In retrospect...
The Three Sisters: Like Fudge
By Wanderer D
Chapter 3: In retrospect...
It was a very bewildered, silent and contemplative Silver Spoon that walked back home through the busy streets of Ponyville. It was a completely different situation than earlier, when the Crusader’s confession about the identity of the ‘Diamond Tiara’ with them had thrown her into a fit of hysterical scrambling for the nearest guard.
Finally she stopped for a moment, staring at nothing before deciding to search for a bench and sit down. She observed the ponies passing her by and thought back on the discussion she’d had earlier with the crusaders.
o.0.o FLASHBACK o.0.o
“This is really difficult to explain, but… since you sorta confessed that you really didn’t mean us any harm…” Sweetie Belle said, looking a bit uncomfortable.
Silver Spoon blinked in confusion, looking from her to Diamond Tiara, who looked at the floor uncharacteristically guiltily and back to Sweetie. “W-what do you mean?”
“First of all, Ah have to ask…” Apple Bloom spoke up just when it seemed Sweetie Belle had mustered the strength to speak again. “Just how long have y’all wanted to be our friend?”
“W-well.” Silver Spoon looked uneasily at Diamond Tiara, relaxing slightly when the latter simply tilted her head in confusion. “It was ever since we started school together,” she confessed.
“All that time!?” Scootaloo gasped, then frowned. “But why didn’t you talk to us? All you did was side with Diamond Tiara!”
Silver Spoon cringed. “I’m sorry! I wanted to, but when I tried to talk to you, you almost ran me over with your scooter! A-and you crushed my lunch! And then you told me not to get in the way… so when Diamond Tiara stepped in and picked on you immediately after I-I was angry!”
‘Diamond Tiara’, Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom turned to look at Scootaloo—who had a look of horror in her face—in shock.
“You did what?!” Sweetie Belle asked. “Scootaloo!”
“I-I don’t remember! My first day I was trying to impress the other pegasi and then I—” She cut herself short and stared at Silver Spoon. “I thought you jumped in to mess my show,” she finished in a much lower voice, ears leaning back against her head. “And then Diamond Tiara started calling me names and you joined her.”
The two fillies looked at each other in horror before Scootaloo frowned and looked away. After a moment, Silver Spoon gulped. “I’m sor—”
“No.” Scootaloo looked back at Silver Spoon. “I should have watched where I was going and I shouldn’t have just assumed you were doing it on purpose.”
Silver Spoon felt tears well up in her eyes. “All this time… I wanted to know why you did that… every time after that you were a nice filly but I thought you had hated me… when we bullied you I hated it.” She looked away from the Crusaders. “I wanted to apologize for every time we made you feel bad, and for every time any of you cried.”
“I don’t cry,” Scootaloo muttered, wiping away at her eyes.
“It became just safe… the more I did it, the more I wanted to apologize but I knew there was nothing I could say except ‘sorry’ and somehow that didn’t seem to cut it.” She chuckled. “It’s sad, but…” her face lit up and she looked at the Crusaders. “At least now Diamond Tiara managed to become your friend, right? So we can begin anew!”
She paused then looked at Diamond Tiara. “Say… how did you manage to convince them to be our friends?”
All the other ponies suddenly seemed uncomfortable.
“Uh… you see,” Sweetie began. “That’s where it gets complicated. She didn’t.”
Silver Spoon’s eyes widened and she looked at Diamond Tiara in horror. “W-was this a test of fidelity?! Tiara please, don’t punish me!”
“Whoa, whoa, whoa!” Apple Bloom jumped over to stand by Silver Spoon, putting a calming hoof on her shoulder. “There’s no punishin’ goin’ to happen here, alright?”
“B-but!”
“That’s not Diamond Tiara,” Sweetie finally said. “It’s our friend, Princess Thysa.”
Silver Spoon looked at the others in confusion. “But… there’s no pony Princess named ‘Thysa’. And why would she look exactly like Diamond Tiara?”
“Well…” ‘Diamond Tiara’ said after a moment. “That’s because I’m not a pony.”
Silver Spoon blinked. “Say what?”
“I’m…” the pony was enveloped in flames and suddenly, a chitin-armored pony-like creature stood before her. “I’m a changeling princess! Nice to meet you!”
o.0.o END FLASHBACK o.0.o
Silver Spoon sighed. The fight had been brief and after she had been pinned to the ground and assured she wouldn’t be eaten alive (eww), it had taken a moment for her to realize just exactly what this meant.
She couldn’t go back to who she was before.
And she had effectively lost her only current friend because she had taken a practical joke at face value.
Silver Spoon buried her face in her hooves. “Stupid.”
Arachne, aka Dark Mocha, the unicorn, stared at Bon Bon in a silence that lasted almost three heart-beats.
Bon Bon counted.
“What do you mean I can’t eat all the chocolate?!”
“It means exactly what it sounds like,” Bon Bon said slowly. “As in, you can’t eat the chocolate. It’s not exactly advanced quantum-magika theory.”
“Knave! How dare you speak to a Queen like that!”
Bon Bon rolled her eyes, while behind her, Lyra giggled at the bewildered expressions of their patrons.
“Pinkie Pie taught you well,” Bon Bon said after a moment. “But only I can truly finish your training as a chocolatier!” She bumped her forehead against Arachne’s. “And that means you don’t get to eat the chocolate!”
“But it’s so good!”
“I know,” Bon Bon said, stepping back and nodding as ‘Dark Mocha’ huffed and started mixing the ingredients again with ease. “But this is something that you have to learn: you get to eat chocolate, when you have money to buy it.”
“But Queens don’t have to do this kind of thing! We learn stuff and we get free stuff!”
“Welcome to the real world.” Bon Bon grinned.
Behind Lyra a pony looked at the scene in confusion. “So… what’s she the queen of?” he finally asked Lyra.
The unicorn smiled, casting a snide look at the princess. “The Queen of whinning! What else?”
The pony looked on as Dark Mocha whined at Bon Bon while slowly dumping white chocolate into the mix. “I see. Well, she does make really good fudge brownies!”
“I’m telling on you! I’m gonna tell my mom!”
Lyra grinned.
“She already knows!” Bon Bon replied. “Now, add more vanilla extract!”
“Yep,” Lyra nodded. “That, she does.”
o.0.o End Chapter 3 o.0.o
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One of them is a changeling.
4624071
One of these things is not like the other!
I think it' whining not whinning.
Otherwise, this chapter makes me feel like Dark Mocka. Get it Mock-a? Cause sheepshifting?
Also nice possible allusion to Mendacity, or at least LyraBon fanon.
4624071
Yeah. The whiny one. That's sort of the point.
4624108
Sheepshifting. It's like shape shifting, but turning into a sheep.
I really hope things get better for Silver Spoon... but maybe DT should run up to her exclaiming, "You got your cutie mark back, now let's go teach those Blank Flanks a lesson!" and Silver Spoon can ask why Diamond hates the Crusaders. If it's a super petty reason then Silver Spoon should dump her and run off crying to be found by the Crusaders and Thysa. I do find her reason for initially bullying Scootaloo to be a decent one, if it was just "Because you're flightless or a blank flank" I would have been angry.
Poor Silver Spoon. Still, I think this is all going to work out for her. Not necessarily in the way she wants or expects, but I think this will be a net gain for her.
Also, candy is serious business.
Looking forward to more.
4624108
Sheepshifting? Wow, I've never managed what ewe apparently can, but I suppose that's not a baa~aad thing.
Nice conclusion for this chapter although it really snuck up on me!
4624270
People are sheep. You are what you eat. If you're a changeling...
4624270 My.... Sides.... Hurt... Oh sweet Chrysalis... My sides....
Good followup on Silver Spoon.
Thumbs up!
4624571 Silver Spoon's lament makes no sense for multiple reasons, but that's not to say that it's out of character for a distressed filly.
4624678
Not quite. This is her admitting to herself that she can't be friends with both Diamond Tiara and anypony else on the planet. If she wants more friends, like ever, she has to let go of the only one she currently has.
At least 4 stories about changelings that I've read are obsessed with chocolate...
Is there something I'm missing here?
4624732
Isn't everyone obsessed with Chocolate?
Bonbon is apparently the queen of taking noponys shit.
4624732
Watch the Depp remake of "Charley and the Chocolate Factory". Apparently chocolate sets off the same chemical reactions in the brain as "being in love" does. (Or maybe the movie was taking the mickey.) Of course Changelings are addicted to the stuff!
i have a question what are sweetie bells parents reaction?
Huzzah for Silver! Hope she's able to figure something out. Growing up is HARD...
4624678
Precisely as Starcar said: by clearing the air with the crusaders and revealing that she doesn't like being a bully, she lost both her high ground and momentum against the crusaders. She now needs to choose who will she betray tomorrow. Moral lose-lose situations are hard to stomach by most adults, let alone a grade schooler.
4624731 Yes, but consider these two lines from the story:
She couldn’t go back to who she was before.
And she had effectively lost her only current friend because she had taken a practical joke at face value.
IF she can't go back to who she was before, then sure, she's probably lost Diamond Tiara. However, it's for that reason instead of "taking a practical joke at face value". After all, she could hypothetically have done that, but then decided to go back to DT and deny everything.
And then there's the fact that she's more than halfway to having more friends already.
4625198 Yes, as I said, her distress is very understandable, even if her specific lament doesn't logically hold together.
Bon Bon is really liking her role bossing a queen around.
4624141 Lyra or BonBon is a changeling is what I mean.
4624174 Diamond Tiara: Even if they weren't Blank Flanks I'd have found another reason to bully them because I like being mean, rotten and nasty.
Seriously as mean as she can act Diamond is a child and I refuse to believe that any child is inheritably bad, she probably does this because she is insecure with herself.
C'mon, Silver Spoon, the CMC will be your friend. Abandon Diamond Tiara andlet that finally sink into her head that acting like a malignant [female dog] will only leave her alone and unloved. Then maybe she will finally want to change and you can be friends with her again.
Or just keep being her personal [female dog] at her beck and call for the rest of your life.
4624308
Then you're not a changeling anymore, you're a sheepling!
hmm...
Sheeplings are small, floofy, and adorable; maybe this isn't such a bad direction for the changelings to go.
4626977 That's the best solution I can see, Silver Spoon definitely wants to change, so I hope it happens. But I can't see Diamond Tiara stop being a bully so easily.
I love Bon Bon and Arachne's interactions when it comes to crafting good chocolate. Good times, good times.
4624141
--The Joke->
Your Head
4626564
I'm pretty sure bonbon is a changeling in general if you read one of the last chapters of "The Three Sisters: Extended Family" then it says that she's a changling )I think
Anyway i also think that besides that Lyra is actually either the queen or a drone in disguise because of the lines:
(“I’m telling on you! I’m gonna tell my mom!”
Lyra grinned.
“She already knows!” Bon Bon replied. “Now, add more vanilla extract!”
“Yep,” Lyra nodded. “That, she does.”)
Mostly because of Lyra's response
4626564 we already know it's bon bon from the last story
4624793
4627565 Flufflepuff?
Pink Fluffy Unicorns Dancing on Rainbows...
That entire paragraph needs to be indented.
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This was a nice chapter. Felt shorter than it really was, but good nonetheless.
4641812 The very first sentence is never indented.
4641826
Ah! Cool.
I only wish fanon Silver wasn't in this story so I can actually enjoy the rest of the setups you have here with the others.
What is the fascination and hatred people have towards writing a more show believable Silver Spoon and not pandering to the mindless hopefuls who twist every good she does get into something Tiara has to be at fault for? DT never cared about 'blank flanks' and has worked WITH and even HELPED the CMC in the past and last season. In her own way. Yet, all she gets is shit, I blame the new horrible shit writer of Flight to the Scootaloo Lives in a House episode, but fuck... you and other writers in your position just keep Silver Spoon as stagnant as ever with these instant breakup stories.
Yeah, no secret you dislike DT with a flaming passion, we've had this talk before, but shit man. Even *I* never thought you'd write a straight up recycle fic. I literally slammed my head against my wall a few times, much to the annoyance of the people I live with, seeing YOU write these "Since the first time I laid eyes on you!" Silver troupes.
Story is still no where really started aside from Silver losing her 'friend', nice twist with it being DT breaking things off to further mary sue the puke out of her.
I feel sick. I hope this gets good somewhere. I could always just ignore the trashy recycle story with Silver, but fucking gag me man. Have you READ what you typed? At least Scoot had a nice callback scene from One Bad Apple with how she throws her fits but with crying this time. Or maybe it was just because she's like RD? Who knows. But DUDE!
What. The. HAY!
I used to think you had standards.
Sure, that ending in your last story in your last fic cheated us of Scootaloo's death despit Scootaloo being the one to likely inhale the most smoke and avoiding what should of been a true tragedy that taught Silver a cruel lesson she'd have to live with the rest of her life. But THAT story was still pretty nice despite whatever actual feelings and such towards the character you had. It was good.
THIS... I just don't see how it's going to get any good with Silver in this story. But, whatever, you clearly have a bandwagon to push so have at it.
Sigh. It's still just starter crap, but fuck. Sprinkle some actual character into your disliked characters at least! She at least wanted to find Silver a cure, implied, but it seems DT in this story bought that joke so bad she just at whatever point in vagueness just broke things off with Silver so Silver wouldn't be the one to be accused of being so shallow as to dump a long time friend for the immediate prospect of being new the CMC.
P.S. I bet you were probably expecting something like this.
But seriously. Don't get lazy and skip so many corners.
P.P.S. Yeah, my heads perfectly fine. I wore my sparring helm!
What? Safety first! And it helps relieve stress.
P.P.P.S. You should just have written a separate story for Silver Spoon. Just a thought.
P.P.P.P.S. Warning: The words contained in this post may cause a severe case of "Butt Hurt" to all none Wanderer D readers. Avoid (mind own business?) at all cost.
P.P.P.P.P.S. Warnings normally go on the top, huh? Ooops!
P.P.P.P.P.P.S. No ratings were given to this fledgling story as it's not ripe enough for consumption much less voting.
4644285 Hey, I don't care if people are doing it or not. I'm not jumping into a bandwagon. I'm doing my own thing, for my own reasons, and if you really hate the 'SP wasn't so bad' that's cool, but it doesn't mean I'm doing it mindlessly.
Also, I never said I hated DT.
4645239 I like Silver Spoon. I like Diamond Tiara. I like the chemistry one gets when all of them interact, especially when you throw in more ponies into the mix. I just feel Silver gets a bad rap in the fandom. Yes, more so than Diamond Tiara, only Silver has it differently to say the least.
I think you can agree some scenes in there do come off as a bit rushed. Poor girl gets mauled by Henry the Bear over there and suddenly she's got herself a date.
That scene was adorable. While I always encourage people to write for the SCENE and not a WORD COUNT, I'd try to pace it a bit more like you did with your smaller chapters in the last one. Though, you're probably busy doing real life stuff and it's cutting into your writing time, but I'd rather wait longer per chapter if it means less watered down stuff.
The prank idea was great. The "Fidelity" line was awesome. But the rest just played out very copypaste. Not the sort of thing someone who wrote TER would write, even if he thinks the four alicorns of seaons was the worst thing ever in his story. I liked it. But I digress. I know it's too early to judge, but damnit man. If you only read half as many Silver Spoon fics as I have, you'd be bashing your head too just to get the nausea out of your system, too.
Can Silver be timid? Sure. Can she have had a want and need to be a part of the CMC since she first laid eyes on them? Sure. But hell if I'm not gonna call that one-liner to hurry things on so Silver can be insta buddies with the CMC not feel like the most lamest thing ever. When I see a Wanderer D story, I associate that with something that'll make me laugh, or d'aww or downright feel something for a character within some emotional spectrum of feels.
What I read here, doesn't even come close to the opening chapter of your last story. Or Soup. There is nothing to grasp on to. It's like everything is in fast forward.
I might come off as 'hating' the "Silver Spoon wasn't all bad" troupe, but that's the thing. I DON'T think she's bad. She teases, sure, but have she or Diamond ever physically stopped the CMC from doing what they wanna do? Flight to the Scootaloo's House may have taken the "let's trick her into thinking she has to learn to fly" bit showed them at their more extreme, but that was also a new writer whose never written for the show before over the usual writers for DT and SS.
Moving On: A Silver Spoon Story is one of my favorites, I even got it featured on EQD when it was still in its rough in need of editing phases by explaining that and telling them what it's like and how it flowed, etc, one of my favorite Silver Spoon stories and still holds well today. Serenade of Silver Belles is like right up there, it still keeps the characters feeling like themselves and doesn't just ignore Diamond Tiara or just makes her out to be a one-dimensional brat. Hell, much was left open for a sequel even. I *have* those "Silver wasn't all bad" stories in my favorites.
What irks me is how the copycats/fanon majority of Silver Spoon 'fans' write her character, while some like Estee, Yukito, Mudpony, Mattricole, and others actually BUILD on Silver Spoon's potential, others are quick to ignore and shove in speeches of "This is why you can't hate me or beat on me despite having done exactly what Diamond Tiara did" stories.
Granted one shouldn't read that story, but a great example is in Issues' story with Silver and Scoots. Talk about a half-time show! And Scootaloo forgives and Silver even gets DT to admit all faults. Seriously. How is that kind of writing remotely engaging or interesting? Shit, most writers couldn't even come close to stuff like Feud, that robocop charity fic by one of my fav longest writing comedy authors Blueshift, or The Bestest Kind, and a few others. Seriously would love to see someone give Silver Spoon character like those guys' stories.
As DiamondBloom heavy and comedy focused as Mattricole can get, he still gives more love to Silver Spoon than most 'fans' I see write her at times. My opinion of course, no offense to Silver writers out there.
Anyhow, I'm going way over what I wanted to say like after the second paragraph. Point is, I'm a stick this one out, because this series so far has been pretty enjoyable. I wouldn't want the 'third time's a bust' to happen here. You have a good streak going. Just take your time. I honestly can't help but feel you're rushing these chapters a bit too much.
I'm not gonna judge yet, already mentioned there's nothing to judge yet since it's all just setup stuff. So I'm a do what I did with TER. Wait for more chapters.
More please! This is so funnyit to read it is almost hilarious.
4624308
then you're a fruit bat?
somehow i like it, but i thought there would happen more between the CMC and Silverspoon right now.
Not what i thought, but i like the thing with Arachne, probably because she is my favourite and is made for being well treat like that, i think the most ponys would think of her as a child in some way. I asume they don´t know her as a Changeling yet? Dark Mocha is her Pony form yes?
4662330 I believe that Bon Bon at the least already knows.
5003359 Well yeah, Bon Bon is a changeling too.
As interesting as all the other story threads are, I just wanna see what Silver Spoon does next.
I have achieved a higher level of DESUVANA! JOIN ME! IN THE DESU!
4624083
One of these kids is not like the other!
One of these kids is dead!