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Ponydora Prancypants

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Rarity and Applejack share a secret history: as fillies, they were the best of friends, until one terrible day soured their relationship for years to come. Forced back together by recent events and mutual friendships, they nevertheless cannot ignore the painful memories of all that went wrong. The past cannot be changed, but when Rarity and Applejack must work together to save their sisters from terrible danger, it just may be the case that a friendship once broken can be reforged in fire, and emerge from the flames stronger than ever before.

This story is a birthday gift from me and the illustrator, Harwick, to a very dear friend with a singular affection for Rarity and Applejack.

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Hmmm, more of your work, I cannot wait to dig into this mate!


Thank you, and I hope you enjoy it. This is a special little story, written for a special friend of mine. :ajsmug::raritywink:


I do not have time to read this right now. But I will favorite and say this. I read the first paragraph and i can tell that you are a very good writer. Great work.


Thank you.


Thank you very much for the kind words, and I hope you do find the time to read this later. :raritywink:

I love this!:pinkiehappy:
It shows emotion and passion! This kinda reminded me about my old friend. We just drifted apart because we never see eachother anymore. :fluttercry: BUT besides that, awesome story! I can clearly see the bond between Rarity and Applejack. :twilightsmile: I'm really glad that Sweetie and Apple Bloom made up! :twilightsmile::yay::rainbowkiss:

EDIT: Great picture! I could tell that it took sometime for Harwick to draw and color! P.S. the picture is my background image!


I'm thrilled that you enjoyed it! I think most of us have had good friendships that sadly dissolved over time. It's an unfortunate fact of life. There are also special friendships that we cling to for a lifetime - the ones we fight for. I'm also happy for Harwick that you like the picture! You'll be able to comment on it on his deviantART page tomorrow. :ajsmug::raritywink:

429088 Great! I clicked the link to his page and saw the picture 'One Last Parade'. I read a fanfic with that picture! I cried to that story. :fluttercry: I'm gonna try to be the first person to comment for that picture!:yay:


Yes, "One Last Parade" is an amazing artwork. It is almost too bittersweet for me to even look at it. It's a sign of great talent that an image can elicit a strong emotional response like that. He'll be happy to read your comment. Also, thanks again for the lovely Fluttershy image. :yay:

Simply amazing. Really makes me appreciate the friendships I have now. Thank you sir.


Thank YOU for reading and enjoying. I know I've let too many friendships slip away, and I'm glad this story has made you appreciate the ones you have now. :twilightsmile:

Wow... That was great, I managed only to get around half-way into the story, but wow!
It's people like you that make me what to write:raritystarry: But, I sadly bite at it... :fluttercry:


Practice is the key - I find that I constantly get better at some things, only to make different mistakes. But I keep writing, and I keep getting better. I hope you find time to trying your hand at writing something. I also hope you get to finish this story! Thanks for enjoying it so far as you managed to read! :raritywink:

Mm. Just finished reading this, and it was pretty much what I expected of you, quality wise. I'm still impressed at how few typos get through with you just doing self-proofreading, but I suppose that's a byproduct of your trade. A couple things:

"the unicorns aid at least" I believe that there are three things wrong with that tag, one of which is more subjective (LUS in the form of "the unicorn).

Everything is all dried up.” Rarity observed. --> Should be a comma

Overall, you use a lot more said-bookisms than I like. It bears repeating: the strength of your dialogue negates the need for the vast majority of spiced up attribution verbs that you use. They're not enough to break the fic, but they do cause a lot of road bumps.

I felt that the message of the story was a good one, one that so many of us can relate to. Childhood, high school, college--I see degrees of that kind of separation all the time and have plenty in my life that help me relate. Of course, AJ and Rarity are given the chances we often aren't. Heartwarming in a way, bittersweet in another. Although I felt that the redemption was driven home a bit too bluntly towards the end, it was still a solid piece of work overall.

I'm sure WD will be quite happy with the result of your labors.

Great story I hope to see it on the top bar tomorrow.


Thanks. This is a different kind of thing than I normally write, and I know what you mean about the tags. They almost become a kind of shorthand for the author, more than the reader, so that I can easily remember what I am trying to convey in a given scene. At any rate, I fixed the typos you noted. For what it's worth, I'm glad you enjoyed the story! It was fun to do something for my friend's birthday. :ajsmug:


Well, that would be a treat! Glad you liked it!

Damn, authors like you really are a... 'rarity'.
See what I did there? *Shot* :ajbemused:

That was absolutely brilliant! I especially liked the mini-anecdotes on Rarity and AJ as fillies ('colabitate'), I'm surprised not many others have tried writing about the days before they became the elements of harmony. Unless they have and I'm just out of the loop.

Anyway- you, Vargras and Kkat have been great inspirations and assets to the fandom for me, so thanks for another wonderful story and good luck with any future projects. :raritywink:

It took me 40 minutes to read this and they were well spent. I loved every bit of it. A beautiful piece of work and an inspiring story for old friends like Iron Clad and I.

Is this on EQD? because it might just deserve to be there. A beautiful and well written, well paced story that drives to keep going further and not dragging on details too much as well as giving enough details of environment, something I always had a hard time doing. The artwork is simply fantastic and well representative of the story.

It's definitely faved and thumb'd up


I'm so happy you enjoyed the story. Interestingly, Rarity and Applejack are the only ones who actually grew up in Ponyville, so they probably have a history together just like RD and Fluttershy did in Cloudsdale. I haven't seen other fiction telling the story of those two as fillies, though, you're right. :raritywink:


Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it, and I hope more folks get a chance to read it, whether through EQD or other sources. Since you liked the art, please feel free to leave a comment for the artist. :ajsmug:

oh im faving this for sure


Thanks JP! I was actually just referencing the actual play from "Cutie Mark Chronicles," wherein the fillies on stage are dressed as cake, a flower, fruit, hay, and filly Cheerilee is something with feathers. But now that you mention it I do know that Calvin & Hobbes reference quite well! :raritywink:

I was indeed thinking of the scene in "Sisterhooves Social" where Rarity panics and falls down the stairs when she awakens to the smell of smoke, and I also wanted to sort of bridge the gap between Season 1 where Applejack and Rarity barely get along, to Season 2 where they more like close friends. I don't think one awkward slumber party would be enough to change their relationship so significantly, so I came up with this! I really am glad you liked it - the person for whom this was written did too! :raritystarry:


Seriously, though filly Rarity is the most adorable thing ever! Mares in dress, the best damn play about 5 food groups ever... I don't think my heart can take the sugar you're dumping in.

You nailed oblivious children thinking adults have it all figured out. Fake it 'till ya make it!

Applejack and Rarity do have more in common than they think, though. At least in their adult lives, they both run their own businesses. They could share sob stories about, I don't know, taxes. And talk about eligible bachelors.

I haven't read this yet (It's on my list), but from the comments, I can tell already that this is a really good story.

What a wonderful story. Loved the flashbacks from when the first met, the reason for the fire, and the back story of Applejack's parents. This story really makes you appreciate your own friendships. Loved the ended was very happy to see how they reconciled. Great story! Thumbs up and fav!:raritywink:

This has Friendshipping on the same level as Pirates for a Day.


There's something about a duo of fillies trying to get their cutie marks and raising a ruckus that just makes me want to go, "Awwwwww!"

Yeah. LOTS of awwww's with this one! This was cute and refreshing to read. I think I've been spending too much time with the more depressing stories around here and needed this to remind me of the magic that this series has produced. Very well done!

It's also funny how forming groups to gain cutie marks seems to be hereditary. Runs in the family, I guess.

Now, to tackle that mammoth "The Flight of the Alicorn." I've heard good things about it and I need to start making a dent!

Friendshipping is best shipping.


Yes, they both probably hide somewhere together when the taxpony comes! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Forderz. You're a tough critic, and a very talented writer yourself. It means a lot to receive praise from you. :raritystarry:


Thank you! Yes, poor Applejack's parents ... I suppose all things must pass in their time, and Applejack really shines as the young matriarch of her family. She's a pretty amazing pony, when you think about it. I'm glad you enjoyed! :ajsmug:

That was an amazing story, I've always been intrigued by Applejack and Rarity's relationship since 'Fall Weather Friends' so it was nice to see an in-depth look into one of the less explored duos within the mane 6, every character was spot on, the dialogue was perfect, the pacing was excellent, and there is literally nothing I can find really wrong with this (I would make a terrible book editor), but this is definitely one of the best fics I've read, hope your friend enjoyed this and had a great birthday which I'm sure was made better thanks to the two great friends who made this and the artwork.


I haven't written a "slice-of-life" heartwarming story like this before - if you do read Alicorn you will see that my tastes run toward action, intrigue, adventure, and swashbuckling romance - but I was really thrilled to do this for my friend White Diamonds. I'm glad you enjoyed the d'awww moments! Thank you! :raritywink::ajsmug:


Harwick and I had a lot of fun on this project, and yes, White Diamonds liked it a lot! One of my favorite things in writing fanfiction is to imagine the show as a big puzzle with lots of missing pieces, and I try to fit stories like this into the missing spots without damaging the integrity of the entire puzzle. I like to think that this could very well be a plausible backstory for Rarity and Applejack. Thank you for reading and the lovely comment! :yay:

That was quite a heartwarming read. Very well done. Everypony was completely in character and the dialogue was excellent. Though it was very predictable, it didn't matter. Emotion was still achieved in that it managed to have that nice, snug feeling with which many stories of this type go too little or too far.

I'm rather amazed someone hasn't touched on Rarity and Applejack's history before, though I'm glad you got to it first (or so I'm assuming). I mean the plot could be canon and work swimmingly. Actually, were the show just a tid bit more deep, this could be its own episode. It certainly has that vibe.

Now on to finish your magnum opus. That story with the alicorns and the flights and somesuch.

"The second beginning of a beautiful friendship"? LOL! I see what you did there.

You did a great job instilling emotional grittiness into this fic. It was really believable. I can really see the two of them fall apart and then simultaneously face their demons.

You managed to work in the zap apple signs, AJ's visit to Manehattan, why there's no 2nd generation in the Apple family, the origins of Carousel Boutique, and do it in a package that would make a perfect episode! *tips hat to you*

I like this. A lot. Everyone is in character and we get an answer to a question that would probably work well were it to be broadcast.

Job well done. I never expected a 10 k story could have so much information about a lifetimes story.
I'm realy amazed what story you set behind these picture and the show itself. Makes me think about friends, worries and stuff.
Happy birthday out there, whatever your name is. :raritywink:
I was maybe tired, however i can say this fanfic flashed me a bit. I realy am awake right now, rarity that I get awake by reading .
(find the pony in the text)

"You are I are going to go get in front..."
"You and I are going..." maybe?
Wonderful story nevertheless.

Aww, that was awesome :) thanks for the magnificent late night read :raritystarry:

This is the first fanfic I have read as I've postponed it for months now. But I'm glad I did!

I actually teared up at a few parts :fluttercry: feeling the anger between Rarity and A.J., you really personified them well. Thank you for adding to the characters and back story. It doesn't encroach on the main story line and gives depth to the connection between them. I absolutely :heart: the allusion to the CMC with Rarity and AJ both trying to get their own cutie marks!

I hope to see more great works from you!


I'm going to have to read this, just for the simple fact that Rarity looks so badass in that cover art.

I don't normally like Rarijack, but in terms of friendshipping I can enjoy it. You write quite well, kudos to you sir.

This was lovely. In particular, I liked your snapshot story-telling technique, the short little scenes with filly AJ and filly Rarity. It was an economical way to tell the story, but each scene was able to convey a lot of depth and emotion. Thanks for writing and for sharing this.


I would love to see a spin off version of the show with a more adult storyline (as if that would ever happen, but still). I think my dream for the spin-off would involve Rarity and teen Sweetie Belle moving to Canterlot, where they meet new friends, try to break into high society, and develop SB's singing career. R's romantic interest would be some sort of dashing treasure hunter, and there could be adventure plotlines as well as "slice-of-life" stuff. :raritywink:

Glad you liked the story!


Thanks! I pride myself on working in lots of references to show canon, and filling in the gaps the series has left. Also, Casablanca is, far and away, my favorite movie.:ajsmug:


Thank you very much!


Friendships sometimes take a lot of work, and this is a good reminder that if you just leave them be, they will wither and die. In Equestria, where all of nature is dependent on the ponies to survive, I think the metaphor is perhaps even more apt.


Thanks, I fixed it. Hard to catch 'em all, you know? :raritydespair: So glad you liked the story regardless! :twilightsmile:


You're so very welcome, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Derpy really is a pretty great pony, by the way! :derpyderp2:


Thank you! I have always figured that Rares and AJ must have known each other growing up together in a small town. It made sense to me that they would both be a bit of outsiders as well, with AJ coming straight off the farm and Rarity her "too-fabulous-for-school" self, and that would draw them together. I'm really tickled that this story's emotional aspect worked for you, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :yay: :raritywink:


It's an amazing piece of art. You should go praise the artist!


I'm not a "shipper" of the Mane 6 either, but I do love exploring their relationships with one another. Rarity and AJ are the most interesting pair, for me.


Thank you! It was actually a pretty experimental style for me, and I was not sure it worked until positive feedback started coming in. I sort of wish I had stripped it down even more, to give the reader more space to figure out for him or herself what the characters are feeling. :raritywink:

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