Night Storm was born a Changeling to an old, unknown Hive. She left her Hive and went to Equestria for a better means of life, and decided to become a nomad, wandering Equestria until she dies. However, Changelings must feed. Yes, she takes some love here and there, but the Cobalt pony is rarely noticed or seen. The Cobalt coat and Sea Green mane are always seen on a Unicorn, Pegasus, and Earth Pony each, all with the same golden locket. Some pony can't make up her mind. After she finds a stallion finally worth keeping, Sword Right, a brown Unicorn with a dark red mane and a love for sharp tools and justice, can she trust him not to spill her secrets?
Chapters (16)
Not bad, but you must continue!!!
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
For a short and sweet intro to the story, I loved it.
However, you might wanna reword
As it sounds like they are separating, then the next lines come in.
Maybe around the lines of
Or something, idk.
The tension of revealing you are a monster leeching off someone without purposefully doing it. I can see great things ahead of this story, and it really sets a setting. INB4 featured. Will be favourited.
I do hope you are going to build on the tension, and not make it a quick acceptance. The paranoia in storms mind as he thinks about wether he truly loves her or wether she is playing mind games.
4553579
Thank you!!!
4554523 Yeah, I go a little fast. It's going to be much slower later on
4554248 Thank you, I'll definitely take it into consideration
4553594 Thank you
4555124
You are WELcome! Now! Give me a hug! 
4555174 *hug*
4555179
*hugs back* 
4557743 XD Thanks. But I hope you don't snort it, you'll get a
Thank you for the comments~ 
noseeye bleed... whatever you want to call it4557780
Another good chapter, can't wait for the next one.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4570143 Thanks!!
And thats it ?
4570860 Nope, it's not done.
This chapter does seam quite rushed, Story wise that is... I'll just have to see what the next chapter brings...
4571591 Thank you... I think?
Everyone is right, this is quite rushed. But maybe it's for the better, this way we get to see their relationship now instead of wasting time on lengthy exposition.
Personally I'm eagerly anticipating the next part, whether it's rushed or not.
4577798 Thank you very much~
Don't do anthro. There is no legitimate reason to do anthro, unless the plot absolutely requires it, and I am pretty sure a changeling x pony romance isn't going to absolutely require anthro.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4653360 Uh, well, it's not really your story, is it?
I mean, it's my story, I can do whatever I want, so... yeah. If you don't like it, leave me alone. 
Just go if you can't admire the story for what it is. 
4653360 Also, does 'Don't Hate, Appreciate' mean anything to you?
4653393 I actually do like your fic, it is just that anthro is frowned upon normally, and going anthro would put off a lot of potential readers, that is why I said not to do anthro.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4653764
Just because you have a hateboner for anthro doesn't mean every single person on the website does.
Authors shouldn't have to cater to people, they write what they want. Some people will hate it, some people will love it, but it's not the author's problem. If you don't like it, don't read it, simple as that.
4657369 Thank you
Makes me happy to know people like you are still in the world~ 
4657369 I actually don't really mind anthro, so no 'hateboners' here. I was just informing him that the community generally dislikes anthro unless there is a legitimate reason for it.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4657565
How do you know that? Did you conduct a survey?
In any case, it doesn't matter. Like I said, who cares if they dislike it?
4657581 I didn't do a survey, but I have been on here long enough to know what is popular and what isn't. Not to mention the fact that I have talked shop with various fanfiction writers and they have all told me that anthro is generally a bad idea if you want a decent following.
It really doesn't matter if he goes to anthro or not, but if he does, he could lose a few readers, and should be prepared in for that eventuality.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4657612
I've been here for a long time as well, you're the first person I've seen complaining about anthro.
Every author will lose a few readers every time they publish a story, no matter what it's about.
If they let that stop them nothing would ever get published.
But in any case, this whole conversation is pointless. Let's just stop arguing and let the lady focus on her story.
(also, author, you might want to add the Romance tag)
4657612 Okay, listen, I've been sugarcoating everything up to here, and you're pissing me off. One, I am a girl. Two, I don't give a shit what you think. Three, I am NOT on here for followers, I'm on here for good stories and to write. If you do not become a decent person and comment a bitchy ass comment about Anthro being 'bad' or however you put it, you are going to find yourself blocked. Have a lovely day and stop whining, or fuck off. :)
4657676 [hugs you] Thank you for being so kind, I'll put a romance tag on it too :D Also, you are a great person and I hope that other person becomes a decent enough individual. Thanks for backing me up back there
4658141 First, I was having a conversation with somebody else. Secondly, I didn't realize you were a girl, so sorry. Third, I was talking about readers, not followers. And fourth, I wasn't whining or complaining, I was having an intelligent conversation about the popularity and general dislike over anthropomorphic characters.
On a different note, what part of my well thought out and intelligently written comments do you consider 'bitchy ass'? Because I thought I was having an intelligent discussion, not 'whining' as you put it. Also, I feel like I am a decent person, after all, I have a solid moral standing and several good friends.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4658197 Oh, really? How about you talk to that person somewhere else instead of my stories where I can see it, huh? This is MY story, I have the right to talk to anyone on here and say whatever I want. You know why? IT'S MY FUCKING STORY. Either enjoy the story and stop commenting, or you will be blocked. This is your LAST warning. If you wish to continue speaking to anyone here on this page or any of mine, be respectful and don't say shit such as: the general don't like anthro. I don't give a fuck. So either be kind to me and everyone, or be blocked. Again, last warning!
4658141
I understand what you're saying, but honestly that was bit harsh. If they're making you angry it's best to either ignore them or tell them to go away. There's no need for personal attacks.
4658216 I guess you're right. I was just fired up a bit in the heat of the moment
However, I have had enough of their 'knowledge' about anthro stories. I'm done with it, so I lashed out. Oh well. 
In any case, moral of the story: writers write what they want, the demands of the public shouldn't matter.
Also, I just realized I never commented on the actual fic. I read this chapter earlier, and like I said, extremely fast paced.
But honestly that doesn't really detract from anything in my opinion, it's pretty nice and cute as is. Love it.
4658254 *blush* Oh, well, thank you!!
Means a lot to me! I already have the next chapter written, I'm just proofreading it to see if I like it.
Honestly, it is fast-paced, but I like it better this way. It just feels... natural, in one word. It feels like I can type whatever I'm feeling on my computer and they become my characters. To me, this is a great way to relieve stress.
4658214 Whoa, calm down for a moment, I was never being unkind to you, and I never said that there was anything wrong with anthro, just that most people tend to ignore fics that have that tag. Either way, that doesn't give you the right to curse me out when I was being perfectly respectful, and if you are going to block me, then so be it.
Also, I never said that I didn't enjoy the story, much to the contrary, I said that I did like this story decently enough to add it to my favorites list.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4658281 Sorry for being rude, but randomly saying or commanding me not to do anthro isn't very respectful, is it?
I just get annoyed when people bug the crap out of me. Sorry about it, uncalled for 
Anyways, just... stop talking about it being anthro. If you have to, imagine it isn't anthro. I mean, just don't come here and start saying "Don't do anthro, everyone dislikes anthro..."
To be perfectly honest, I don't really care what you think, so... yeah. :I
4658327 Well I am glad that the situation diffused, it was getting a tad bit tense for a moment. Also, the new chapter is pretty good.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4658394
Thank you~~~! 
well you got my attention, lets see where it goes.
well, i like it.
reminds me of an old girlfriend a long time ago.
4676208 Thanks
I completly don't get that part with radio
4677728 Okay... It's just a scene of randomness on my part. I thought it would be funny, so...
It's interesting to see how drastically Night changed. At the beginning she was quiet, calculating, reserved. Now's she's slowly turning into Pinkie Pie.