• Member Since 16th Feb, 2012
  • offline last seen Apr 19th, 2016

Slick Dash


A large surge of magical power begins to build over Equestria, eventually culminating into a flash of light that crashes to the gorund outside Ponnyville, the mane six are in for so many surprises in this adventure! as they discover that if you change one little detail about a world, and everything else changes too!
(An experimental idea that came to me in a dream)

Chapters (30)
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Comments ( 74 )

this needs words.

Not very good... :trixieshiftright: The first chapter is nothing but talk, and it's no too clear about who is talking. As for the second chapter; a LOT of grammar problems, and it's a bit rushed. :pinkiesad2:

But I'll let ya'll do it since it's an experimental idea. :ajsmug:

vague description is a problem. nothing happens in the second chapter.
the cold opening with only dialogue was poorly executed.

i've read three bodies of text, and i still have no idea what this story is or will be about.
the description, first chapter and second chapter don't seem connected in any way.

I'm curious as to what the idea was you got in the dream, but you've yet to reveal it, or sufficiently build suspense around it.

428083 ok, thnx for the feedback. Well first chapter was designed to create sone intregue, by only using dialogue i wanted to create a sense of confusion.
428193 well i hope you keep an eye out for the next chapter at around 9:00 PM so you can begin to feel the suspense hopefully as the story builds.
Well took a risk, looks like so far it hasn't quite payed off :derpytongue2:

so no more tom huh? completley different storyline? :P

429981 unfortunately ;) keep an eye out for a little reference in one of the chapters though ;)
Also i have summit ready for Tom fans when i hit 40 follows :pinkiehappy:

I liked this chapter more than the first two! Good work! Keep it Up.

434672 I'm glad, I think it's just cos i needed to set up the story. next chapter my fave so far :rainbowwild:

Promise* me. That's the only thing that bugged me about this chapter. Can't wait for the next one!

Also is the relationship between Spike and Rarity similar to the one they had in your "Tom Saga"?

436627 thnk you.
& maaaayyyyyybe :rainbowkiss:

436765 Just the way you wrote their interactions made it feel extremely similar to their relationship in the Tom Series. This. Is. Not. A. Bad. Thing.

WHAT DID THEY DO TO TWILIGHT? :twilightangry2:

457029 which Twilight? Other world twi or real world twi?

470770 yes you are :pinkiehappy: love your avatar image btw!
To everyone else, seeing as fimfictions been down all day, i havent posted a chapter today. Instead of messing up my whole chapter posting system i'll just skip todays one:pinkiesmile: hope you are all enjoying it so far! :rainbowwild:

you misspelled "surge" in your description. :derpytongue2:

479854 Aaaawwwww crap! :fluttershbad: thnx for heads up, you liking the story besides that then? (also, now fixed)

480030 i'll tell you once i get to reading it, i have a few other things on my list first

480036 coolio! :pinkiehappy: looking forward to it! :derpytongue2:

with discords baby?

This is getting good!

Wow! Pink is pregnant with Discord's kid? :pinkiegasp: Can't wait to see what comes of that! :pinkiehappy:

Love the story!! :yay:

480394 eeyup:eeyup:
481254 glad you're enjoying it! :pinkiesmile:

484812You really love being first dont you?! :rainbowlaugh:

I'm liking Pink more and more each chapter. :pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy:

Hmm... this seems good.... make it a purpose when you bring it up again, if you want dashie to like flying, make it so she gets a little less shy when discovering her passion for flying :unsuresweetie:

489145:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: SPOILER! SPOILER! Maybe she might find something she likes, and her shyness may fade more, but maybe its not flying! :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: :raritywink:

489164 Well id hope so... its like moving away from China To Canada.... well Replace death stuff with working in factories for a day straight or joining the army and you have China... :applejackunsure:

Spike isn't going to like the intrusion...:applejackunsure:

btw. im going to admit that this is the darkest story i have read. (no i havent read cupcakes) this is one of those stories that your to shocked to stop reading. I know im going to have nightmares but i want to see that evil celestia bitch PAY!:flutterrage:

oh, spike is being such a dick, even bigger during the episode with Owlicious

Spotted a few spelling mistakes here and there. "begun to grind at the site of the royal guard" should be "sight of the royal guard", about three quarters through you spelt "Applejack" as "Applejacl" and I think "beginning" in the title is spelt wrong, it has 3 n's.

On a brighter note I am quite enjoying this keep it up

Fuck you Shining Armour.

Sweet Celestia!! It's Celestia!!!!


Nice chapter, im guessing the other discord awoke in this dimension as well from all the disharmony. Sounds like this will be interesting.

540250. Either it's Discord and Shining Armor looking at the canon Discord OR Discord and Shining Armor looking at the Empress' Shining Armor… :rainbowderp::ajsmug:

Love the story! :pinkiehappy:

apologies for the lateness, been working hard at this to make it the best it can be, always wanted to do a big battle sequence, so whant to milk it for all it's worth. hope you're all enjoying it still! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowwild:

welp looks like Evil Armour wasn't so evil after all.

:applejackconfused: this is confusin'

also, *clears throat* Y U NO HAVE PROLOUGE

578036 first three chapters are the prologue pretty much. This story is a complete experiment, nothing like any of my others (in length nor concept) and though i like writting this story, the rest of my stories will back to my old style :)
Want me try and clear up whats confusin yah? :) whats up?

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