMfic should do is allow co-authors who can be given permissions to edit the story.

Two FoE fics restarted in the same month. I hope that this isn't a trend.

Well, hopefully I can keep up with you now that you started over (I was ten chappies behind).

You still have a piece of raider in your hair

Poor widdle teal marsupial.

on a more serious note, nice to see the re-write up, wonder how her adventures gonna pan out.
And it'll be nice to read it again and check for things one missed on the first read through.

(okay, him walking and me wallowing in whatever ponies wallowed in)

A reference everyone should get, and I like how this is going.

I didn't have a chance to read this the first time, so with the rewrite I figured it was time to give it a shot. So far I'm liking these Steel Rangers, a lot of like-able characters here. But considering this is a Fallout Equestria story...

Well, full scale rewrite rejuvanation, eh? I suppose that's probably for the best. The story definitely lost the plot and all momentum midway, and it was rather awkward having a huge gap of illogical neurotic random events in between the two parts of coherent story.

It will be rather refreshing to see this story revived as what made it great in the first place - an insane yet lovable pegasus with no memory, an enormous robotic grififn claw and a horrendous and extraordinarily animate personality disorder.

And so far, you're doing a damn good job. Sure, that's quite possibly because this is a rewrite of the first chapter, which was one of the best written in the first place, but with the alterations to the Rangers' attitudes, you've definitely captured a more realistic setting here. And in that Brotherhood of Steel way, most of them are just relatively nice people hiding in a facade of armoured superiority. Very well done indeed.

Urgh. I do so dislike people rewriting things. Now I'll have to reread it, here's hoping it's an improvement. I thought there were more comments, does removing and readding chapters end up blitzing existing comments?

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It nukes comments and times read. It's a little stupid.

Awww man... I never finished reading the previous version, which I personally didn't have any problems with. Oh well, this looks like it will be fun to read. Hopefully, it will exceed the previous version, and there won't be any reader's choice chapters... never quite understood why that was put in.:facehoof: Any who, i'm looking forward to this, keep it up!:pinkiehappy:

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Trust me: it really DID need these revisions.

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*cough* google cache *cough*

And now I'll read it all again. Not complaining, heh; but you could at least provide the pre-rewrite version for those of us who wanted to have it in .epub or something. :twilightsmile:
Also, what's the deal with rewriting stories? The concept has always been alien to me. I either write a story and finish it; no rewrites - or delete it altogether if it's bad; no rewrites.

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I'll get the legacy version of Memories up soon and link it in the description.
As for rewriting, I'd rather have you guys read my best work as opposed to my sub-par work. That, and I don't believe in "I'm not fixing anything because I want to see how far I've gotten" since that's just an excuse to be lazy.

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It is however a reason to keep moving forward and producing new work rather than being held up fixing old work. They both have their benefits and drawbacks. Doing a rewrite after finishing the story makes more sense to me. I do not believe it would be fair to call it laziness. Rather, more a choice of work order.:twilightsmile:
Regardless, the masses are excited, THE REWRITE COMETH!

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I believe in "I'm not fixing stories because it is a mauvais ton". Also this -> 3389353

Ooooh, suspense! :yay:
Nice to see 'em shiny and updated!

How to become popular.
advice from Kkat
1. Write postapocalyptic story
2. With ponies, of course
3. Name it "Fallout: Equestria - <random string>
4. ?????
5. PROFIT!

3402715 Certainly not. There's actually a very, very small amount of popular FO:E stories. More often than not, writing a FO:E fic causes your story to be less popular than it would otherwise be, because of the much smaller potential audience.

I'm liking the little fixes here and there accompanied by various modifications, like Brain 2.0, with italics instead of **s. Also, was dream Cloudsdale modelled after a postcard in the old story? I think that the postcard makes more sense.

Awaiting further updates.

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I'm thinking his point was that their are enough people reading FO:E stuff that your story will get more attention sooner even if the net numbers in the long run are relatively small.

Repressed memories, ho!
If watching somebody you don't know die horribly, before realising it was your dad, and that you've forgotten him, his emotional last words and everything he ever told you completely doesn't drive you completely insane, acquiring the mechanical limb of a foreign species and massive physical trauma is bound to do it.
I like the striking bizarreness of this "hallucination". Of all the things that could be dredged up from the forgotten recesses of Frosty's memory, it's some pipe dream she once had in a library and a postcard. The complete random nonsensical nature of this event fits so well for the left-field instance it appears in.

Yay Reboot! Chapter 1 is pretty solid Bobulator, keep at it ^^

Its been a while since I read the original, wasn't she allowed to keep the anti-machine rifle due to Baked wanting to cheer her up but didn't expect her to be able to open the footlocker? Or am I mistaken completely and this is only grammar edits and such?

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There have been slight edits to the plot as well.

I'd rather just read the new version, actually. Is better written.

Old version was pretty damn funny though.

3436273 It's still just as funny. You just haven't gotten to it yet.

Any actionable information

Thats a word?

1.giving cause for legal action: giving a basis for somebody to take legal action
2.able to be implemented: able or ready to be acted upon or put into action

Well damn, New word learned.

“My dad is dead, my friends are dead, my parents are dead.

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