Crime in New Mare City as been going on for years and the police are powerless to stop it. However, Rarity Belle of the news is not the one to sit back and let it happen. She try's to get the police to the find the clan know as "The Changelings" but they won't do it and ignore her. Then one night her life change after she was rescue by four ponies that fight like Ninjas. Meet Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Twilight Sparkle, and Pinkie Pie, The Teenage Mutant Ninja Ponies!
Rainbow Dash as Leo
Applejack as Raph
Twilight as Donnie
Pinkie Pie as Mikey
Princess Celestia as Master Splinter
Rarity as April
Spike as Casey
Chrysalis as The Shredder
The Changelings as The Foot Clan
Rarity, Spike, Chrysalis, and The Changelings are humans, as Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Twilight, Pinkie Pie, and Princess Celestia are in their ponies forms. Base off of the 1990 Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles Movie.
Oh I love TMNT! This is gonna be awesome!
Uh I just noticed you forgot fluttershy here.
4587287 I don't have a role for her.
4587293 what about kurai?
Can't wait to read the next chapter. But for now you get this awesome tmnt/mlp video.
4587370 Not sure when she'll come in, but I'll think about it.
4587293 Just finished reading and it was awesome and now I've got to watch the movie again bye!
4587403 Thanks, I know it switch Applejack and Rainbow Dash role and I don't blame people for that. I'm just going by the picture it show me.
Have not read it. But love the idea.
4587419...
I can understand going by picture you are using for a cover image.
Personality-wise, however, I would think Applejack make a better Leonardo and Rainbow Dash be more fit for the role of Raphael.
Raphael is generally the brash and hot-headed one, which puts her more in-tune with Rainbow Dash.
Since Twilight Sparkle is (appropriately) cast as also-intellectual Donatello, that means a Leader-figure is needed for Leonardo's role. In that case, the level-headed and pragmatic Applejack is best suited for that since she is generally considered the "second-in-command" of the Elements of Harmony, often taking up the lead when Twilight Sparkle is unable to.
4587690 Trust me, I have no problem with the order that having everyone else has, but I like this one, maybe if I come with my own version I'll change things up.
I love the first movie, I watched that when i was a kid, and love the story so far
Oy Vey, TMNT x Ponies, how can this go wrong
4587984 That depends on the writer, which is me of course. And the people that review this story.
4587370 1) Okay, it's KA-rai, not KU-rai. No offense, but get the names right. As a long-time TMNT fan, stuff like this bugs me to death!
Almost as much as when folks get Raphael's name, and especially his nickname, wrong.
Case in point (and this is aimed at the author of this):
Raphael's nickname is not Ralph; it's RAPH! The only time that his name ever has an "l" in it is at the end of his full given name!
Sky and winds above, that gets me riled the most.
Now here:
you've got the names right (and kudos for making Pinkie Mikey! You're bang on with this one!), so no nit-picks there.
(Even if Mikey (and by extension, Pinkie) is a lot smarter that folks give him (her) credit for.
)
Honestly, I'm sorry for this rather extended nit-pick, but just like AJ is my favorite among the Mane 6, Raph is my fave amongst the mutant Boys in Green, and as a longtime fan, I get as aggravated about the way his name is so commonly mispelled as I do when folks write AJ's name like this:
Or when they don't separate Apple Bloom's (like so):
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Okay, that's the end of my mini-rant.
Okay, far be it for me to tell another writer how to write their stories, but you seriously, seriously need to go back and make a few (more than a few, actually) corrections to some of your stuff. Like these:
First example:
Corrected sentence:
Second example:
Corrected sentence:
(And what Dash said to AJ is fine. That was Leo's line from the move, word for word.)
Third example:
Again, the corrected version:
See what I'm getting at? You need to go back and add "ed" to some of the words, like "ask". "groan": etc.
Also, you need to work on your punctuation. I noticed that you've left commas and such out of the places where they're needed, and appropriate.
You also might want to find yourself a proofreader and/or an editor. This is a great fic, and the 1990 TMNT movie is one of my favorites (a bit dated, in this day and age, but still great), and I would love to see you do it justice, but you need to make some corrections here and there.
Sorry if you think I'm nit-picking, but rest assured that I'm not. I'm just trying to help. You're otherwise a good writer; this just needs a bit of polish, where some words and punctuation is concerned.
Now, with all of that said, this is getting a Favorite and an upvote from me, and I can't wait til the next chapter! Should be good!
4590171 Two both of your reviews, thank you for review it and I'm sorry about Raph name, but the spelling check of that name is wrong on my laptop and said it spell with an l in it. Second, thanks for pointing out some stuff. As for an editor, I really can't get one that will help me, they are either busy with something else or take a long time to fix it. And I a bit of the same way with Applejack and Apple Bloom names as well. I use to put a space in Applejack name, but that was fix over time. And when ever I see Apple Bloom name together, I know it wrong and if I do it, I fix it. Plus, I know some people think Rainbow fits Raph better then Leo, but you can see I'm going by the picture that I found. I plan on started the next chapter soon. Hopefully things will get better.
4590254 From me, you're very welcome, and that's okay. I totally understand ornery spellcheckers. You wouldn't believe how often that I have to wrestle with the ones on both my desktop PC (when it's working...which it isn't atm) and this laptop. Drives me bonkers sometimes!
Oh, okay. I understand. I just wish that I could help you beyond pointing things out, but I have trouble with my own stuff sometimes.
And I hear ya. I've seen a lot of people (and not just writers) do that. Artists do it, too, believe it or not.
Hey, I think you did okay with the character assignments, and I think that you should just leave Rainbow in Leo's role, rather than switching AJ and Dash out from the characters that you have them in. Mainly because what a lot of folks forget is, AJ has a temper, too, and she can be just as brash and reckless as Dash usually is when she wants to be. And it's nice to see her a little out of character from what she usually is.
Hey, my all-time favorite Pony playing my all-time favorite Turtle? That's cool with me.
And that's cool to know; can't wait!
And I hope it does, too.
Yay! Sparity!
Another great chapter continue the excellent work dude! Cowabuga!
This has potential but you need to go over it to fix the mistakes. Cause there's alot. It gets kinda confusing to read.
Good job on the chapter can't wait to read the next one. Cowabuga!
4590565 I got the next two chapters up. Are they better?
So much broken English in the description and in your comments, not touching this with a seven-foot staff.
4713008 I'm using the movie transcript. I have to write the action scenes myself.
I like that Queen Chrysalis and her Changelings are Shredder and the Foot Clan.
They are perfect for being one another.
4605817 Hi. Don't mean to be a nitpicker, but you left out the 'N' in 'Cowabunga'. Just though I'd bring that up.
Other than a few grammatical errors, it's hellacious. I'm considering writing a spritual sequel to this based off the canceled TMNT film 'The Next Mutation'. Not the show, the film.
5870151 By all means go ahead. I like to read it.
5870186 Aw, kick-ass!!
5870221 Let me know when it up.
5870227 I'll be sure to do that.
5870137 Okay then.
Cricket is a game played by British people, and by Jamaicans. It's their version of Baseball, technically!!
5870248 Thank you. I really have no idea what the game was until you told me.
I've been thinking for a while, and I've decided not to do the 'Next Mutation' story, since the film didn't get very far in the development stages, & instead, I've decide to write about the Ponies' adventures during their time in Northhampton. Sorry if you're feeling a little disappointed.
5891185 That ok. I can't say I heard about that place. Northhampton.
Could you please hurry with the next chapter I want to see applejack fight the clan.
5891228 Hope you get back to this soon.
5891228 If you want help PM me.
5891228 I hate bugging people, but I can't wait. When will future chapters be up?
5891228 When is the next chapter coming?
7739625 I don't know.
7830061 Ever seen the movie? I was basing it off of that scene with Casey Jones and Raphael meeting for the first time.
7830106 When is chapter 4 coming?
7830106 When is chapter 4 going to be done?
5870151
The show was definitely pretty bad, but the idea it tried to put forth of the fifth female turtle Venus De Milo was a fascinating prospect I wish other versions of the franchise expanded upon.
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I agree.
4587293
Sunset Shimmer could potentially make a good Kurai. Their backstories have some similarities in context.
7739669
Is this story going to be updated soon?