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You've found yourself in Equestria. Rather than being excited beyond belief or afraid that you won't ever return home, however, your entire perspective of reality is shattered as you learn the truth about not just your life, but everything you ever knew and loved/hated.
Written for Obselescence's Most Dangerous Game contest.
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Implying I don't know how multiverse works
Implying I don't gonna imply I just take the place of flesh puppet
Implying I just don't gonna rush past'em, screaming "I'm in Hell and it full of pastel ponies!"
I want to cum inside Rainbow Dash.
*Blinks* That was. . .interesting. Honestly not your best work, but it was still an interesting read.
Dang.. An interesting idea for a story. Something that could be taken into an entire 100,000 word+ one
! Though this idea probably has been used before..
4571980
It has. There's one where Twilight and the gang write a few books about 'Us' and it gets made in to a TV show. can't recall the name for the life of me.
4572280 Also written by yours truly.
Holy hell that was... that was a bit meta.
A good story, nonetheless.
Heavy...
There are a few fatal flaws in this premise. What widespread entertainment value is there in watching me sit around doing absolutely nothing of import?
4572838 What widespread entertainment value is there in watching ponies buck trees, sip tea, or read books?
4572838
says the background human.
4572838 Hence the editing part. Those ponies use the bathroom, we know that much. We just don't watch them use it. We know that it would take quite awhile for rarity to make some of those dresses. Yet, we don't see the process of everyone of them being made. Editing is movie magic for, get to the damn action and ignore logic.
4572324
well that makes it even sillier.
I have one comment to add.
The tragic thruth by 5FDP
4574079 This isn't canon with the other stories.
That was prety damn awesome. Interesting to see an actual human conforming with being a memetic entity given physical form.
Though I feel it's screaming for a more in-depth continuation.
It's a fascinating concept, but the execution leaves something to be desired. The protagonist's emotions never seem to come back online after ze gets knocked out; ze just sits there as hir very existence as an independent, sapient being is quietly discarded. Then, rather than challenge Twilight, ze just accepts this complete existential obviation and asks to go on a tour of Equestria. Hir emotions could still be overwhelmed by the magnitude of the revelation, but some kind of token resistance would be nice.
I suppose the problem is that the puppet seems to be suffering from what I'm going to call "informed insanity." Ze's been driven mad, but we only know that because Twilight explains it. Further, the puppet's psyche breaks in just the right way so as not to impede the story. Now, I understand how hard it would be to write from a truly insane perspective, but the docile, lucid tone here doesn't say "crazy" to me. It would say "broken," but there's still enthusiasm over being in Equestria. It would say "flawed awakening," but the horror at the beginning was genuine. and it drowned out the wonder of seeing Lyra and Iron Will.
In all, the character's actions just don't seem to add up. That may, in fact, be the point, but if so, you didn't really get that point across. This was an enjoyable read, but one that ultimately left me unsatisfied. Still, thank you for a fascinating premise. Best of luck in the contest.
(Oh, and you have a few instances of question marks where questions aren't actually being asked.)
4576765
You're more than welcome to write this if you so wish.
I'd write it myself, but between four or five other fics, job-searching, and keeping up-to-date on the new Smash Bros I simply have no time to do so.
This is what I'm talking about, all that blubbering, snot inducing crying and weak willed SHIT! It needs to stop and these writers need to grow a pair between the legs man.
I think it's a refreshing take on the HiE concept, but the follow-through isn't quite right. It feels like an idea being written, instead of a story.
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This sums it up perfectly. I feel like there's something lacking, the X factor, you know?
Still, an okay one shot.