When Rainbow Dash accidentally knocked Fluttershy off to defend Fluttershy's honour, Fluttershy fell for hours metaphorically, but instead of butterflies catching her she fall into a tree were vampire fruit bats were sleeping. She was also unfortunate enough to have her neck land on the two fangs of said type of bat.
Two applefarming parents saw this happening in front of their eyes and took her home, the filly transformed into a Pegasus/Fruit Bat hybrid in front of their eyes. It also made the Filly more animalistic with barely anything pony remaining in her. So they decide adopting her in hope they can bring the filly back to her senses (her pony senses that is), and possibly find a cure for her.
But an apple sucking demon for a sister is not really something Applejack would like if she came back from Manehatten.
Also if hadn't caught on that Applejack and McIntosh's parents are around. They are.
Aiming for 0% Twilight (Stephenie Meyer) jokes.
Requested by J-Rook in these two forum posts.
Edit: 03-07-2014 (dd-mm-yyyy)
This story somehow managed to weasel its way onto the popular list. A Firebird first I think... Strange.
Edit: 03-07-2014 And it was at the top for a little while. What the...
Interesting.
I honestly though this as going to be a regression story and applejack would be caring for a filly Flutterbat, but this seems interesting. I look forward to more chapters
hmmm.... intressting
. Go on 
You have caught me in this story. I like it so far, can't wait for the next.
It is nice to know one of my story ideas is now a story, I really wish I could right this well
MOAR!
Good story so far, but you should probably get an editor or something because some of the writing could some use work. Not trying to be critical or rude
I'm just trying to be constructive.
Great story and aside from my story Fluttershy Batwings this is the first fanfic with Flutterbat as a filly
4632683 I know four guys already doing that. That includes you. No need for me to do the same...
4633463 4633215 4632763 I'll work on it.
4633434 You're welcome. But to be honest I didn't try that hard. (Don't take that as an insult.)
4635113 I like the writing the way it is. I like wording things strangely. Grammar is another story.
4635605 Looks at the "Young Bat" Folder in the "Flutterbat's Cave" group.
4636050 I can tell, but I don't tack it bad
4636050 Oh ok
I'll definitely follow this but lawd do you need an editor.
This seems interesting can't wait for the next chapter
YAY next chapter .GO.
4709668 It's in the works. Somewhere between 60% and 92% done. Be patient.
4709795 okie dokie lokie
mOaR!!!
Update moar often 'amit!
Pleas.
4730722 4729348 Sorry, I'm a slow writer, a game enthusiast first, with a HUGE backlog in Games (Can't tell without counting), Shows (Over twenty) and Fics (68 read laters). The wait for this chapter can be contributed to all of those things. At least it's faster than my average publish rate.
I might start another short story or one-shot so I don't get burned out on writing this one. I keep many things in consideration.
And I really wanted to play Donkey Kong 64 again.
4730953 ok man. Im k with dat.
Sorry for type style. And grammer.
Ever play borderlands 2?
Yes, yes, yes, this pleases me.
4731942 I know a friend who does. If you want to discuss online games PM me. Warning: I don't have many.
i sorta enjoyed this chapter.
the reason i say sorta is this inconsistencies and grammer and time problems. i think you need an editor.
on a side note.... How are they gonna explain this to aj?
4744405 Hey AJ, we got a vampire living with us now.
Applejack: Cool beans, mom.
And then the sitcom began.
Can you point out some typos? That goes for everyone.
4744431 By any chance that your story was inspired by my story Fluttershy Batwings? Because both in our stories Lil Mac calls Flutterbat Pegabat and also that Lil Mac does not like having Flutterbat living with him. Anyways I like the story
4792980 Not inspired. But it's a reference of sorts. I have one more planned.
4794702 Alright. I am glad that my story is being referenced in other stories
Hmmm, blue body and multicolor hair? They made an RD plush.
She is probably going to cling on to that so tight and never let go, and not even know why. All my feels.
4809397 Dang it. You found out my evil plan, now I need to retcon into a death robot to elimate FlutterBat. *Holds up a sign reading "Joke"*
Wow this is a really great story I hope you keep to it. I want to see AJ's reaction to Flutters
What I'm imagining for the next chapter is
Gala or whoever; Kid, you've got a vampire fruit bat sister!
Aj: How does that even work?
Gala or whoever: Friendship because friendship is magic!
Aj: Are you insane? *sees Flutterbat* Imma firing my lasers!
Boom!
Still, AMAZING story!
i might have missed a few things while reading, by which i mean how much they should have impacted, because i'm still getting used to these changes to the site. they weren't around when i was on the site on thursday night, so either it happened today or yesterday. whatever the case, it's a little confusing, so i might have lost some of the impact from this chapter.
anyway, an interesting start for applejack's return, though i didn't get a lot of those references.
i did see some errors
Did ya something interesting happening at Uncle 'n' Aunt's place, AJ?
i think it was meant to be "ya do anything"
ya raided too many of Li'l Mac's horror books
not really sure if this is how it was meant to be written. if not, raided should've been read
not really anything else i can think of that was off, aside from rarity's name having a y when it should be an i in the diary part. nice job
5117230 Applejack isn't the best student in the class.
People have been calling for an editor?
Also Donkey Kong 64. <3
5117618 Autum Breeze is technically the editor. And the dairy section is purposely written bad.
Where? I don't remember making a DK64 reference, sounds like something I'd do but I don't remember making it.
5117712
Oh Jesus. Really no offense, but your editors should have some semblance of literacy.
You mentioned it in the comments.
So Applejack's real name is Jacqueline. Finally she gets to meet Flutterbat
5117806 He volunteered to do it. Because he was the only one who voted for it and I offered him the option to read it earlier than everyone else.
If a better editor wants to edit it he's free to do it.
more plz
5759262 Writers block for another story holds me back. But you're right, I should continue this one.
5765891 yes it should it's real good
5774997 It's okay.
5776496 well i have 4 fave chars from mlp:fim Lyra Vinyl Discord and Flutterbat so any good story with them in it i like
5778822 I can't find the folder I kept every plot point in. It might be a while before I begin writing for this again.
Does this include the comments?
5852511 Whatever you want it to be.
I got some good news and some bad news. Always wanted to say that. xD
Good news first.
Great story concept, Fluttershy turning into Flutterbat as a young filly by accidental Vampire Fruitbat bite. Then due to her suffering amnesia warrants her being taken in by others. Not the most elegant of solutions but it works. I will definitely track this to see where you take it.
Now for the bad news.
The writing. . . Let me get this straight. The writing could use heck of a lot of work. Unessesary repeatings, grammar errors, weird word choices, unnaturaly flowing dialogues, unnatural character behaviours, unstable pacing, out of whack time frames and at one point there was a conversation between two different induviduals (AJ & Red Gala) in the same quotation pair with nothing but a period seperating their sentences (that was no doubt the biggest offender).
The story could have a lot more sturdy foundation. It leaves a lot of questions unanswered. Some of those waranted as it drives the story and the reader to continue. But quite a few just leaves the reader confused.
The magic of names in Equestria reins supreme. Remove "Shy" in hef name and voila, no longer shy... Sorry but thats not how amnesia works. Generally your personality does not change. Not imedietly at least. New memories formed before the return of your old memories will take bigger precidence over who you'll become, but the change is not instant. This is a trope that is simply not true.
Hmm, AB complete absense seems unwaranted. I think AB should have been just a baby at the time (or maybe just a fetus) but on some level she should exist already.
Have you considered an editor?
I am not going to remove my old comment, but I will say I didn't notice that last update was almost a year old (damn cellphone version not showing chapter timestamps!) and the story is presumably dead.
6426865 It kinda is... When I was writing this I lost interest in MLP (still haven't regained it), gained sleeping problems (I like working on a fully awake mind, which rarely happens), doesn't help I became a school drop-out by being Sarcastic, not saying "hello" and criticizing the teaching methods of the substitute teacher. That did only wonders for me. I also tend to leave out words on accident. I'm also a terrible reader. When I get passionate again I might continue.
The story would've gone crazy with plot twists that explain a lot. One of which is to give some development to another character, one not yet introduced.
The Amnesia? Here's what I may have intended: Remember how in Bats! Flutterbat showed no signs of Fluttershy? Something like that here, except with very vague memories. The characters themselves explain this away with amnesia, because, let's face it: vampire pony are probably really difficult to catch and study.
Everyone's age in MLP is really vague, clearly I interpenetrated AB's age to be younger than yours. I don't remember what I was going to do with her though. Let her be, or exclude her because Flutterbat's a handful.
I think ahead, I think...
Have you considered an editor? No, I both don't want bother people.
(P.S. I haven't read the story to respond to you,
I don't like reading my own stuff.)
6429515
Well if that is the case then perhaps it's for the best that the story died.
I mean If you can't deal with reading your own story (usually multiple times) or have a bunch of editors then the quality would been quite bad no matter how good you are at writing. No author ever nails it on the first draft. One author once told me "You shall have read your next story or chapter at least five times before publishing it." While I think five is a bit excessive at least once when its finished is the bare minimum, but generally twice or thrice. Just to hammer out those big glaring errors and most of the smaller ones. The one story I did finished I have read somewhere around 20 times and it's still a far cry from perfect (probably still have a few errors I don't know of in there too).
TL;DR: Don't like reading your own stuff? Why write to begin with?
P.S: Everything else seemed like valid points. A bit unorthodox maybe, but valid.
6435514 When I('m) was/at school/work, and it gets boring my thoughts start to pile into amusing (sometimes off-the-wall) ideas. If I don't write them down and/or share them, they'll be wasted. I read them through at least once they're done. I fix them when people point them out or when I actually read through them again. Ever worked on something so long that you just want to get it over with? That's also in effect. Editors, I've had a few before they quit. That I lack courage (as dumb as that sounds) to ask people in general, that and reason I mentioned previously.
Why write? I got to find something to be good at. I'm relatively talent-less. Here are my strengths: Video Games, and fluent English (In a country where English is basically a second language, the only things we dub are Kids films and shows. Written English is a slightly different story). I can only play them, not make them, and I'm very irritable at repeated interaction with people.
In the future, my mother is going into theater and I might join her, she's impressed by my revisions at her script to make them more believable, realistic, funny or more tragic. I'm not sure if I'll do it, saying you got a job through nepotism isn't something to be proud of...
Thank you,
That can be explained by being foreign or being unorthodox myself.