When I woke up, I was sure it was going to be just another day. Eat breakfast, hike to town, look for work. Sounds simple, right?
The day got a whole lot more complicated when I found myself in Equestria. I didn't know how I got there, but I'm damn sure to find out. While I'm there, I should figure out what to do with myself, otherwise it's going to be pretty boring.
In the meantime, I should avoid the cliche'd Human in Equestria stuff. But can I? That is the ultimate question.
This is my attempt to write an HiE that tries to avoid the cliches, but fails miserably. This is not to be taken seriously.
Changed the character tags once more. After this upcoming chapter, there will be a lot more characters, so I figure I'll keep the other tag as a shotgun approach.
C'mon, FimFiction, stop judging books by their covers. It's unoriginal, yes, but that doesn't make it awful.
So my question is .... Are you being serious or are you trying to have fun with this... And if you're trying to have fun with it I would suggest a comedy tag.... Unless its not ...
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Yeah. The idea is to try to avoid the typical HiE cliches, only to find out they're unavoidable.
4581652 well then... I think you should include in your short and long description that its not meant to be taken seriously... So the reader can understand that you're trying to write something that's entertaining not something that's an insta-down vote
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Thanks for the suggestion. It's been applied.
Fight the power, my friend. You may be writing a bad fic, but atleast you have it in you to admit that it may suck. Show this fecal stain of a site who is the boss.
Honestly not a bad start either. Very plain, but readable.
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Thanks.
I look forward to seeing where this goes. A far better start than some others I've read.
...Love this idea of how they bind him, might have to use that idea myself!!
Such a creative twist with the epilepsy!! Didn't see that one coming, great add in!
[quoteMy primary suspect was Discord. I'll have to talk to him later.]Haha, way to scapegoat him right away. I woulda thought the same thing too!
This is great so far, I like it. But you know what you should do?
Add in a evil character while he is still outta sorts! Mwuhahahahaha!
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(Just a little Mwuahaha inspiration there for ya.)
Bad day for the ponies. Hope he's not too mad when they spar.
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I'll have that covered in chapter three.
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How about three?
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thank you for the help. and everything for me. i'm happy you became my pre-reader. like really man thank you.
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No problem.
I just want to make sure you know this. but i'm going to change my title name and my important characters. becuase my stuff is cliche. and my story is self-insert it's just the fact that I am 16 years old in real life. and i barely ever go outside or do anything.
But yeah i'm changing my story a bit. but my chapter i worked on is going to change too. like for one i'm going to put my parents in there for more devolopment towards my character.
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Hey man! it's super 57s again! and well I revised my story and it looks way better from the last one you read so here new story and everything :)
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/226230/a-human-named-chris-who-teleports-into-equestria-and-does-whatever-he-wants
Hey man! It's Super57s again! And well I got two Chapters done and I would like it if you read them!
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/226230/a-human-named-chris-who-teleports-into-equestria-and-does-whatever-he-wants
Seriously! read it! It's way better than what you read last time. No lie you'll love it :D
liked, bookmarked. gg no re
This is the most generic thing I ever read.
It's so funny XD
Numerous technical errors, but it's the misanthropy, and special snowflake syndrome that really ruins this story for me.
Now you've done it, never ever ask that.
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D'oh!
will there be a sequel?
Hum-m-m... I wonder... Has someone done a nudist in Equestria? Because that'd be
!..
Also: "that'd been ingrained..." Do be consistent with the grammatical tense.