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Terciel1249


Not much to say. Just writing stuff for fun.

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Discord has existed since the beginning of time, forced to suffer as a mere spirit called entropy. When he escaped his ethereal prison, he committed horrifying acts against the cosmos in retribution. Leading to the extinction of humanity from the lands of Equistria.

Now, after the fall of Tirek, Discord contemplates his life and what it means to be forgiven. His one chance to make up for this crime lies in the stone body of one of his victims. His body beaten and mind broken, the soldier Discord tormented before will live again. Forced to live in in a body that is not his, this man must learn to accept a new life and the lessons Equestria will teach him.

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mmmm ok ... i like it :pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile:

4582327 Thank you. :pinkiehappy: I hope you enjoy the next chapter.

This story seems awesome! The cliff hanger is killing me! :flutterrage:

YbJ

Not sure why this has been added to a group dedicated to Discord being a good guy, since according to the lore in this story, Discord is actually the most powerful and evil being to ever exist, waging cosmic war against the forces of goodness and light. Even though Celestia is claiming to be his friend, it's made pretty clear that she is just trying to prevent him from going on another murderous rampage.

But anyway...

This was great and well-written. A few small typos here and there, but not enough to ruin anything. Definitely an engaging prologue. I can't wait to see what happens with this ex-human soldier.

Keep up the good work!

4582423 Sorry, :fluttercry: The second chapter should be added within two weeks.

4582429 Redemption. Trying to become a good guy. If it doesn't fit, I'll try and have it removed.

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I think it fits. A guy who recognizes that the things he's done in the past are awful and sincerely tries to make amends is a good guy at least for the context of that behavior, and it's actually made fairly clear that no, Celestia isn't trying to keep Discord from going on a murderous rampage, she's trying to overcome her own revulsion at the knowledge of what he's done, given that she knows he has changed and that he sincerely regrets what he did.

I think that most versions of Discord are beings who could do with a good hard look at what they've done in the past; I myself tend to write a very sympathetic Discord, but he's committed his share of atrocities and horrors in his time (nothing on the scale of the one in this story, but no canon-accurate version of Discord is ever *innocent*.) So I don't think a story where Discord used to be a really terrible being is disqualified if during the time period of the story he regrets what he did and is seeking to do something to try to make up for what he did.

so let me get this strait from what i read in the description.there were once humans in equestria and then he screwed things up and they all died and then ponies happend....but theres one question...how would lyra know about us?....was she there when there was still humans?...did she see the end of humanity happen?....just how does she know?:rainbowderp::applejackconfused:

4582935 Good questions. I will absolutely have to address them in the story itself. Thanks for pointing that out, I did not really consider Lyra. Here, enjoy a mustache! :moustache:

uh..thanks?....

befor anyone brings up anything about eqestria girls for any reason...what if the human wolrd of the mirior is NOT THE HUMAN WORLD..maybe celestia is trying to hide something..maybe the truth..maybe eqestria IS THE HUMAN WORLD and after discord killed everybody our chemicals,toxic waste,and anything that raidioactive went the land?...maybe thats how ponies came to be...have dragons happen to exsist in eqestria..:applejackconfused:

4582965 I'm not sure how to respond without spoiling anything. I like the enthusiasm and your questions, I just don't want to take the fun out of the mystery. Thanks for the comments. :twilightsmile:

you welcome.by the way im sure alot of your readers are going to ask questions like mines

4582996 So true. I'll just have to answer them in the story. Yeah for future developments! :pinkiecrazy:

is the human a boy or a girl?because when i was reading part one when discord was telling that story i was getting mixed and comfused...if the human is a girl there might actualy be hope for humanity to repopulate in equestria.

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No problem. As long as it gets done I'm happy. :rainbowlaugh: Quality over quantity.

this is a good story so far, and I can't wait to read the next chapter. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

You have no idea how happy I am that you made him a gryphon. :pinkiehappy:

4653751 I'm glad! :pinkiehappy: But I don't think I can call him a full gryphon. I thought there weren't a whole lot of gryphons around and I wanted to do something different. I thought I could combine some pony-traits with gryphon-traits to use later in the story.

Funny story related to this idea, after I posted the chapter I was watching one of the Harry Potter movies on television and realized this idea already existed. He's a hypogryph!

Neat! I was so glad to see this updated. A hippogriff was an interesting choice--I was afraid it was just going to be a cliched gryphon or pony transformation.

That my friend IS SO F##KING AWESOME!

Sooooo glad you didn't use the usual transformation!
I CAN'T WAIT UNTIL NEW CHAPTER!!!!!!!!

Is he looking all cute like this when his better?
th08.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/360/2/2/mlp_fim_hippogriff_by_golddemona-d4a9kir.jpg

Or more of the Harry Potter style (realistic-ish)

4655579 I'd say a cross between the two. Cute without the pony ears. And an eye patch.

A Hippogrif eh? Figures Discord's magic would get twisted that way. In Mythology, they were created for, and used in Medieval and Renaisance writings as an allegory for "doing the impossible".
The Griffons in human myth had an insatiable lust for horseflesh, a lust comparable to waving a bottle of water at someone just rescued from the desert, and reputedly thought nothing of suicidally attacking an armored column of knights to try and get their horses, so the thought a Griff and a Horse could breed was as laughable to learned people as, say celestial winged unicorns raising the sun and moon... :raritywink:
At least Griffons in this warped and changed Earth are far less bloodthirsty than the ones of Myth...

4714460 Me too. Also thanks for the info, I had no knowledge of the horseflesh. Kinda creepy when a hippogriff is part horse.

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At least he's not going to attack his back half. :raritywink: If Griffons in this future era were nuts for equine meat, there would either be a world entirely of griffons, or a world entirely of ponies with a glassed-over area where the Griffs used to be... :trollestia: "Mmmm... birdies... how about a.... suuuun burrrrn!"

10/10 would almost pass out from exhaustion to read again.

ok very nice keep it coming or i will hunt you down and force you to do it >:):pinkiecrazy::trollestia:

Sharp objects + junk = sad male

XD good one!
When picking out names

Jesus

You awesome

Luke Skywalker

I take that bad you're AMAZING!!
And then all then other refrences... I just want to bow down to you and then create a religion about you!!
I laughed too many times to count XD

4808154 I'm glad you have enjoyed it so far. Don't hurt yourself, though.

4809026 Glad I could make you laugh. It's always fun to laugh.

Fantastic chapter! Lots of character development going on here.
Now if only someone could make a smarter spellcheck program. An awful lot of sound-alikes seem to have been tossed in this one by auto-correct. :twistnerd: I swear, it sometimes seems the programs are being deliberate trolls in a lot of stories on this site...:trollestia:

4810258 Yeah, that would be nice. Too bad the auto correct in my head didn't catch them either.

Awesome! I'm really curious how things are going to turn out, especially how Discord will be involved. :derpyderp2:

Really amazing fic so far, looking forward to more!

JFK

Cool make moar plz.

Poor guy, I actually got a little teary eyed reading this.:raritycry::pinkiesad2::ajsleepy::applecry::fluttercry::fluttershyouch::fluttershbad::raritydespair::fluttershbad:

this chapter was amazing and looking forward to seeing more.

Fer once discords trying and hopefully he succeeds in his attempt to rectify his over done wrong.

Damn that punch in the feels felt good!
Haven't felt that in a while!

Also:

But why, in the name of Celestia’s sugar coated tits,

Lulwot? XD

4972216 the celestial thing its like pinkie pie it just is there's no answer for the reasoning.

Would I be incorrect if I assumed the next chapter will be post on the sixth of october?


Also, you manage to make me hate (and then try to forgive) a character. As weird as it sound, that makes you a good author in my book.

Good job.

5084384 Unfortunately, I have not been writing much recently do to my work/college schedule. I have only plotted out the idea of the next chapter right now. I'm currently writing on my other story and will return for another chapter in this story when I'm finished with the current chapter I'm writing.

Thanks for the complement. I'm glad you are enjoying the story.

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