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Drop the bass

Vinyl and Octavia head to a night club, Octavia seems troubled... However, vinyl is determined to show octavia her means of good time, even if it means getting her drunk.

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Comment posted by Versity2003 deleted Jun 26th, 2014

Classicolt

Classicolt #2 · Jun 29th, 2014 · · ·

I always love a good vinyl and octavia story, this was great! Just a few minor mistakes here and there, but great over all! Really enjoyed it, hope to see more.

Twilight_Scratch

Twilight_Scratch #3 · Jun 29th, 2014 · · ·

It's good, but rather rushed. Then again, so was my first story, but yeah. You get a thumbs up and a fav!

Oh! yeah.. I was... Um... saying I want to... have an or-" Octavia said before she passed out Vinyl carried Octavia home on her back and laid her down in bed.

Was she trying to say orange?

Fire Gazer the Alchemist

Fire Gazer the Alchemist #4 · Jun 29th, 2014 · · ·

Not bad, not bad at all. There were a few grammar mistakes; nothing that was horrible, but you definitely want to run through and fix them anyways. There was also a lot of dialogue compared to the amount of description which normally I don't like, but for this story it kinda works.

I think you've got a lot of potential. Keep on writing.