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Gray Compass


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For those who live forever, 'end' is a unimaginable concept.

But when Celestia decides that the time has come to leave this world, her whole life seemed to have been in vain.

If you had one opportunity, would you change your past? Or your present?


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Comments ( 16 )

Wow, an impressive little story. The dreams of immortals is always interesting to explore.

This story needs just one thing: you need to delete that "of" after regret in the short description.

4941578 Thanks, I changed that! :pinkiesmile:

4940781 I'm glad you enjoyed it! :eeyup:

Celestia lain on the floor of a brightly lit room,

Laid.

but those pleasurable ones you feel when listening to a good song,

I'm listening to I'd Do Anything For Love Right Now. :twilightsmile:

as she remembered of the times when her

Remembered all, or Thought of.

but again, time doesn't really mattered anymore

Matter.

Such an ironical little universe...

Nitpicky, but ironical isn't really used much any more.

Nice work. :twilightsmile:

4942297 Thanks! :twilightsmile: I'll make sure to edit it!

4942783

You're welcome. :twilightsmile:

Wow, really touching! Immortality is always a good theme to bring some Sad things.

. An ozone scent filled the air,

That doesnt make too much sense to me the Ozon is way too high above the breathing atmposphere to be smelled.

4944079 Yes, ozone is high in the atmosphere, but certain conditions such as charged storm clouds, or electricity can produce enough ozone to be smelled :eeyup:

Oh how truly horrifying this hate is, I think you've let some know that immortality is not all it's cracked up to be, well done!:pinkiehappy:

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