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The Blackcuno


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After the Events with Tirek and the box that became the seed of friendship, Discord took it upon himself to give Twilight a better present than a key that was once a medallion.

He gave her the Earring's of Profound Change.

It was said in the Journal of Star Swirl that these earrings allowed one, if the right statement is said whilst wearing them, they would spend an allotted amount of time as something other than pony.

This is the story of how Twilights once boring life literally took a turn at the road of Banana's and Crazy town, but maybe she could live with it.

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Comments ( 39 )

I like DiscoLight. I like this. But I do have one nitpick. It is spelled Draconequus. Draconequui is the plural. Draconiquus is wrong.

Am I weird to simply want the relationship to take the backside and for the story to more fully explore Twilight exploring chaos magic, why it does as it does, and how it affected Discord's.

Sure, Discord is a villain... but in a way, he was given a pretty deal ; a being of pure chaos in a world that is so crazily to the order side that even stuff like the *sun rising and lowering* is artificially controlled. Now add that the setting's inhabitants are easily spooked and hate chaos to the point that even Discord's largely harmless pranks are seen with the same kind of horror as Tirek's destructive rampages or Chrysalis's invasions.

Now put Twilight in a position akin to Discord and namely learning that the power of his species is not so much controlled as directed and that trying to live the way the ponies demand of him basically means suppressing his power, denying his own needs, and actively accepting a purely predictable and eventless existence...


It doesn't justify Discord being as much of a villain as he was... but when you know you'll be hated no matter what you do and that any attempt at trying to show people that a little chaos can be funny or even healthy will result in you being demonized... well, maybe it will give Twilight a new look into the spirit of chaos's mindset and why he ended up becoming the monster everyone accused him of being, pre-redeeming... as well as why he accepted to try and go along with said redeeming despite it being so counter-nature (extreme loneliness will do things to your mind...).

yaaaay a new story !!!

I'll keep an eye on this. see where it goes.

This story looks intriguing please write more

So far this certainly lives up to its Random tag. To the point where I'm not sure I'll be interested in future chapters. But I might be.

A good story, but I will hold off on the like until a proofreader is found.

4682939 Wow, that is well thought out, I feel like that will go places if it is made, now I will surely follow this story. And this author foes have the potential to write that too, he seems quite adept at writing this so far

Hmm, I'm interest in seeing where this will go, so for now I'm giving it a favorite for visibility.

I love this story the first time I read it I tried to draw some fan art. I drew twilight based off your description as a draconequus. I'll probable post it on deviantart page when I'm finished editing.

Loved it can't wait to read the next one!

To all - I have Chapter 2 ready to go and a revised 1st chapter with alterations as per comment made above but as I do this in my down time at my work I need to mail it to my personal Email
4682824 - duely noted and fixed

4723312 - Cannot wait to see the results

wow this is really good and unique ^w^
can't wait for the next chapter!

(Spoilers! TLDR: I like it)
I'm really liking this so far!

While there are some parts that I think are a bit "over-the-top", like the Luna scene with her being a gamer (as the premiss is already so unique, it kind of gets a bit much when you also use those ideas as well). But in the end it is a comedy! The way Twilight handles the situation is fitting for the setting and her quirks as a Draconequus is funny.

Another thing is that I would have loved some parts to be a bit more developed, as they feel a bit short, like the the prank on Cadence, or the motivations for her prank'ing in the first place. Also the revelation and explanation by Twilight to the princesses was also a bit disappointing. It does fit the tone of the story that both princesses are very accepting, but the explanation by Twilight for her actions, her thought of Discord etc. just felt quite undeveloped, it still worked mind you, it could have just been a bit more... meaty? I would basically want to see more bantering.

Regardless of those thoughts, I still really enjoyed this story! The conversation at the end of chapter 2 was good and made me very interested in seeing how this develops! Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

I disliked this fanfic... so i could click "like" again.:pinkiehappy:

The quality of the editing took a hit this chapter. I noticed an few times where you said one word and meant another. Soul and sole for example. Sometimes the characters seemed a bit OOC and while for twilight that can be explained by her mind quickly conforming to her form, as hinted in the foreshadowing at the end there, it was just weird reading Luna's rant on the mic. I understand Gamer Luna is a thing but would she still act that way?

So this is that. Definitely need a beta, Thank you is not a single word.
In other news, I like the premise, and it seems you have some good ideas, but you need to do more with the setting and environment. So far your writing style seems like my own, with everyone mostly just standing there and talking ('tis why I haven't started writing again, I haven't figured out how to improve quite yet).
Keep going! ;)

Well that's one way to get a date. See? Even chaos can be planned!
I have to wonder though, how long it will take for them to realize.... Oh, well that's later anyways, right? Still got three months after all, no rush!
I noticed quite a few glitches sprinkled here and there, do you have a good beta reader?
Keep going! ;)

This is moving way, way, WAY too fast with little to no focus on the implications of the changes to Twilight, its actions on her friends or the environment, no real thought about the relationship and differences between magic and chaos...

Not to mention the fact that it's pretty ham-fisted regarding pairing up Twilight and Discord ; the fact that her friends are brushing off Twilight going on a rampage and everyone going 'no big deal' despite the fact that her first showing of her powers was pretty major, her sudden mental tirade about how Discord is not so bad despite him giving her no reason to really consider it...

Frankly? I'm disappointed by this story.

Hey your doing pretty good just slow it down a bit other than a few mistakes here and there but keep it up.

This chapter feels like you're in a hurry to get to the end. There's a whole lot to explore in this situation, and frankly it feels like you're ignoring it. Otherwise I enjoy this story, please continue.

This story has great potential. I like it.
Discolight stories are far too scarce in general.

What I liked most was your your way of getting Twilight out of her shell, showing, that she can be just as crazy and random as Discord.

Hope to see the next chapter soon :twilightsmile:

“Ah still don’t trust yah after that little incident with Tireck” Applejack stated harshly.

It's Tirek actually.

“Please do as soon as you’re able” Fluttershy said looking around as more ponies became their

“Now it would seem she has reawakened” Zecora said as Twilight blinked a few times, her head pounding. “Try and take it easy, fainting like that had us all on the edge”

You dropped a sentence or two there.

Grammar issues aside, I liked this chapter, the shipping was sweet

Hmm, I have a feeling the discharge was unexpected for Discord. We knew he was essentially falling for Twilight, but I think too much happened too quickly.
Seems a snippet got cut off in the g-docs import, but nothing important happened in the missing scene.
Keep going! ;)

5520376 Fixed

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5522565 I prefer to use Microsoft word rather than Gdocs, but yeah a snippit was lost in the transfer over. all sorted now.

5522758 you know what happens when I assume.... This.
It's actually pretty easy to lose a chunk of text when importing via Google docs, which is why I thought that's what you used. :twilightblush:

When is the next update? I'm curious to find out what happens next.

Awwww that last were so cute love the story:pinkiehappy:

Have you ever considered expanding these stories?? I, for one, would definitely read them.
Just a thought, whatever your decision I look forward to more of your great work. :pinkiehappy:

I think he's abandoned this story. A shame it was cut down in the prime of its life. :raritydespair:

I'm still waiting for his new chapters but...😭 I like this story so much that I keep reading it

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Thanks for the coming back, it's nice to see people interest after all this time.
As for an update since this was posted chapter wise, I have had PC upgrades, IRL moves and move outs, change of jobs and not a lot of free time to dedicate to writing. I recall doing an audit on my pc hardware for the word document and re-reading what I wrote back then to now,which is 7years now, I don't like what was written as I have changed as a writer from some guy a few years out of high school.
If interest is there can do a bulk upload if I can fine the document again to see where the story was going to go, but at this stage I'm thinking this is kinda like shadow of Israfel or duke nukem forever, do I release and watch the cringe or not and silent cancel it?

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