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Mr Absorption


To be honest I just write these stories as justification for their goofy titles.

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Out of the blue comment... What's with all of these self insert fics... Geez you writers are getting really brave huh...

4594761 well to be honest its not hard to spot these kind of fics and you clicked it PLUS! its porn the laws do not apply here

I love you Bathspounge, plz notice me Spounge-senpai~!

There's an unf in there somewhere, I just need to find it.

Twilight undid the tie of her robe and slid it off, revealing her sizable tits, as well as her massive cock.

If it starts like this it must be worth a read. And as it showed it certainly was interesting and sexy, although a bit more details and elaborateness could not have hurt.

You scare me, sir, and that's usually my job! WELL! off to clop land!

Uh, it's "buried", not "berried". Unless his dick turned into a strawberry, which would be interesting.

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With the way this story's going, I actually fully expect that.

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How so?
I'm really looking for feedback here, figure out what's working and what isn't, so don't hold back.

5074932 I don't know.
There was just something about it that was... off.

“And that’s the entire story of how I learned how to make a psychic connection between myself and the bathing implement I’m named after,” Bathspounge says as we come back to him, apparently finishing a story that would provide some much needed exposition.

I can't pin down why I love this fanfic. Maybe because, from the way it's written, it's clear the author is getting off to it. So, moments like the medical puns and "Sponsor!" (Chapter 3) and the wolf/hunter analogy (Chapter 2) paint an amiable but extremely warped portrait of this author.
But some parts of Chapter 4, e.g. the joke above, are written with a different voice, one clearly aiming for intentional comedy. Somehow this isn't as fun.

...oooor maybe I should stop trying to deconstruct fetish clopfics at 1:30 AM. :rainbowhuh: All I know is, if you keep writing, I'll keep reading. Personally, I thought this chapter was a 10/10 to the others' 11/10. Also I totally managed to clop to it.

I've given up on this story. There is no hope for it now.

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Little agitated much? I didn't say I don't enjoy the story; believe me, I do. However, I can no longer masturbate to something as silly and as absurd as this story. I enjoy the fact that it's so idiotically silly, being blatant references or overused nomenclature, but I cannot actively jerk myself to something that's more comedic and satirical than arousing and maturely satisfying.

From your outburst, I can only assume you're younger than 18, have had numerous mixed opinions about your work (not just this story in particular) in the past, and have yet matured enough to understand that the English language is so versatile I can make cuddling a kitten sound absolutely malicious. Here, I'll even attempt to right now.

I wrapped my arms around that kitten like I had picked up the corpse of my mother. I held the little kitten close to me, making it wheeze as I forced it's companionship. The kitten had no room to question, nor to refuse, for I was the larger mammal, and I would be the kitten's master. I would be it's overseer. I would watch it grow, watch it learn, and watch it die.

I literally just wrote a small paragraph about how I would adopt a kitten and keep it for the rest of my life. My comment previously posted was purely announcing that I had given up expecting an actual, structured plot and story from this particular piece and I would cease to from here on afterward. I had hoped for some sort of beautifully-constructed plot, and I never received it; instead receiving a blatant joke-fest, which is equally entertaining given the proper environment.

Nevertheless, I find your story quite laughable, and I'm sorry that angers you, assuming that nothing was misunderstood with my previous comment. I believe you had some fun writing this, and probably laughed for hours as I do for this story, so the fact that you're angry intrigues me, considering apparently you don't have enough faith for your story to be a big joke to anyone but yourself.

If the insertions/edits are of any indication, your editor had a rather annoyed time editing this, since you intentionally left errors; I don't blame him, assuming he wasn't a comedic editor. From my evaluation, you don't have any hope for your story being anything but a joke to yourself and only yourself. To you, it is wrong that others find your story enjoyably hysterical. My only question is; why write a story and make it public if you're just going to find entertainment in it yourself?

Of course, almost this entire evaluation is assuming you understood my previous comment and wish to keep your action previously allotted.

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I was referencing Tara Glisbie's 'My Immortal' and am actually in no way angry at you, merely in character. I appreciate all the reviews and comments I receive, so thank you for explaining yourself, I enjoyed the critique as it confirmed that the change in style I had been going for in the story was noticeable.

This is meant to be a joke, and I'm glad you find it funny, that means it'd good. Although, I agree that it isn't sexy enough, I'll try to fix that in future chapters.

If you have any advice to give me in future, please don't hold back, I'm actually a fan of some of your work and would very much appreciate your help with this, my first fic.

Oh! Also, what other works of mine have you read and had mixed opinions on?

Sincerely, Bathspounge

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Oh yeah! That's a good idea, thank you for reminding me. I'm glad to see that I've got some fans.

Happy Skeleton-War Memorial Day.

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Are you saying I should marry my self insert OC into royalty in order to resolve my sexual frustration?

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I will now proceed to wait the several hours it takes you to sleep so that I can head your analysis of the change in my Writting.

5213893 Yes, okay, yes.
It was more detailed in the actual happenings within the chapter, more depth to what was happening and just a touch of character building.

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Bathspounge: you have other works? I can't find anything in your profile, is there a link somewhere?

Also, in this chapter, did the ponies all turn anthro? I've been imagining them as sexy sexy ponies the whole time, so hearing about Flutterhy suddenly having hands and Rainbow taking off her shorts was very jarring. Crossing my fingers and hoping for equines and hooves in Chapter 6. (Of course, I can't control your fetishes.)

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I have a few greentexts I've been meaning to upload to my pastebin. And yes, chapter 5 us inexplicably Anthro.

noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo.............. you better make up for this tease! .....maybe some Big Mac smex could make up for it......

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Why, whatever do you mean? There was sex in this chapter.

2 FLAGS DOWN ON CHAPTER
NO Sexual contact, by chapter title character
20 yard penalty, redo last chapter
Second flag
Roughing the Reader,
Ejection from Favorites

5288406 :ajbemused: I Don't like using the term Trolling. But the concept is the same.

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I will now offer my rebutle. Firstly, there are no character names in the chapter title. Secondly, I fail to see how this chapter is about Bathspounge funking Luna in his dreams. Thirdly, I'm assuming you we're expecting some Applejack action; so I apologize thay I kept her in character.

5230939 Your pastebin is private D:

Anyway, I'm totally with rikusorasephiroth here. I enjoyed Chapter 6 much more than 4, 5, or 7. It's light on the memes, and heavy on the detailed description and character-driven humor. Bathspounge's dialogue with himself is funny and weirdly touching. A lot of comedy comes from the juxtaposition between philosophizing and fetish clop. I think. I'm not an English major.

Comment posted by Mr Absorption deleted Jan 22nd, 2015

I don't know if I want to keep reading this. The clop was good but the editor sort of ruins it.

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