Twilight Sparkle. Her life has become stressful since becoming a princess, and she just can't seem to adjust. When a travelling salespony gives her a book on potions, she finds one which she thinks will make her life better. We all know how this will turn out. Warning: Scenes of murder.
Credit to Dragnmastralex from deviantART for the 'Nightmare Twilight Sparkle' image used for the cover.
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Not bad, I'm a sucker for Split personality stories. Please continue.
That fucking cover art just no
@the parasprite I will change it pretty soon. I just needed something for now, alright? It probably won't be that for now,
@firebirdabirdoffire Why thank you. I sure will.
seems intresting always liked stories where twilight becomes evil and she either gains so much power no one stops her or some wierd plot twist happens and screws her over. Keep the chapters rolling.
4585746 @cptslapem Thank you. There should be a new one tomorrow.
Yessss a Jekyll and Hyde based crossover! Thank you! I'm going to read the heck out of this!
4590234 Thank you! There should be a new chapter or two today, however, I tried yesterday and I wasn't in the mood Glad you like it.
good story but if you read the original dr jekel and mr hyde you would know that hyde only comes out at night
4594829 I have read the original.
4594860 well then i rest my case but the story takes place in the pov of a dective trying to figure out the murders. Are you trying to go for a first person fic about the dr and miss sparkle?
4594885 I'm going to do the main part in the perspective of Twilight, and when suspicions rise, I will change the point of view to an investigative team. By the way, the original is told by the lawyer, Gabriel John Utterson, not a detective.
4594938 right my bad about the decetive part and neat going from the pov of "hyde" then to the investigative team
4594985 Thank you. I'm thinking of having a point where there is two chapters taking place at the same time, of the detectives getting closer to their killer, with Twilight on the run.
4594997 neat idea btw do u need a editor /pre-reader?
4595000 Well, I don't have one at the moment.
4595010 i volunteer as tribute
4595011 Nice reference! I'm new to this, so how would I send a draft to you?
4595030 pm me if not ill send you a pmm with my gmail
Just a slight problem, but parts of this chapter feel a bit awkard, especially the fact she's "turning into a different pony". As a Jekyll and Hyde blog runner myself, I understand how hard it is to distinguish how Twi and Fallen are different yet the same. There's nothing wrong with the way you took it, it is fine, it's the way a lot of people view Jekyll/Hyde characters. However, for the story's flow, I would reccomend a bit more subtle. The way I take it (which you don't need to use, this is just a suggestion), Jekyll (or Twi in this case), still wants some of what Hyde/Fallen does. For example, Fallen would kill somepony Twilight has a grudge against, it doesn't take much (Hyde is a madman after all) but whereas Twi is too held back by society's norms to enact her revenge, Fallen has no problem. You did reference this slightly when you said that Fallen was "a monster being released", but I would reccomend taking it further.
Once again, this is just my take! Yours works just fine, I was trying to help it flow better. Thank you for reading my Jekyll and Hyde nerd rant, and good luck with the rest of the story.
4596057 Yes, I understand what you are talking about, and how it will work. It will probably start working like that, but 'Fallen' was held back for so long, she just lashed out on the first pony they could get to, and will start calming down.
Could you put a Flashlight romance in your story?
4603503 Probably not. In the work this is based off, there is no romance. Plus, Twilight is going to become isolated, trying to keep back her inner monster. When this is happening, romance would not be the first thing to cross her mind.
Very interesting so far. I'll be reading this. Also, I too, am working on a Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde fan-fiction with Twilight Sparkle, (It's not up on the site yet, if you're wondering.) but mine is more based off of the Broadway musical adaption.
4604149 I wish you the best of luck. PM me the link when it's up.
4604302 Will do.
And I wish you good luck on your story
well a very fine story but i would like if you make it longer
. poor rarity 
4729689 the thing is, I want to make this longer, but I cannot feel inspired. I will try to get SOMETHING done in the holidays. About Rarity, I needed a target, and I am not the best writer of posh people, or ponies.
4729733 sometimes finding ideas to write is easy i know (i mean i write stories but in different language ) but to find the inspiration you need to make a good long story you have to focus really hard on the idea what I mean is when you are writing imagine that you are a character in the story just close your eyes and try to create a place for yourself in the book . i hope that my advice helps to write better. that's pretty much what i learned for my experience
Hate to tell ya but Pinkie Pie beat you to it. See below.
Ooh. If Spike finds put Twilight killed Rarity he is gonna be piiiiiiiiissed.
I'm confused. Is that her ghost? Or was it one of those things where a person dies but it turns out they're alive later. Also I hope nobody finds that poece of cloak.
Your sheer amount of messages.
a) I know. It's what gave me inspiration in the first place.
b) Indeed he would be.
c) Hallucination
d) Yup.
Updated! Only a short one, just to get me focused on this once more.
better tell Celestia before they find you Twilight...
6185943 Nice to see you again. And, I think her paranoia may stop that.
6186056 maybe. or the Other Twilight will stop her and kill Celestia to prevent her from seeing her.
6186147 Now you're getting the hang of it. I'm going to start writing daily, hopefully, though the next few days, I may not, or only write short updates. I am, however, starting another MLP story based on another story.
time is ticking
Duh duh duh!